Your writing is fine but do try to maintain consistent character development as mc doesn't behave logically. Also the whole dungeon thing in gamer fics kills any tension and moreover this is a low tier world so I would rather the dungeon be less frequent....
I understand many people didn't like the last chapter but I'll have to repeat that I'm a newbie writer who's just trying to improve as he goes on. This is only the second fanfic I've written so I don't really know what readers like and what they don't. So I'm trying to improve every day.
The Twilight Gamer
Movies · WhiteAuthor
him making mistakes is not an issue but with how he chose intelligence over charisma, it should mean more and be more effective than its current portrayal. With how fast he can think, the 'I forgot to' excuse feels forced.
Tbh, I'm not very satisfied with this chapter but I wanted to make Jack someone who does make mistakes though whether my limited writing skills are managed well enough is another matter.
The Twilight Gamer
Movies · WhiteAuthor
this whole charisma check thing is getting old now......
"Of course not" Jack replied before turning his head and deciding to now answer anything else.
The Twilight Gamer
Movies · WhiteAuthor
but hyuga clan was also backward af and produced 0 s class ninja along with slavery.....
Both Might Guy and Rock Lee were inspired by the legendary martial artist Bruce Lee, especially with Rock Lee's Drunken Fist technique—a clear nod to Chinese culture. Then there was Neji Hyuga, a master of the Gentle Fist and Eight Trigrams, and Tenten, whose preference for wearing a qipao (Chinese dress) spoke volumes.
Ninja World: I Have a Life Simulator
Anime & Comics · Emik01
he should just give up and leave the village.....
While Akira still had the strength to continue fighting, he didn't bother to argue about his loss. Why? Because if they kept going, Naruto might just use the Sexy Jutsu again, and that was something Akira knew he couldn't defend against. So, he decided to concede defeat.
Ninja World: I Have a Life Simulator
Anime & Comics · Emik01
damn this fic is dead if he doesnt off her in next chapter lol
I am really waiting for the big payoff when karl just shows his true strength in front of all
damn its been 2 years already?!
Shishio had to admit that Hikigaya Hachiman's personality was interesting, but personally, besides kindness (Yasashi), he didn't see any good point in him. He knew that a lot of people loved Hikigaya Hachiman, considering Hikigaya's character might resemble them. Still, he knew that such a character wasn't attractive to a woman, especially when Hikigaya was a bit creepy and awkward most of the time.
I Refuse to Become Scumbag in Tokyo
Anime & Comics · akikan40
This setting kinda reminds me of a dxd fic where mc is a farmer devil
If both of them didn't inherit the Clan Traits of their respective Houses, the Devil Council, specifically the Great King Faction, would have happily declared both of the Houses Extinct.
DxD│A Devil with Three Essences
Anime & Comics · ChaosWriter
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original Half-Blood Prince's Tale
4.76
After being stuck in limbo for a long time, I finally saw hope and went through the light. Waking up as a young Severus Snape was not what I expected. Still magic was now a real thing and I can use it. Snape Si/oc. No harem. Disclaimer: I don't own anything.29 Chs 2.7k Colecciones
- original
The Half-Blood Prince's Quest{HIATUS/UNDERGOING REWRITE}
4.88
A guy dies and floats in nothingness for a long time almost driven to insanity there but it gets better when he wakes in the body of one young Severus Snape. Determined to never die again, he sets out on the path to immortality doing whatever it takes to achieve it. Features a Snape SI-OC, Calm Mc, Anti-hero Mc. No Harem. Long Chapter 5k- 10 words per ch. Update rate: Slow, once a week. Slow paced story progression Inspired by Dio Black's Half-Blood Emperor and Ouroboros Record ~Circus of Oubeniel~. Disclaimer: I own nothing. Note: English is not my first language so I might make mistakes and storytelling might seem rigid but I will do my best to improve. Constructive criticism appreciated. Also posting this on fanfiction.net under the same name. Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13637790/1/The-Half-Blood-Prince-s-Quest And Royalroad.6 Chs 758 Colecciones
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MHA: Villainous Conquest
4.89
What happens when Akira, a narcissistic man with a penchant for manipulation reincarnates in a world of superpowers? With a quirk deemed "villainous", he will do anything to rise in his new life even if its on the wrong side of the law. Disclaimer: I own nothing except my Mc and any Ocs I introduce in the fic. English is not my first language so my writing might seem dry but I will try my best to improve. Constructive criticism appreciated and thanks for reading. Also posting on royalroad,ffnet and scribblehub. ------------------------------------------------------- discord link: https://discord.gg/Ec6sMJ14 Chs 1.5k Colecciones
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The Master (A MHA Fanfic){DROPPED}
4.74
A budding psychopath dies in a mugging gone wrong and floats in limbo for a long time. After a fortuitous encounter with an unknown entity, he gets the chance to reincarnate in a world with a power. Now thrown in a world full of superpowers with the power to control minds, he sets on an epic journey of world conquest for fun and proceeds to create a new faction thus becoming the greatest villain the world has ever known. Disclaimer: I don't own My hero Academia as it is already owned by Kohei Horikoshi. Also I don't own Marvel and the cover that I am using. Note: This is my first story ever and my spoken language is not English. Constructive criticism appreciated. Thank you for reading this. Also posting on royalroad.20 Chs 1.7k Colecciones
social credits up. ....
It's like what capitalists do to squeeze workers, Takuya thought.
Naruto: I Traveled with a Max Level Account
Anime & Comics · Gered_Chuw