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Star Wars fanfic. A new character is taken in by the Jedi at the age of four.
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Use correct punctuation and fix some incorrect grammar and it could be even better. The overall development is okay but the character interactions are a bit confusing because it’s not using “” for the beginning and end of interactions or ‘‘ for the start and conclusion of inner thought.
I will write this review trying to be as objective as possible. the quality of writing and the stability of updates remains the big weak point of the story. there are a lot of grammar and punctuation issues that make it hard to read, same goes for the interactions that sometimes make it hard to know who's speaking even though I feel like the author is trying to put in there a little effort. Sometimes character names are misspelled which is very annoying. the outputs are not stable but good as long as there are no big cuts, it's fine. Regarding the development of the story, I find the story interesting, an MC who is younger than Ashoka Tano and who arrives at the Jedi academy knowing that his time is limited and that you have to learn as much as possible. , while trying to find a way out when the empire arrives. I liked the idea of the guardian of the great holocrons, it opens up a lot of possibilities for the future.
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Apart from som butchering of the english language every now and then, Its hard to keep track of who is speaking an when. Coversations are setup right next to eachother and there is no indication of who is speaking. Also dunno if its because its translated but some words just dont fit into the context of coversations and sentences. Otherwise ok plot apart from his lack of social finesse (dislike for) other kids. Its hard to imagin his parents not realising hes not only a antisocial but probly a jaded reincarnated man or psycopath .
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The force is not strong with this one. Grammer is a mess and it feels like I am reading total nonsense most of the time.
Bruuuh the translations are so bad I've seen mtl stories better translated than this piece of sheet - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -
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Do you have permission to translate the text? The entire text was translated from the Russian site, as well as all the chapters there are free
good job so far I dont know what will happen later but to this point it has shown a good structure not sure about following plot and ....(could tell yoda or plot some stuff) but I see potential in the story and it would be awesome to have some flash backs in the future
I really like the story. The character is well build has potential to be strong. But I noticed after reading the last couple of chapter that I don't really understand the story anymore. Thats partly because of how the character talk to each other. You start your sentences with a - and you continue writing and honestly I don't really know where the character stops talking or switches from one to another person. I would either seperate it better or just do sentences like most people do in webnovel with "bla bla bla" It's also hard to follow what the MC is good at and bad at compared to other people. You say so much about it with explanations I don't really can comprehend that I lose track. Especially with the yoda conversation didn't understand a single bit of it.
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This is badly translated. There is also a lot of racism to other species. Not good.
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A very good story so far. A story about a young man goin through life in the star wars universe as a youngling. It is a very interesting premiseI hope you continue. I will give 5 stars because i like what i see so far.
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MC sounds like a normal person and is somewhat relatable which is nice. Good story. :)MC sounds like a normal person and is somewhat relatable which is nice. Good story. :)MC sounds like a normal person and is somewhat relatable which is nice. Good story. :)MC sounds like a normal person and is somewhat relatable which is nice. Good story. :)MC sounds like a normal person and is somewhat relatable which is nice. Good story. :)
Most of the story is just Incoherent gibberish. ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ...