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A young man finds himself waking up with new memories, and he only has the bending system to help him through his journey.
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Welll... its not bad. Sadly the author has NO IDEA what he is doing. First... mc dosnt loot his enemies for things. Second he is not using his head, third, he is not using the storage/inventory properly... mc has AN inventory space of 64 cubic meters which equqals to 2 whole regular houses at level 1. Which increases with each level and authir mentions he is almos lt full ... he only has a bag ofpersonal things, a few fishes, some swords, some spears and a few coins. Clearly author has no idea how much space is 64 cubic meters. Here let me help you view it. Multiply this image by 2. Thats how much space mc has at level 1
The Mc is really an idiot, I mean sure I read some part but even after 10 chapters Mc will always do something dumb. And the plot feels so forced and illogical. I will keep reading but I know it won’t be long till I stop.
I like the way the story goes. The only strange thing is that they can control metalbending after only a few weeks when it is supposed to be extremely difficult and that is why there are not many metalbending, but an interesting story so far.
To be completely honest this ff was a complete disappointment. I had read his other ff, the mha one, and expected this avatar fanfic to be as good as the mha one or even better. But when I read it, it felt as if I was reading the writing of another author. Anyways let's move onto the bad of this novel. 1. The writing is simply like mtl, it's pretty hard to read and enjoy it. There's many problems with the grammar and this is just the first couple of chapters. 2. The author made the Mc and haru fuse souls but it just feels like Mike doesn't even exist in the story. It just feels like you handed haru the knowledge of avatar and a system. 3. The Mc is incredibly stupid, he literally antagonised a fire nation tax collector when he knew that they wouldn't even attempt at defending him. They would just torture him and haul him off to prison. 3. His personality contradicts itself. Basically he says he doesn't care about his mother and then when he leaves he's suddenly crying? There's also the bs part of him antagonizing the tax collector. Out of knowhere he got angry and punched him. Bruh. These are the main points that I found that disappointed me greatly. I got shocked when I read this. I couldn't believe that this is the same author who wrote the mha ff that I enjoyed dearly. Overall I'd give it 3 stars at most. It's not bad, but it's not good either.
I liked your other work, but I gotta say this fic feels like it was written by someone who does not like the Avatar. Lots of little mistakes about lore. And casual disrespect for the fighting styles. Also it seems like the author will treat the spiritual side as a number instead of getting into it. The character seems to hold an idiot ball at times too. And was naive in places where he did not need to be.
The beginning starts off okay and is enjoyable. However, around chapter 9 or 10 it gets worse. Give it a try if you want but this story is not for me.
Strange why did this novel diffent from author usual style.Most of author novel are my favorite i have read vbut why did this novel bad. it look like another person writing. Spoiler... This novel mc is really poisonous with choice.Most of those choice are really suffocating. and mc is another ozai.
Honestly this is really good especially the writing quality if you compare this to avatar shadow of gambler the writing quality is much better
This is a really good start; great writing quality, interesting character choice, ATLA plus a gamer. Really well done so far, and I'm glad he's an earthbender. Don't see that often on its own that isn't just a Toph clone and you already seem to be taking it in your own direction. Great job, please keep it up.
I was extremely disappointed. The first few chapters were not only filled with spelling and grammar issues, the plot progression of the story simply made me cringe. The MC acting out on his emotions has to be one of the stupidest cliches to exist. I’m tired of reading stupid MCs who make a seriously foolish choice only to ultimately run and leave their friends and family to deal with the consequences.
the author is blazuki. so its 5* without doubt love your work. keep up the great and entertaining work <3
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Only 5 chapters and it feels very natural you have improved your writing style, in my personal opinion I prefer this avatar story than the other one, anyway good job!
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Dialogue is bad. I like the story premise a lot and it has been very interesting so far but the dialogue just feels juvenile and it does not feel like the author has grasped the fact that people can speak differently and often do.
Shame about the harem tag. I have a policy that i will never give any powerstones to a harem story on principle. Its pretty good so far though so i will give you a glowing review. But ya no powerstones sry.