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MisterEnd0821

MisterEnd0821

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Just a veteran writer who writes with amazing twists of lores.

2022-03-08 Se unió Philippines

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From what I've read so far from chapter 1, I have to say it is a well written story. But small mistakes from those details derailed me from focusing. Like first you should fix whether it is first person pov or second person pov. And the first words from the paragraphs has lowered cases, try not to repeat this habit. But so far the writing quality and the world background is superb. The story is great and I do hope you learned more enough for me to take some samples of your writing quality. Good Job 👍

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That's a well written chapter.

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Your essay or Their essay?

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Add a apostrophe in this statement if this is what Y/N said

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Capitalized at the beginning

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Never put first person pov and second person pov together, just put Y/N.

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Also this, you should choose whether it is a first person or second person pov

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You should add some prepositions like as or whereas like that at the start of this paragraph. I just don't tend to put lowercase at beginning of the paragraph.

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Uhmmm the 9th and 10th paragraph is the same. Remove it at once

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