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criticism is so that you improve not to just laugh it up... people continue to read and comment because they feel there is scope for the idea to turn into a very good novel...but in the end it's up to author to truly get to the height

am I the only one who found the idea of golems talking dumb...I mean they can get battle intelligence n all but talking like a person means he need to be alive that means that is not a golem.. couldn't continue reading more than that idea was cool but execution left me wanting

you clearly have no idea how Harry Potter World works....time Turner is not used like how you are using randomly again and again..like he went back to morning then again in that morning he went back in ministry .all too rushed to character changed too suddenly..

very boring..read 15 chapter but this is plain boring...

different novels different genres some that are on top of my mind God of fishing super gene complete martial arts attribute loosing money to be tycoon ( although after some time I lost interest there was no romance till 700) I could suggest more if you like..you can tell me a few names too I feel I have read almost all the available ones that I feel are good.

have you read some good fanfic .there are so many ways you can improve mc without him being op...it's like after mc met Sirius he became even more average everything he did was before Hogwarts ..he knows voldi is coming but not preparing he is not at all serious about being strong and you are also more focused on avg mc..well I loved your writing before train ..he was smart wandless magic and all but now it's vomit

went from great to worst in a chapter...the moment he met Sirius black James ppotter ent from smart to the one we read in actual book...prank and quidditch that's all his life is about..I don't say stop this..but he stopped training stopped studying .he was supposed col and smart and went to become dumb and annoying .. literally in one ch you write James would rather spend time wasting with Sirius than in Library .I was happy to find a good fanfic but you ruined it the moment he met Sirius ..fcuk you author and a lot of slangs I said to you in my mind..

if possible I would rate this in negative for story...good plotline but ruined by idiot author...after bulbasore arc I can't handle this shit anymore ..

simp mc for Hermione ....giving out his secrets like candies ....author only simps...

it was all good until mc decided giving out his abilities to golden trio without any reason .was a good idea... there were so many ways he could have told about quirill but he told about his abilities to them...that means everyone will know about it...shit at plot ..mc just looks for a reason to become pug for trio ... author always tries to add them together . forced plot..good concept ruined by authors kidish ideas ..

sorry after reaching ch42

author is a kid..this book is like a wish fulfilment book...no base pure op mc just go over it literally mc becomes OOOOOPPPP without doing anything...he randomly creates spells ... amateur writing...read some good novels..dropped after ch30

very poor ..mc is weak mentally ..very chaotic thought . complaining about one thing and when he gets it he cries...writer are you a kid because writing feels by an amateur .danzo control his life even when he is not there... author has no clue how to write fanfic...he doesn't trains but complains about being great... he can train sensor who will know but he gets panic attack... being a sensor he can sense root..

author has no idea how to write a book..plot all over the place ..he is writing whatever he wants with no actual base .

fake review .. horrible grammer