Nathan_Rouwhorst

Nathan_Rouwhorst

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2020-10-11 Unito Global
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Nathan_Rouwhorst
2 months ago
Posted

Lots of potential but poor translation/grammar hold it back.

Nathan_Rouwhorst
Nathan_Rouwhorst
3 months ago
Commented

Man I gotta say I was really hoping that the exams weren’t gonna take a ton of chaps - I want to see him grow not waste time on a exam that doesn’t matter. I really like the idea of him growing quietly in the background.

Nathan_Rouwhorst
Nathan_Rouwhorst
3 months ago
Posted

Garbage - there’s so much backstory missing and plot holes it’s not even funny. There’s no explanation or why the MC does stuff as were just expected to know. While the characters somehow know all about a game thats brand new to them.

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Nathan_Rouwhorst
11 months ago
Posted

This story has a lot of potential despite a few writing gaps (poor grammar, etc). Nothing that can’t be fixed by proof reading. My biggest concern is actually the MC - I feel like he’s constantly worried but doesn’t take action to change. He’s worried about politics and being used but then allows himself to be used constantly. He also worries about his sisters WAY too much. Like at some point his parent should be stepping up given that he’s not even 10 yet.

Nathan_Rouwhorst
Nathan_Rouwhorst
1 years ago
Posted

So far this is a pretty good novel with my biggest complaint being names of characters keep changing. To me this shows laziness on the writer or poor translation.

Nathan_Rouwhorst
Nathan_Rouwhorst
1 years ago
Posted

This story is convoluted to say the least - I don’t understand the direction, leveling system, or characters. There’s a lot of potential here but in needs to be refined and reformatted. Often times too much detail is given or the story just jumps expecting you to connect the dots.

Nathan_Rouwhorst
Nathan_Rouwhorst
1 years ago
Posted

I truely regret spending coins to bulk buy chapters. After ch45 ish the entire story changes, the focus no longer is on the gods but their children. What’s the point of naming the story guardian gods if the only significant thing they do is give birth.