JJ_Prakoso

JJ_Prakoso

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2020-08-02 入りました Indonesia
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JJ_Prakoso
JJ_Prakoso
1 years ago
Replied to Lord_of_sleep

Thank you very much for the comment

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JJ_Prakoso
JJ_Prakoso
2 years ago
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"Here is my review based on what I read so far: Story Development: I think the progress of the story is okay, but the direction and where the plot goes for me is quite messy in my opinion. First of all, Chapter 1-2 already set something interesting will happen than all of sudden Chapter 3 The MC just go to the Academy without even mentioning the previous or doing something after the event of Chapter 1-2 happen. It felt The previous two chapters are never exist. However, that problem can be fix by giving more mention about the previous thing or at least an inner monologue for The MC World Background; The world-building for me is quite interesting as there is magic and mythical creature, also many other things. However, , the world can be more fleshed out especially if the author explore of the environment or the description of the environment. Character Design: Alika for me is a final character and I think she will have a good development with the main Male Lead. While the side characters, I think they are all okay. However, I think Alika backstory can be more flesh out or the event after Chapter 2 occurred like how she got to the academy and many more. Overall that's all I have to say about this novel and good luck.

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JJ_Prakoso
JJ_Prakoso
2 years ago
Replied to AlicoleChronicler

Thank you very much for this detailed review. I'm very happy and really thankful that you enjoying or sharing the enjoyment of the story and the characters in this novel. So cheers!!! [img=recommend][img=recommend]

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JJ_Prakoso
JJ_Prakoso
2 years ago
Replied to YS_og

Ah Ok noted and thanks again

JJ_Prakoso
JJ_Prakoso
2 years ago
Replied to YS_og

As for the Gazerman and the conversation it's more into setting about the world if you wanted to know the more information or showing what Hatoshi character is. Hope that explanation can help and thanks again for the comment

JJ_Prakoso
JJ_Prakoso
2 years ago
Replied to YS_og

Ah I see thanks for the critical comment and it is really helpful to further my skill and improvement for this novel. So thank you very much

JJ_Prakoso
JJ_Prakoso
2 years ago
Posted

The story of this novel is quite intriguing and exciting at the same time as there are gods, Immortal realm, and many more mythical things happen from the book. However, my main gripe about the book and sorry to say this is sometime the book have too much telling information rather than showing. It also have a capital problem that you can check it out again. Regardless, it's still a joyful book to read and I'm looking forward in the future updates about this book and hopefully it can fleshed out more the interesting world.

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JJ_Prakoso
JJ_Prakoso
2 years ago
Posted

This novel is quite great, I like the concept of the Mythos organization and the worldbuilding about this world. The Mc for me is well fleshed out in the early chapter. Good luck and I'm looking forward to reading more!!

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JJ_Prakoso
JJ_Prakoso
2 years ago
Posted

Here is my review based on what I read so far about this book: Story Development: I think the direction for this story is quite clear and I felt each chapters of this story keep moving forward or should I said very steady. Character Design: The description of the character for me is pretty okay and The Main Character is mostly fine. Overall, I can see some potential within the main character especially that he has a journey. However, I think you can explore more about his true motivation. While the side characters are just fine, it's just only needs more context or showing who they really are. World Background: The world background is fine, but I think you should give more context or description of the environment because it's so far it's clear, but not really enough in terms how I would imagine the world. That's all I have to say about this novel and keep up the good work!!

JJ_Prakoso
JJ_Prakoso
2 years ago
Posted

Here is my review based on what I read so far: Story Development: I think the progress of the story is okay, but the direction and where the plot goes for me is quite messy in my opinion. First of all, Chapter 1-2 already set something interesting will happen than all of sudden Chapter 3 The MC just go to the Academy without even mentioning the previous or doing something after the event of Chapter 1-2 happen. It felt The previous two chapters are never exist. However, that problem can be fix by giving more mention about the previous thing or at least an inner monologue for The MC World Background; The world-building for me is quite interesting as there is magic and mythical creature, also many other things. However, , the world can be more fleshed out especially if the author explore of the environment or the description of the environment. Character Design: Alika for me is a final character and I think she will have a good development with the main Male Lead. While the side characters, I think they are all okay. However, I think Alika backstory can be more flesh out or the event after Chapter 2 occurred like how she got to the academy and many more. Overall that's all I have to say about this novel and good luck.

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    Sparror Volume 1

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    500 years had passed, The powerful cosmic being, Sparror, awakened from death's slumber. There was one purpose that had to be fulfilled, finding an interesting host. The chosen host, none other than Hatoshi Akarui, the teenage boy who dreamed of becoming a Superhero was brought into reality. Now, with the power of Sparror in his hands, Hatoshi will face a variety of problems, not just powerful villains, but ideologies, stances, and an everlasting battle that will join the fray.

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