概要
Trying to save someone from death, only to get doom in the end!
Kayra Van, a very ordinary college student with a super good character died when she tried to save an old lady from getting hit by a bus-sama.
But, Heaven had other plans! When she was going to save the old lady by dragging her behind, a rotten pulpy banana caused her to slip!
In the end, both of them were found to be kissing mother earth with all their being and successfully died!
The most traumatic thing was, she wasn't on the dead list of the grim reaper!!!
But her good intention and past deeds didn't go down the drain because the next second, she got the chance to transmigrate with a cute system!
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If you are searching something to grab your heart strings, this is exactly what you have been searching. Beautiful work from my own Moonie, and I hope you great success in WSA 2022, I have faith in you
After reading this, I have the say I really liked how much the details went into writing the scenarios as well as the story plot and world building. But I cant help but feel that the characters are such a waste considering how they are acting in certain situations. I can't get a proper grasp on their personality and in fact that it is very inconsistent. How the MC can turn from being a cheerful/dramatic person who over emphasized on being dead and regret dying before kissing. To being slightly slow but questionably excited/tensed while in the nutrition pod thingie, to acting guiltless immediately for stealing and being cold/dark to an enemy. Isn't she just a normal school girl that was forced transmigrate into another world? it feels like her character is inconsistent. Phiphi too... it spent like a near thousand years inside that place and somehow immediately had her heart pierced immediately despite mc just talking to it and just giving some form of encouragement... I expected it to be more colder and less trusting after all the time it spent alone and in the dark. But who knows if there was a reason for this. Overall conclusion for how I feel. This is a nice story with good planning on the lore world(Have a lot of potential to become way better) but the characters inconsistency is the reason for how much it cant be better. As long as you brush up on being more character focused and understand what type of people are you writing/protruding as, you will be a better story writer. Also it feels weirdly complicated at times and hard to follow, which makes it hard to read at times and I cannot get into the mood of immersion. This should be written more simpler and smoother.
I really like the concept/ world this is set in. But I stopped at the paywall. The story just wasn't enticing enough for me to spend the 10 coins per chapter. The system always puts the MC in situations that could be easily avoided and then laments the MCs incompetence. For example aura. Apparently the Mc is a walking pheromone fountain which causes everybody to go crazy for her and and even causes her to be wanted in the entire universe because the dragon king got the hots for her. It could've been easily avoided if the system just told her but it didn't because of "reasons". Also the system constantly mocks her for not being able to read or get the common sense of this universe she just got chucked into. And not in a nice banter way, moe of a demeaning way, calling her stupid. (I don't think the author wanted it to come across that way but it definitely does.)
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I really like the characters in the novel. Has a good start and I hope the story gets even better as days pass. Love it so far and good luck!!!
Interesting plot line with a great writing style! Author-nim deserved to be showered with castle, spacecraft, and gachapon! [img=recommend][img=recommend]
Love the overall and storyline especially the character development of Kayra. I would definitely recommend this to my fellow book lovers a little slow paced bit it's worth it.
this story is really interesting. I like how the fl isn't like someone who's fearless but not to stupid, but I have a question do u know if the fl will end up with anybody? Or will she just fall in love with the dragon lord or the pheona girl?
The novel made me hooked. I never saw a book like this before. The idea and plot is pretty orignal. And I liked how the she slipped on a rotten banana peel on banana stree.That had me🤣
Mecha, Cute girl, sarcastic system, Mecha, and Mecha. it's mecha. Mecha.
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Wooot, Moonie returns with a new book! the synopsis already sounds so interesting, and I'm pretty sure she will deliver a good story as well. Goodluck for the contest, Moonie!
The story is wonderful. It does have potential and will reach great heights. Great work, Author. Also, thanks for providing us with such a marvelous story. I hope you will succeed in WSA 2022. All the very best.
It's a book about a modern girl transmigrating in a futuristic world. (isekai) Our MC's other form is a cute silver fox~ Kayra: Awooo~ gimme pat y'all ~ 🦊 Her system, Phiphi~ 🥚 It's a world where you will find mecha and people also do Qi/mana cultivation, have magic/spells, level up,... slaves(cough!) many more... Many of you ask if it has romance. Yes it'll have but not now. and that amount will be little essential for the story. 🥴💕 it has 40 free chapters. Read and say what do you think about it? 💕 #Isekai #GenderBender #Transmigrations #Empire(made of many solar systems) #Royalty #AllKindsOfBeastsAndAnimals(from bacterium to dinosaur, from dragons to elves, from big brother X to young sister Y 😩... Many more) #Demons/demonbeasts/demoncultivator etc. ⚔️This story is participating in WSA22 so give it your love and support it(throw your golden tickets, power stones, comments, ... Coins, gifts(cough~) >~<. at this book~ Cya, y'all 🙌✨