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2021-02-06 Joint Global
That me -_- reading about handsome and sexy face Gerald when I have read all the books on Witcher ( for people that don't know , witchers in fact are not sexy and beautiful but their body is stained with ugly scars, their bodies are very and very lean without extra pump or muscles they are quite dystropthic and ugly, since they are forced to starve all the time. In fact there is so little pay and so little monsters left in Witcher that sometimes they are not able to feed themselves at all and forced to find food in forest and survive like this for months and more) So yeah witchers are scary, unless u like men with scars all over the body almost without a single clean piece of flesh and who looks very lean and dystropthic.
ch 10 Chapter 9: Good morning
Movies · Ax_nevermay_cry
at this point , every superhero and villian had some character development ,but mc. just delete him from position of mc and make him another overpowered nobody that sometimes shows up to give riddles to actual characters of the book and thats it. But for real, arcs with supposed to be a mc are one chapter long , arcs without him ever appear is 3-5 chapters long. ..
ch 66 Chapter 66 Let There Be Light
Anime & Comics · Thirty_six_Hours
why the language is so awkward? is it a translation?
ch 0 6 Acting School
Anime & Comics · Raj
it would be logical if villagers were the same as in the game, like silent guys with big noses that only hum and do some jobs that they are assigned. here they are fully human like and takes mc for the god presumably will never betray his as well. while dothrski are guys that kill each other for fun. and they hate magic, so why by this point in time he is not challenged by every fifth of his horde is a question and the fact that he was unmounted from his horse is like a death to a dotraki. their culture has this specific topic about being about to stay in the saddle and if not ,said one to be abandoned, killed or whatever, but definitely not being esteemed leader that everyone fearsfears. it's just doesn't make sense since any experienced fighter can tell as much as he is a noob at fight and while also WEARING armour he is fight foes while being a dotraki, that DON'T wear armor since it is an indication of being a little girl and weak.
ch 13 Chapter Thirteen: Heavyweight.
TV · Marcia_05
I rly fail to see his motivation to keep those savegaes near him he has unlimited amount of loyal man that won't run to ur enemy as soon as ure deafed, yet he still keeps them near, while all they can do is pillage and fight, which is the least important things when it comes to creating ur own kingdpm..
ch 13 Chapter Thirteen: Heavyweight.
TV · Marcia_05
I have no idea what I just read. all i remember is phrase about him growing stronger and stronger and stronger. Basically this is all this story is about, sadly. Someone who wishes for plot and something that flows like river this is not what u could possibly enjoy. there is one event followed by another, and all in one chapter and from all perspective leaving basically 0 character development and leaving no chances to simply understand wtf is going on here. Even in Wishfullfilment stories there is plot and interactions that hold for longer than one phrase from a character albeit, sadly not in this story
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very inconsistent. Child that is 15 years old, that should have behaviour that is fitting for strict and cold person, in a matter of minutes changes in a way that is not possible. if he never was loved , how could he understand what love is? so my conclusion is that u are writing about a guy who has some mental disease, since in RL it is not possible to change youtself in a matter of seconds
ch 0 4 First birthday
Book&Literature · Nathe07
finally! someone that is brave enough to kill those 2! ! GO FOR IT MAN, LEGEND
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13 chapters yet we are still in the stage where story didn't start. synopsis talks about one thing here we have some useless development when a guy is part of the game and nothing more. well it's boring ,hopefully u move to the actual plot of fan fiction soon....
ch 13 Calm Before The Storm
Anime & Comics · Reyviel_Faesly
same question never seen one mc that took first want and it was good enough
"The materials include a tail feather from a particularly ancient Phoenix bird and the core of a hundred-year-old Elder tree.
Book&Literature · bobthewriter
almost every Chinese novel about cultivation and systems are almost identical , they have thurthfully one of the most multiversal scale stupidity and 99 ℅ of the enemies are the young masters that grow like mushrooms in the season(but there is always someone behind YM like his dad , than his grabddad tha his sect master than master of the sect that controls this sect from the shadow than God of the sect than sect they God partake in) the scale just goes into infinity. good part is that author can write somethinh like this with ease since it does not require any plot. However there are decent Chinese novels but they almost all the time share one thing, SCALE! What is that thing with thousands of realms to reach and endless pop up of enemies. this is my opinion but almost like frustration since I read that 1 star is too low for this kinda novel. no offence for translator or ppl that like it
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where is this anxiety comes from? why is he paranoid about his strength? it seems that the characters was bullied all of his life and can't accept that there is anyone absolutely anyone stronger than him. yet he had not faced a single threat. He always talks about making someone stronger , but doesnt want to take big steps in this direction , he sits on his butt doing research for himself by himself , instead he could become famous in field of science and create a team that will help him. but I guess his sick paranoia that makes him wish to be the absolute strongest can't allow to trust others. I also can't seem to find the reason he makes all this serum other than empower himself , yeah sister go ahead be vampire never have a chance of having a baby be a cold blood corpse without having control of your own desires. sorry but I just don't seem to find his care for anything other than himself. he talks about worries for family yet his actions don't really match that much, his main concern in only about himself. I have no idea what author wanted to show but this is what I see. so it is only my personal analysis of the character
ch 16 Sixteen
Anime & Comics · outsidr
well one thing that is off is overpowered tag , that's not the case here , so not to mislead maybe change it to strong character since he is strong but actually overpowered characters can play baseball with his head
ch 20 20 - Emergency
Anti-NTR Man: Kokujin No Tenkousei NTR Ru VERSUS
Anime & Comics · Hazy_0832