Ah nevermind 8 meteors and 9 elements?
not dark ? woat!
That's suspicious
Oh boy isn't it relieving
We can read his thoughts out loud at any time, but I don't understand the need to have a guard in front of a school
There is no whatsoever harem in this novel
I believe you need to focus on one tense for your storytelling. Some phrases are grammarily incorrect because of that. also you have a lot of capital letters everywhere, it does not respect the ponctuation. It saddens me because your first chapter is overall poetic and extremely heavy to read, it's a great job
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using blood as ink is very emo like also using blood to draw anything makes it stink really hard
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this is original, quite a short premise but I hope to find the kind of mood in that old cartoon (Treasure Planet) hope to read more soon, this is some great reading~
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This mind game was complicated for this tiny brain of mine. I wonder what could have happened if Nathair was the intruder. He gauged their ages sure but if he came across people extremely different from him then the mind-game could've have ended up much worse (or so I hope)
ch 0 5 I explained. They did not like it.
Fantasy · ThePotatoKing
Ah I got lost, I don't know precisely who's talking
The title of the chapter, I'm dead
"Do go ahead and explain, you better have a good ass explanation!" Steve snarled at me as he picked up his spear once again. Pointing it straight at my neck.
Fantasy · ThePotatoKing
Oh boy I had a good laugh
A piece of paper was ejected by the sphere and landed in my hand.
Fantasy · ThePotatoKing
Gantz vibes
At the centre of the room was a black sphere resting on top of the table.
Fantasy · ThePotatoKing
Hold'up he ready to fight? What kind of company did he take back from his uncle?
I did own a pistol for self-defence, using a dagger was pretty intuitive and a longsword was an extremely versatile weapon to use for beginners.
Fantasy · ThePotatoKing
Good day! I'd love to reply to your review but the computer won't let me. If you deleted it, know it is much welcomed in any form, a critic is more important if it's negative. Here's what I planned to reply: Actually I am reading and keeping every review. Yours, as bad as it can look will be fairly given light as it can only allow me to progress if I correct the mistakes you've highlighted. Up to the fifth chapter you've passed through the long intro (world building and sympathise with the mc, learn which side character is important). A violent incident caused Arthur to have ahead trauma, I believe it's not as readable as I thought. I'll work on it. Up do date, the 69th chapter is under writing, the few ten-ish I am bottling up are ongoing changes as I advance through the story. I thank thee for your time and sincerity. I hope to see you later.
ch 0 5 Breakout
Why I (don't) regret looking for the dragon's eyes
Fantasy · Mayline