Dantali0n

It irritates me that there are only swords in the cultivation novels. No matter how well written the novel is, I always deduct 1-2 points if the main character's primary weapon is a sword, because I can predict 50-60% of the character's further development. And the combat systems start to decline in quality, because there's nothing interesting about them, they just write about how they swing swords and ignore spells. Especially if, as in this novel, the main character has a special ability that makes him stronger, but they stupidly create limitations for themselves because of their choice of weapon. I think modern cultivation novels should rely on the magical component, because there are too many cultivation novels in which the main character limits himself with a sword.

Well, judging by what you read, you've reached a damn high level. Any disabled person can write texts using artificial intelligence. But I've never seen such brazen copywriting before.

I liked everything. But seriously? The main character has special eyes and chooses a sword as his weapon. I noticed long ago that the authors of “cultivation” lack the imagination to write about anything other than swords. But with eyes like that, the obvious choice for the main character would be a bow and arrows.

When Irina appeared, things were more or less normal. But when she began to show interest in him and suggest absurd things, the main character began to behave like a character in a second-rate Chinese novel. He stopped being the great businessman he was in his past life, started giving in, and stopped setting his own terms. He started to look more like a boy who couldn't stand up for his opinion. And also, releasing some kind of virtual reality that was absurdly high-tech by the standards of the time in the novel (even if it was just an idea). The world is not ready for this. I mean that the world's technology has not advanced enough to justify this technology. This is such a stupid mistake, especially when considering the theme of the United States, which is used in most novels. This either shows the stupidity of the hero, which is very unlikely, or the stupidity of the author, which is more likely.

So far, I like everything. Regarding chips, I wrote that telling people you have a chip design that is decades ahead of its time is worse than saying you have a nuclear bomb design. And it's a little confusing that mс doesn't take brain pills every day. He can make 10 such pills at a time, which work for 24 hours without side effects. The advantages of this are that he uses his time more rationally, I think he is more calm in stressful situations, which can help in any negotiations, and, well, he can easily learn something new at the same time, or at least subjects for university.

I think it's your best novel with cutting edge technology. The first novel was okay, but was a failure, both the cacheback system and the main character, for he was downright stupid. The second novel only got a glimpse, but because of the system, again a failure. And this novel is the best of yours. But in my subjective opinion, the relatives interfere with the narrative at least because of too much emphasis on them. + really dislike David being the face of the company because of the Protagonist's minority. He does not cause me trust, although he loves the mother of the protagonist (perhaps it is necessary, but I have not yet read to the appropriate moment or it is not laid down by the author).

On top of that, in the novel, literally all the projects, all the conflicts follow the same script. The dialogues are also the same. Constant repetition of the same emotions “ smirked”, “scoffed”. It's literally in all chapters and often it just looks ridiculous, at least in such a huge number of times. If, briefly, if you divide this novel into different storylines (Conflicts, projects, work, etc.), the difference will only be in the words and the construction of these moments goes under the copy. I am not a native English speaker, so maybe some specific words were not translated as I wanted them to be

The Title is good. To me, the main character with the information he has in his usb shouldn't pay attention to learning at first, especially since he has pills for quick learning. On top of that, his dead weight in the form of his friends makes the narrative itself very bad. To me, the main character should be like Samantha in the beginning of Doing It All Alone. As an example of this, there is a title in which the protagonist has a yusb with which he can pull items from movies. And at any given time he can cast off friends or family. In this story, it's his friends at the beginning and his father and brother.