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is it implying that the story/destiny of a martial spirit would impact their holder's story/destiny?

He's not Wolverine. This isn't marvel comics.

Have a bunch of experience with people who have amnesia and are rescuing someone they know that was captured as prisoners of war eh?

So is Lin Feng actually dead? The ending was a little anti-climatic. I am guessing this means another "protagonist" will appear.

Just a bit of constructive criticism, but you gotta work on expressing your ideas about the story. You keep repeating the same thing over and over again, but with different words. I don't need to read 3 times about how Destiny Day is super important for everyone cause it determines their future. I got that the first time. It gets frustrating for the reader when in every chapter you repeat the same information in 3 different ways. 1, it makes it seem like you're trying to use filler to make the story more robust. 2, it can also make it seem like you're treating the readers like we're idiots.

Slaughter for sin points woooooo!

Sounds good and all until he gets tortured to death over and over and over again. Eventually his mental will break and he will become useless.

Haha but he'll never be able to escape. All Mal has to do is search for him through the darkness.

Time for some character growth and a reality check.

His secretary can die horribly with him later on. Would be fitting.

Angels always annoy me to no end. Always act all righteous and arrogant while the humans they protect tortured a little girl and she did nothing to stop it and still acts like she's in the right. Hope she is tortured.

I don't understand a single thing that you wrote.

Alex tries killing Malachi and it unleashes the beast. Woooo

I feel a little bad for Maria.

I think there was a typo in the author comment. *3 more cliff hangers left* XD

SIMP

Your book is far better than alot of other novels. Writing just like everything else takes practice. You know those cool trick shot videos that make you amazed. What you never see is the hours of fails it took for them to succeed. Same with reading a good book. You never see the hours of failed novels the author wrote before to get to novel you are reading. Keep up the good work.