Webnovel Author: Epic_Gaming_7548 - Fanfic Collection

Leorio, maintaining the smile, replied to Trevor to Maintaining the smile, Leorio said "blah blah" we already know whos there you dont need to start every sentence with a name:

I like it a fair amount but do have critiques the writing: Sona: (smiling) "Riser, lost in thought again?" Riser: (turning to look at her) "Ah, Sona. You always appear at the right moments. Just contemplating the night." Sona, noticing Riser's serious expression, asks: "Is something wrong? You seem a bit tense." Riser, trying to dispel Sona's concern, replies: "No, nothing happened. Just thinking about the Rating Game." Sona, approaching Riser, puts a hand on his shoulder. Sona: "Riser, everything will go well. Tomorrow, we'll go to the underworld to meet our families and check out the Rating Game venue. Riser, relaxing a bit, comments: "Yes, seeing my family will be good. Especially Ravel, my sister. I want to spend some time with her before the showdown." Sona, agreeing, smiles: "Certainly. It's going to be an exciting journey. We're in this together, Riser. Now, let's rest. Tomorrow will be a busy day." Riser: (smiling) "You're right, Sona. Let's rest to face what the underworld has in store for us." its just a random sample but damn is it annoying, i mean the words in brackets are annoying enough you could just add 'riser said with a smile' instead of Riser: (smiling) which would make more sense but that's not even the most annoying bit, its written like a play. sona: says this. riser: responds this way. sona: (catatonic) blah blah. it's like its saying what to say and how to act rather than a novel or ff in this case. and its damn repetitive.

I mean Shinigami vs ninja is one sided anyway because the Shinigami can't be seen, you would need either, someone with the spirit technique(whatever dan used) or just be sage of six paths, or maybe a fuinjutsu master? maybe? idk what else? reaper death seal?

good writing, no story, almost one shots, couldn't read more than ten chapters, again the writing is good but the transitions are trash and so is the character development. I'm tempted to ask you to find a writer with trash smut and collab, in fact that goes for like all your smut I've skimmed and it's well written but no story

decent quality of translation, not many grammatical errors but a couple names and repeating paragraphs come up. The main reason i give such a mid score is because like 5 percent of the story is missing, and its like important bits, like the sacred contract came out of nowhere and besides copying Hermione and fluffy there wasn't a mention of him copying the phoenix or dragon and why is it now called a soul ring? and thats all of the top of my head

this bit isn't a review but a question? or a series of statements with a question in the mix? so when he goes from tide master to tide dominator (red to orange rarity) it says he goes form one lake of mana to TEN and that he could beat ten of himself/ten times stronger and he was level like 15 or something, then 100 chaps (360ish) later he's level 35 or so and gets double suppressed (being on land and mana suppressed) and it says he's lost 90% of his mana or something, so... wouldn't he still be a level 35 legacy tier combatant? cause you know... he was ten times stronger... but could only use 1/10? but instead he had access to 'a trickle of mana' and could control almost no water until he used his domain skill

finally... FINALLY, I've found out what ROB stands for

i've been told yes

it like 99% about nigel's humor

really like the ff, quality is great, same with updates(1 chap a day i think) development is 'only' 4 stars cause it isn't 'fast enough' but in reality there's just a lack of chapters and I'm used to binge reading books. there's also the fact that i don't want to give 5 stars despite really liking the book and here's why; it hits a pet peeve of repetitiveness that i dislike, if something is stated to be a way, no need to keep saying it over and over, occasional reinforcement is best imo, what i mean is dryness (literally) every time Nigel comments it says "with dryness" "with his usual dryness" "with his usual dry humor" it happens sooo much in the beginning and although decreases in the middle and newer chapters it really annoyed me in the beginning second; Dumbledore using something (legilimancy? Imperio? probably not, it says compelling spell) anyway, i think it gives Dumbledore too much credit especially related to Hermione there was almost no way he knew she was gonna be so great at magic unless he influences her studies too? it feels like a forced plot (ron's fine tho due to order of phoenix stuff, wanting harry to be influenced to join his faction later) third, he matures too fast with bad explanation imo, especially since there are easy ways to make it make sense, like occlumency being the reason, with his mind being more ordered/rational, or the simulation thing, that makes him experience more in a shorter time p.s: I've only read 61 chapters and usually binge 60 -120 chaps at a time so I've come around to read again (don't ask why increments of 60 idk)

really liked the ff, it was a bit over the top at the start but it was almost like the writer evolved after the first like 50 chaps and the story kept getting better although there were a few things that were off, like the gold coins to qi luck wasn't well transitioned and the system practically disappeared. also for bleam: qi luck is like good destiny, as long as theres qi luck, fate won't betray you, and it's developed like good karma usually(good leads to good) so when he has a lot of subordinates with strong fate he can get a bit of it in the form of qi luck, and in the same vain if he has a high position, the people below him(civilians) give him a steady supply of qi luck, in Chinese culture(I think) qi luck is something for like the development of a dynasty, like it's this ethereal thing that makes people treat there commoners better(cause if they don't the dynasty's qi luck will decrease and the dynasty might fall) thats all i can remember off the top of my head (i think it's also like merit/ heavenly merit in this case if you know what that is)

i really like the novel, ive only read like half so far but it's top 2 for fairy tale fics. with that said some questions does she know how to make a hogyoku? and i haven't seen thousand year blood war but is there a second release or something? also second magic origin? does he get it with bankai or does he develop like second magic or just neither. thats all, thanks, i really like the book

I really enjoy this story, great progression and i like the occasional introspection that shows he needs comedic relief to stay sane (at least thats what i think) with this said do you think you could add something to show how long he's been alone? like say "he placed a block a day cause nothing ever changed" and then have him visit it only for there to be like 300,000 blocks or something absurd (like 800 years i think) or just any number to show significant isolation. i think it would be good due to the lack of signifiers for time passing.