Plot hole? Mistakes? Bad writing? No, it was my genius level writing thay you're too low level to understand. It's not that I don't believe you. Maybe you intended that to happen but how would anyone know what happened behind the scenes without any context? Everyone knows there was discrimination. But readers aren't omniscient to know how that discrimination would manifest. A person prejudiced against women could hide information from her because they didn't think she needed to know anything. But another prejudiced person could tell her everything about Ian showing off his achievements to make her realize that she is inferior and should listen to the man on the mission. Besides Ian's files aren't classified. If she received his file then why would go out their way to hide hia information? They maybe be sexist but that's just unnecessary work. And why did they send her Ian's file in the first place, when he didn't receive her file. They didn't even want her in the mission and while they thought highly of Ian's achievements. But somehow they sent Peggy Ian'a file but didn't send her files to Ian. What? Why would those sexist guys send her Ian's file? If anyone sent her the files it would be Captain Philips and from the way he was disgusted by another sexist officers comment it's clear that he is not sexist so why would he hide Ian's info from her than? There's no logic in your argument. Of course you can make up any behind the scenes situation to explain it but no one can guess these behind the scenes stuff unless you put them in a chapter as context clues.
Peggy was taken aback by Ian's revelation. She quickly realized that she had crossed a line by making fun of something she didn't fully understand. "I'm sorry for your loss," she offered, feeling genuinely remorseful.
Movies · AidenUsmani
The interactions are so bland and boring.
Ian sensed that Peggy was testing him, and he shook his head in response. "No, I'm not a spy," he replied firmly.
Movies · AidenUsmani
I wish there was an edit option. There are too many typos when using a phone.
Ian forced himself to maintain a calm and cordial atmosphere as he sat across from Peggy. Though he felt a twinge of discomfort at the memory of his daughter's tears during the movie they had watched together, he pushed those thoughts aside and focused on his meal.
Movies · AidenUsmani
Bruh. Maybe you'rs trying make him three dimensional by adding these scenes but honestly the way it is done isn't that great. In fact, Ian is very 1D. We don't sew him interact with anyone or just talk with anyone. He feels like machine and speaks when spoken to. He is trying to build a friendship with Peggy. But doesn't take any initiative to start a conversation with her. There needs to be more dialogues. And even some small filler scenes showing the MC just doing things, talking about things etc. They done need go be long just a few lines or a single paragraph but that would add to the character. Otherwise with MC feeling so wooden these "emotional" scenes have no impact because we don't care about the MC or his interactions. Granted this is a Fanfic and maybe you don't care about improving as a writer. Of that's the case then please ignore everything I said.
Ian forced himself to maintain a calm and cordial atmosphere as he sat across from Peggy. Though he felt a twinge of discomfort at the memory of his daughter's tears during the movie they had watched together, he pushed those thoughts aside and focused on his meal.
Movies · AidenUsmani
I'm not saying it's a bad or good thing but the way some of these montage scenes are phrased it feels very much like AI generated. AI tend to be unnecessarily dramatic even in mundane scenes.
Ian was momentarily confused, but Billy's smile and words of encouragement made him feel proud and hopeful for the future. As Ian saluted and walked away, Billy watched him go with a sense of pride and satisfaction.
Movies · AidenUsmani
That felt very abrupt. Also why do people in Novels say everything instead thinking it in their mind. Like the "serum" motivation thing. He didn't need to speak that out loud but could have repeated that in his mind. And same with this he could have thought that in his mind. Besides, because the whole missing them and crying felt so abrupt that the scene which should have been emotional had no impact on me as a reader. And it's easy to make me cry during emotional scenes as long there is some build up for it.
He closed his eyes, the memories of his past life flooding his mind. He thought of his wife Sarah, and his children, the ones he had left behind. His heart ached as he longed to see them again, but he knew that it was an impossible wish. A tear slid down his cheek as he whispered to himself, "I miss you all so much. Even though we can never meet again, my love for you will always remain."
Movies · AidenUsmani
There are better ways to do foreshadowing.
As he savored the moment, he couldn't help but be paranoid. What if his dark past caught up with him? But then he reminded himself that these papers proved that he was a U.S. citizen with a spotless record. He was safe... or so he thought.
Movies · AidenUsmani
God is cringe.
With a sudden realization, the soul exclaimed, "Y-Y-You are God!" Its mind racing with thoughts, it finally understood the gravity of the situation. "Holy ****," the soul gasped, "God is real! T-Then heaven and hell are real! Then it means t—"
Movies · AidenUsmani
Hikari still vividly remembered the original body discovering a secret letter from his parents hidden in his room shortly after their passing. Written as a final farewell in the case that they die, they explained that all their actions were for the "greater good" and the "Konoha big family."
Anime & Comics · Hanma_Jack
Pain was a bigger idealogical fool tho.
And even if Konoha actually did something to him, he would still choose to value only his own interest in this life, and reach the highest power in this world no matter what it took, and which aliagnce he needed to break.
Anime & Comics · Hanma_Jack
The only good thing System did was give birth to the Litrpg and GameLit genre. These are much better. Although a minimalist system is still good.
He thought about how some third-rate novels he knew from his past life involved characters getting a 'system' after they transmigrated into new worlds—something he found utterly unappealing.
Anime & Comics · Hanma_Jack
It's the term DC uses so...
"Meta-human..." Raven repeated the word softly and smiled. She liked how it sounded.
Movies · EmmaCruzader
As is not written.
at once, they chanted his title: "Blood worm, Blood worm, Bloodworm." Stilgar watched from the shadows and said, " He is not the Lisan Al Gaib." He had never been more sure than this.
Book&Literature · Kingoffrogs
I'm not advocating for it to happen but I'm just pointing out that in a comic world where almost everyone is perfect looking. Many people are attracted to Catwoman because of the Femme Fatale characteristic she has. Which she probably developed after her many run ins with crime and other experiences. But without that development she would not have the same personality. Unless the author decided to give her the same personality despite her growing up differently then that's just bad writing.
To become the Catwoman, she needed to be an orphan, she needed to be poor and suffer...
Anime & Comics · God_Doom
David Fincher is pure skill and hardwork. He started out working as assistants on film sets and then later got into directing commercials. hge made connectiions by working on film sets and showcased his skills via commericials. Only then did he started directing films. except for Alien which the producers interfered with, the rest of works, both films and television are great works that can stand the test of time. heck Netflix became what it is now because of Fincher and house of cards. not to mention Mindhunter, which I regret watching because there isnt any hope of getting a new season. If I somehow went back in time than one of the things I would do is give Fincher unlimited budget to continue the series.
'I'm not stupid. I have lived long enough to understand the difference between the two of us. It's about luck and opportunity. I never had any of that in my life.'
Movies · pujimaki
what rule?
'David Fincher is going to be famous. "Fight Club" is a masterpiece in my opinion.'
Movies · pujimaki
David had a bad time directing the movie and disowned it. I doubt he would care about it being praised.
David smiled. He appreciated Kazir's praise, even if it was a lie. It was enough that someone recognized him.
Movies · pujimaki
This feels more like an explanation to the reader rather than something the character would naturally. Our thoughts are usually fragmented and incomplete rather than fully formed grammatically correct sentences.
'Cassandra didn't fight to get my bumpy car because it's already old and she has her own car.'
Movies · pujimaki
Dialogues are very monotonous. Interactions are very boring.
ch 14 [Prologue Of The War] - A Friendly Conversation
Marvel: The Journey
Movies · AidenUsmani