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No matter how good AI is, it can never come close to human imagination. Even if AI is good, it cannot come up with something a human can. It will take a predictable path 80% of the time, and you can feel where this story is going. It's boring as hell.

The author tends to delete any reviews that point out his mistakes in his writing or novel, and I hope this one doesn't get deleted. I'm hoping to provide a constructive critique that will help him improve. Writing Quality: 3 stars. It's good, but is it just me, or is it annoying for almost every sentence to start with "you"? Stability of Updates: 5 stars Story Development: It's just following the already established lore and adds nothing new to it. 1 star Character Design: Kind of boring. I have no idea about the character; he is bland. All he cares about is sex. I don't mind that, but if this story is all about sex, it will not be for me. 1 star World Background: We already have an established world, so I wouldn't give it 5 stars because it doesn't deserve it. Also, this story doesn't make us feel immersed in the world, so I would give it 1 star.

meh meh there is not much this story does from other Twilight novels ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________-__

alt acc lol your joking right ?????

Translation Quality: Overall understandable, but the chapter names are confusing as hell. Also, to the translator, please use some kind of AI to edit your translation. It's freaking free; you have all the resources, just use them. Stability of Updates: Updates come fast because it's just a translation. Story Development: Boring; feels like a carbon copy of "Lord of Mysteries." The author is not trying to be creative or use their imagination to make something new. Sigh. Character Design: Boring. This guy is trying to make his family rich. He did not ponder ways to make money, like investing in a company. He did not even try to invent things from his old world. It feels boring as hell. World Background: Well, the world is already built for this fanfic. There's nothing much I can say.

good novel __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

a way to ruin any good story is to go throught the slave rout he make android 18 and 17 his slave this stupid he knows they are half humans right sigh

I don't mind if it's a man going around sleeping with everyone because it's part of male nature to spread his seed and ensure the possibility of having children. But for females, it's about selecting the best genes for her child—like how successful, how tall the man is, how strong he is, and if he can keep her safe, etc. But I hate it when it's a woman doing this kind of thing; it makes me sick. This feeling is primal for every man for as long as humanity history. I understand she wants to get back at her husband, and it's part of the system, but why does she have to sleep with everyone? I understand this is a novel, but I dislike the whole concept

I understand, but I'm just saying use ChatGPT to fix the issues, and it's free. It won't take too long to get it fixed. It will spell check and fix all errors. It's frustrating when people jump on a novel that has a good idea but isn't written by the best English speakers. I always wonder why they don't use Grammarly or ChatGPT to fix these issues, and it won't take that long. Sigh.

not bad good writing, it's just weirdly heavy with all the secondary knowledge, I find myself just skipping the unending descriptions on things and especially the politics and schemes, they just kinda happen by front loading copious amounts of exposition and expecting people to follow along with the convoluted nonsense, also I think you went to big to quickly introducing universe level concepts before he barely steps out of his first sect is a good way to burn yourself out and the readers, overall meh I read it a little at a time when other novels are updating

Writing Quality: The writing feels lacking, akin to a story penned by a young child. Even my 10-year-old nephew, who has begun writing his own novels out of his love for reading, exhibits better skills. try to use chatgpt to fix this writing it very easy. Stability of Updates: It's disappointing to wait a whole year for just 47 chapters. Story Development: The protagonist is overpowered from the start, leaving no room for development. Character Design: Like the story development, the character is overpowered with no growth or depth in design. World Background: The story relies heavily on pre-existing worlds, lacking originality or depth in world-building.

yes it does mattter maybe if he wrote the story and use the Ai just to fix grammar and spelling errors that would not matter but you can tell this story is 80% AI

disappointing MC his just a villain, egotistic, and selfish his just on a power trip kills everything and everyone most of this kills are pointless sight the Auther is fucked up i wonder if there something wrong with him

It's quite funny how this has 4.6 stars because I'm 100% sure this AI generated chapters. The chapters are short, and here the author wants us to pay for Patreon to read this kind of small chapters. Is this author stupid or something?

why keep the last name stark _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________