Now THIS is a great story. I feel like the tense is a little... off putting however. “He walks away” “he walked away”. the second sounds better right? I feel like this story is an amazing plot, The characters feel so real, The world design is great. however i feel like it would have worked better in past tense format. but who knows, This is just my opinion. very good :)
Eastern · Grand_Void_Daoist
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Webnovel
Now THIS is a great story. I feel like the tense is a little... off putting however. “He walks away” “he walked away”. the second sounds better right? I feel like this story is an amazing plot, The characters feel so real, The world design is great. however i feel like it would have worked better in past tense format. but who knows, This is just my opinion. very good :)
Walker Of The Worlds
Eastern · Grand_Void_Daoist