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Lad reborn in an alternate version of Ben Tennyson, in which the summer journey begins when Ben and Gwen are 15. The main character knows the canon very well and will use his knowledge.
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I don't know English at all, so I use Google Translate for translation. I hope it won't be that bad
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the author doesn't have common sense, in the second chapter the MC was fawning about how he doesn't have any hair on his body except his head which is obvious because he has not gone through puberty. the authors English is also terrible
Characters are dull and have no depth, this guy has thick plot armor whenever he has to talk to someone, they always believe him, do what he says, they always say how he's perfect and chooses the best method super duper quick. Gwen and Grandpa Max are soooo robotic in this story. Grammar is a low priority for this author considering that words are missing sometimes and they spoken English is very basic at best.
After reading the description I'm very hyped to read it and I hope it won't get dropped untill chapter 300+ .
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Gwen is less inteligent than the original and grandpa Max is also lot more less vigilance than the original.ashley's character is not interesting
Idea behind this story is good but in my humble and personal opinion it's gone the wrong way starting from the chap 2 and it became something ı can't read (it's my opinion of course there will be people that like this book but it's not my cup of tea)
great story don't drop it please 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺
Good story development so far but I think a little more character interaction is needed. Otherwise it's going brilliantly. 😁😁😁😁😁👍👍👍 [img=recommend]
Idk man just so many grammar errors and inconsistencies. I really can't stand this novel but I'm glad you're happy to write it as I'm an old Ben 10 fan. Maybe just re-read it and fix the spelling and grammar mistakes.
A frankly boRing story with some of the worst grammar i have ever seen. Just putting the raws or whatever in google translate would probably be better and if this is not A translation ooof because The graMmar and structuring is appaling
it's just plain it is like you are writing an essay on some topic or writing an exam 😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑
Well instead of Ben 10....it should be something like me and my perfect life after Omnitrix... everything was just too good...no hardships...no challenge....in the end i know mc will save the day....he got girls and magic....it's just too good to be story....
Really good ben 10 fic, i have seen a lot of ben 10 fics and none of them is this good and interesting Really looking forward to see how it goes
It started ok, but gets worse. The whole story is about doing a mistake, self loathing, and then correcting the mistake. The whole Ai thing is too weird too. like technically mc created it so in a way he created his daughter in the image to be a wife🤮. Gven too. It would have been a much better story if the writer gave up the harem, sticked with charmcaster, removed the over sentience of the Ai, used the wishes properly!!!! The current situation is also weird since as a perfect body no bloodline should affect his mentality and emotions. overall not the best read but still readable since its one of few ben 10 fanfics. Be warned though, its gonna be really annoying.
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Inconsistent detail elements. A pure skimmer for me..........................................................................................
great fanfic one of the only three that are worth reading ....please don't drop ......peace .. ........................................................................................................................................................................
the idea of the story is not bad for the author did not give due importance to the characters and the depth of their actions making a shallow story
This is the best Ben 10 fanfiction I've come across so far. The author has done an excellent job expanding the world and incorporating the Jack Friday family into the story. They've also made changes to the canon lore that makes more sense than the original version. The characters are well-developed and there's an interesting arc involving time travel and the first version of Ben 10k, which takes a darker turn. Overall, the story is very engaging. Though I do have to mention that there is a harem aspect to it. Despite this, I highly recommend giving it a read.
This story is just author's weird dreams of being perfect and have a harem writen out. It started pretty well but it got over the top quickly, in the second chapter alone, he at IQ 280 unlocks telekinesis and telephaty... he 'thinks' that at 290 he'll unlock pyro and cryo. He makes an female AI, of course, mandatory losers AI harem member, and of course Grandpa Max is already on board in the idea of a harem because MC is such an awesome guy who cAnT bE tIeD uP bY oNe wOmAn, that harem includes his cousin Gwen, which no one in the family minds of course, also because they're 1/4 whatever alien their kids won't have birth defects! Wow, cool. If you really liked this story, get out of the phone, touch some grass, see a psychologist if you need, that's it
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