ZALTARR_ABASSI

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Writer for fun 😋✌

2021-02-24 Joint Sri Lanka
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ZALTARR_ABASSI
4 months ago
Posted

Loved the story. Wish there were more chapters. Though I personally would have loved the mc to be a bit colder yet fun like Dante.

ZALTARR_ABASSI
ZALTARR_ABASSI
1 years ago
Commented

At first I thought that I lost another good novel but mannnnnn.. that was an epic turn around. Honestly I was kinda mad about his lack of anger in previous chapters. A bit of cold hearted action in a GOT is necessary.

ZALTARR_ABASSI
ZALTARR_ABASSI
1 years ago
Replied to scyfly

it doesn't really matter how big an army comes against him does it. One virus and all will end. Then collect all the bio matter from the dead, mass produce killing machines like xenomorphs and bam.

ZALTARR_ABASSI
ZALTARR_ABASSI
1 years ago
Posted

It started ok, but gets worse. The whole story is about doing a mistake, self loathing, and then correcting the mistake. The whole Ai thing is too weird too. like technically mc created it so in a way he created his daughter in the image to be a wife🤮. Gven too. It would have been a much better story if the writer gave up the harem, sticked with charmcaster, removed the over sentience of the Ai, used the wishes properly!!!! The current situation is also weird since as a perfect body no bloodline should affect his mentality and emotions. overall not the best read but still readable since its one of few ben 10 fanfics. Be warned though, its gonna be really annoying.

ZALTARR_ABASSI
ZALTARR_ABASSI
1 years ago
Posted

great start. wish it had more chapters. recommend you to read.

ZALTARR_ABASSI
ZALTARR_ABASSI
2 years ago
Posted

shity ending. stop after tensura arc. beyond that if you are desperate for a story go for the seven deadly sin arc but no way i hell go for the madoka arc. the mc loses all his family loved ones and powers i that shit. so stop while its still good.

ZALTARR_ABASSI
ZALTARR_ABASSI
3 years ago
Posted

the story is great overall and fun to read but returning back to one piece his debuff is waaayyy too much. I mean instead of all those otherworld travelling he could have teleported to a more peaceful island in one piece and trained to a much more powerful self. If all those powers gained from other worlds only account to a level even lower than buggy, its better to jst train in one piece itself than wasting that much time. Another thing which weirds me out is he has a whole mansion and stuff in him WITH ley lines but he himself can't use magic. Since its in his soul wouldn't he be able to access that ambient magic. Anyway other than that it was a really great read, specially the HP arc is better than most hp fanfics.

ZALTARR_ABASSI
ZALTARR_ABASSI
3 years ago
Posted

The story is really cool and i do enjoy it a lot but, why would a guy who literally burned to death and nearly died to a troll not use the full power at his disposal to make himself unkillable. I can't really imagine any living being who went through such a death and died under a fire unable to do anything about it due to his powerlessness would weaken himself and put his life in mortal danger again.

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    Lone Dreamer

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    A lone soul lost in an abyss of unknown dreams of a world to keep his sanity. The beginning of an omniverse fuelled by the imagination of a delusional once mortal being. English is not my native language so there will be a lot of mistakes, so sry and plz bare with it. Constructive criticism is appreciated to further improve the story.

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