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Thanks for the chapter. Now you just need to clarify why there is so much noise, destruction and whatever and no one noticed, you must remember the environment where the character is always, the consequence that the ninjas detect all the movements in their respective village is obvious. My advice. Find a white sheet of paper and draw the MC and his opponent. It doesn't matter if the drawing is from a 5-year-old child. The important thing is that you draw the surroundings, if there are witnesses or neighbors, the weather, the alley, how many meters has and the height at which it flew with the rock.

well to the time jump, now all that remains is to kill all the irregularities of society in the style of batman fucion youker

You always end it in the best part, you leave open endings and after a week a chapter of 369 words... go up more, more more

well, that sandy guy is going to have an accident

I have no idea about grammar, I just know that when you learn to write in a different language, you write better than in your mother tongue, because when you write in English, for example, you don't put regional marks or words. There is the English of England, the United States and Australia, I don't know how many differences each one has because they have had their own settlements for so long that there are words that are written and spoken differently.

Thanks for the chapter, you are improving at writing, now you just have to add more articles like movies and something original of yours to make it a good fanfic, maybe you can make the world bigger by introducing more countries, ethnicities or whatever. In a Naruto movie, a very technologically advanced country for the time of Naruto attacks Konoha, perhaps you can introduce technological elements, for example Orochimaru has cloning technology...

I Want MORE... Tftc.

Thfc

It's late but I hate Sakura, she was totally useless and even abusive towards Naruto, not only was she useless all the seasons loving a traitor... even as a mother she is useless, her daughter came out with myopia, a short-sighted Uchiha, yes the clan Uchiha lived, she would be killed for ruining her blood

The dialogues are more important because they guide the plot and give it life.

I want more

Modernization would be a very good idea for the novel, imagine an airship and Greek fire raining down on the frozen zombies, plus the storm keep has an obsidian mine, in that world it is magical if I'm not mistaken, good for killing the undead.