Synopsis
Her limbs were numb.
Her blood was dried out.
Dark purplish veins were making a long stretch around her pale skin.
No scent, no feelings.
Nothing but body.
Walked like dead
And lived in death.
She walked through out the woods for how many times it is, day after day with fellow deadmen.
It is funny, she thought. She can clearly think.
Hungry but not with flesh, dead but alive.
But one thing is a fact; she isn't human, because the dead treated her as one.
Then everything took a swift turn when a military unit invaded the woods.
Now will they unfold this phenomenal incident?
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A|N:
Covers mine.
ENGLISH is my third language and I'm open for constructive criticism on my grammar thank you
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- Conception des personnages
- Contexte du monde
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Well, it's still beggining but it already had a good flow. I'm not really like the zombie loving guy but I love things like zombie features. Some Zombie features is just good. Like Zombie man. 😂
I have to say, it's a really nice novel! It built up the suspense in a good way, which made me read further. The only thing I'd suggest is to make the first chapter a bit more vague. We don't know what the Holshire (did I write it right?) woods is, nor we don't know what the Academy is. Of course, we get to know about them in the later chapter, but as we didn't know about them in Chapter 1, using the names made it feel a bit disorienting. Perhaps use some vague words like the "dark woods" or something, instead of using the actual names. Otherwise, great story so far! Looking forward to the future chapter!
Good plot premise so far with the zombie protagonist especially, militaries seem to like experiments lol. Also liked the world building to tell the story. Good luck
The story is amazing. It will most likely have a variety of zombies, but one zombie-like in warm bodies? This is something new I haven't seen here, but the main character being a female, was probably obvious. The quality is nice, the background of the story seems to be great.
I have to admit I enjoyed it. The story is solid. For grammar if you use google docs it should pick up about 70% of the glaring errors. I recommend you use that in the future it will greatly help you in your writing and you will also learn what to watch for when writing.
It has been a while since I last read a zombie apocalypse novel. You have a unique story with you, my friend, and I hope you can continue writing. The prologue is really engaging! I love zombies, mate! So, 4.5/5 stars! The .5 is the other grammatical errors and "Telling". There are some words/sentences that need commas, so you better watch out for that when you edit the chapters. Besides that, the "Show, not tell." This technique is a bit tricky, but once you get the hang of it, your story will bloom everywhere in no time!
The story isn't bad in the least. It's intriguing and would've recommended it however there are many grammatical errors (confusion and mixing of past and present tense in the same sentence). The update schedule on the story is a bit confusing but other than that, not bad. Just try to either get an editor to fix the chapters or look over them your self. Have a nice day!
I like this kinds of story. I take a look at it and could not stop reading. Great thought! Nice work! Keep it up! I appreciate it! 😊😊😊😊😊👍👍👍👍👍👍
A novel like warm bodies! Wow 😮 It was so long since I have encountered such Novel just like it...Good luck with your work and so far, I haven't seen something to correct on. So kudos! This by far has a good writing style and narration and all in all a good plot progression! Wow!