Webnovel Author: Plug_O_Stien - Fanfic Collection

I gave it a chance. Read ten chapters, found myself skimming through it by the end. The prose needs a lot of work, the scenes have no suspense and the overall story just doesn't have anything that warrents my continued interest. This kid is already 18 and still a nobody. If it was intentional, then that just means the author has no foresight. LEGENDS are the best, and they show it early on. Messi being a prime example. Him STARTING at 18 already makes him far worse then his competitors it terms of future fame. I'm disappointed with it, but it seems like a trend with sport novels. Every author botches the beginning.

Fist chapter was good, I got excited for a strategist/puppet master that controls the court through intelligence rather than pure skill. Similar to the redhead from kuroko no basket. I got that impression from his observation about the need for teamwork and communication. Anyway, it all went down hill from there. The Mc is a puppet, not the puppet master. He’s a slave to the system, and the author completely discards all the build up about his theoretical aptitude. Incredibly disappointing and irriating to read. I stopped shortly after. Awesome potential, waste on the wrong author. I recommend starting this with low expectations to avoid having them shattered.

Didn't even think about Romania and the vampires. Damn, Might have to add that in. ahaha

Completely understandable. That's why I'm currently in the process of rewriting it all from scratch, then replacing everything at once. Look forward to it, as there won't be any of the issues you have aptly pointed out. Thank you for your input, I value honesty and criticism as it helps me identify problems.

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The novel presents an intriguing premise but suffers from poor execution. The dialogue is excessively verbose and often nonsensical, severely impacting the story's credibility. The protagonist, Jon, behaves inconsistently with his supposed age, resembling someone in their late teens or early twenties rather than his actual age (9). This disconnect, alongside poor portrayals of other important characters (including their decisions and dialogue) highlights the author's lack of understanding of the characters, further detracting from the narrative. Additionally, the reliance on the trope of "the old gods granting knowledge" as a convenient explanation undermines the plot's integrity. Overall, a promising idea, but not her more.