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ch 166 Chapter 166: Father and Child.
TV · Alittlepiggy33
Story was going along pretty well up until Stark came out. As soon as he came out the story stagnated with boring canon plot with even more boring MC actions. The story should just stick to the MC and not literally rewrite what happened in canon as whoever is reading fanfiction should already have knowledge about what they are reading about. Hopefully the story doesn't repeat the same crap again.
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So I guess he's a simp. He could of just mind wiped the part of him making the troll disappear or even appearing while they were in the bathroom, but instead went with the stupid decision and started blabbing about pretty much everything. I guess if you're a female he'll probably do whatever they ask or don't ask, pretty disappointing.
ch 29 Chapter 29: Explanation
Book&Literature · Ashmodai
And then the story was ruined. Why did you have to add random oc's that no one cares about. Could have chosen literally anybody that was actually written in detail in the book series but chose the same cliched people.
ch 21 Chapter 21: To Hogwarts
Book&Literature · Ashmodai
True she shouldn't be able to gain that much especially compared to how sasuke can only use chidori twice, which is less than canon.
ch 52 Sakura's Strongest Weapon
Anime & Comics · GrandMasterPK
Describing the anbu was unnecessary especially if it took most of the chapter to do so. You got them stop explaining every single little thing and write with the mentality that everyone who is reading this fic knows about the shinobi world through different fanfics or the series.
ch 50 Battle start
Anime & Comics · GrandMasterPK
Story is taking way to long to set up a plot. Its nothing but the MC simping over chicks left and right to then get dragged into their worthless drama that takes up a majority of every chapter. It's just a cycle that keeps repeating that I'm basically waiting for his new chick to want to just be friends so she can bang other dudes and then repeat with the MC agreeing to wearing a greenhat. Other then that the grammar is pretty good.
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Can you end Jenna's plot line already. You honestly made the girl to disgusting to be interested in her life let alone being the MC's chick.
ch 106 Chapter 106: Decathlon (4– Final)
TV · Alittlepiggy33
You have to stop calling the MC a magical ninja if he can't even use magic.
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*fic
ch 22 All out attack
Anime & Comics · GrandMasterPK
Why is he acting like a kid? I thought he was an old fogey.
ch 0 2 #2 Is this a dream
The Nameless Angel in Naruto
Anime & Comics · Animaniak