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Haunter really is the star of this show. Like the parts with him are the most interesting.

Who would hate this. His story was so sad in original, anyone who can do something about it and chooses not to is bad.

seeing as last chapter ended in "end of novel" I'm assuming these are extras?

I feel like you forgot earlier parts of the story. He is already awake to realities of this world with the whole getting grandfather and his grandfather's pokemon disabled backstory. From that event he was already of the mindset to get strong. I don't understand why he's having a larger breakdown over people he's not actually related to. Did you forget how dark you made the MC's initial training plan? Gastly was devouring poison cores and crippling pokemon. Charmander was hunting and eating dead Ekans and stuff. He then sold pokemon on the black market and then used funds to buy pokemon that he killed and fed to Gastly. Alex has personally killed others. I think some of the shadow gang guys but for sure he killed the poachers in green village. You made this cool dark MC, a guy mentally older than 11, but now you are making him act his age. The event you are using to direct this growth is less impactful than events experienced in the past, which makes this feel super fake.

#Mental anguish #Trauma This version of the MC who suddenly cares society is idiosyncratic with that guy I read about earlier. I thought he was cold. Like look at how he trained Gastly or the black market selling of pokemon. His cold blooded killing when escaping shadow. Seriously I remember him cold blood killing the green village poachers. I just don't understand why he's all traumatized now but not earlier? Smaller numbers make it more personal, so he should be more impacted by personally killing others than he is by his leadership leading to deaths. The hard numbers don't really help more than they hurt. Compared to the millions in town, 40k dead or injured is nothing. That's like less than 4% of one million. Pokemon deaths are even less of a deal, those are replaceable and from what we are told bonds only matter for advanced+ trainers. Plus like I mentioned earlier anyone who sells pokemon on black market shouldn't pretend to care about pokemon.

The second half of this volume just felt off. Like a perfect mix of cringe and filler that made me want to drop the story. I'd rather timeskip past any personality changes than have them shown like this (aka poorly). I felt like every other sentence was like "this is going to change him" or "he won't be the same person" and honestly that's fine to say once, but not once a chapter. Honestly this half of this arc made me wish the MC was older from the start. No one would be happy following lead of 10 year old, and any avenues to mitigate that feel absolutely cringe inducing.

That was vision. Crushed into a ball. If I was in the room and saw that I'd probably mentally BSOD.

I'm just saying Steven is my pokemon idol. He's a champ, rich, and handsome.

I hope his grandpa gets healed up, but yeah that trip probably saved his grandsons life. Out MC needed a firm lesson to realize this world isn't a game.

I like how time travel is fair game. Looking forward to seeing it happen, lol.

This was fun to read, can't wait for more.

This is one of my favorites.