Webnovel Author: Ready_ - Novel Collection

The concept and ideas seem pretty nice so far (11 chapters), the story seems to set up to be one of vengeance with a hint of dark powers, though, the first few chapters are held back by the constant switches between first and third person, an issue which is resolved later on but the problem still remain at the very start of the novel, I would suggest a overhaul of the chapters with this issue. The writing isn't bad by any means, but it isn't fluid, in the sense that there are some mistakes that are pretty much impossible to miss, which brings the reading to a stop and hinders the flow severely. Another minor issue, which might not be one for everyone, I personally find the chapters a bit too lengthy, not certain if its just me imagining things. If I am not delusional, then cutting the number of words to around 1000, no less, would be beneficial. All in all, this is the author's first book by the looks of it, the few problems I noted are only natural and will most certainly be erased as they get more experience. Look forward to the future. Also, since I know the author worships Esdeath: