Helloooo, I love to write what I want to write
2020-08-02 Se unió Indonesia
Ah Ok noted and thanks again
ch 0 1 Daily Morning Walk
Fantasy · JJ_Prakoso
As for the Gazerman and the conversation it's more into setting about the world if you wanted to know the more information or showing what Hatoshi character is. Hope that explanation can help and thanks again for the comment
ch 0 1 Daily Morning Walk
Fantasy · JJ_Prakoso
Ah I see thanks for the critical comment and it is really helpful to further my skill and improvement for this novel. So thank you very much
ch 0 1 Daily Morning Walk
Fantasy · JJ_Prakoso
The story of this novel is quite intriguing and exciting at the same time as there are gods, Immortal realm, and many more mythical things happen from the book. However, my main gripe about the book and sorry to say this is sometime the book have too much telling information rather than showing. It also have a capital problem that you can check it out again. Regardless, it's still a joyful book to read and I'm looking forward in the future updates about this book and hopefully it can fleshed out more the interesting world.
Este libro ha sido eliminado.
It's lucky the mission isn't Consuming Human Flesh, lol
Este capítulo ha sido eliminado.
Fantasy · PewPewBoomSplash
Quite a good hook, but there is an issue in this chapter. First of all, there isn't much clear context on what really happening. So I suggest to give more description on what's really going on and elaborate more of how the character felt..maybe. Anyway it's my suggestion and it's okay for you to disagree.
Este capítulo ha sido eliminado.
Fantasy · PewPewBoomSplash
Sorry to say this, I think this dialogue felt belonged to a damaged robot, especially with the constant stuttering. Here's my suggestion and like before, its okay to disagree: "We..had d-detected an..Aura a-awakening."
Este párrafo ha sido eliminado.
Fantasy · Sharyanna
Thank you very much for the comment
ch 280 Time To Move on Into The Next Phase of The Colossal Battle
Sparror Volume 1
Fantasy · JJ_Prakoso