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An ordinary man is reincarnated, due to a cosmic error, into a Twilight universe with reality-altering powers. After avoiding supernatural angst and small-town awkwardness, he unwittingly finds himself in the company of mysterious Cullens.
First time writing and with full use of ai
Oc x alice and Rosalie
태그
-- 불꽃 랭킹 
-- 불꽃 티켓 이런 작품도 추천해요
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3.28
- 창작성
- 업데이트 안정성
- 스토리 전개
- 캐릭터 디자인
- 세계관
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Have you ever seen ‘Vampires Suck’—the comedy spoof of the Twilight saga? It’s like Twilight went on a sugar rush and then tripped over its own sparkles. I laughed so hard, I’m pretty sure my inner vampire gave up and just went back to being an awkward teenager.
trash utter and pure trash. I refuse to believe a guy with reality manipulation can't feel Alice having visions about him. I also refuse to believe he can't instantly feel the body form the moment Alice has her visions or the moment he awake to his reality manipulation powers...this feels like less like reality manipulation and more like just a guy who has very small anime power and slight magic to conjure things
It's very bland. Pretty sure it's heavily AI assisted not because certain phrases stand out, but just because it doesn't feel very cohesive. Could also be there is very little planning going on. Generally though it just makes for quite a boring read.
Author, I understand that you want to create an OP MC with all the advantages. But giving a nerfed version of the MC's ability using the visionary from bleach would be more interesting, considering the consequences that come with it would make the ability more worth it than making an OP MC with low motivation and more like a fan's wet dream.
Это просто искусственный интеллект. Здесь нет ничего живого. Куча ненужных описаний, диалоги слишком нереальные. Люди так не разговаривают. Половина каждой главы это описание дождя и тумана.
Bro keep doing you this Fic is a cool slice of life of Twilight just hope for some action in-between. Hope this review boosts the rating so we get more traffic as a good motivation for you!
I liked this story very much, but from chapter 11 onwards it goes downhill very quick... MC forgets thing that happened 2 seconds before, some conversations repeat in like 3 chapters and the MC randomly loses eome of his powers (he gave himself in beginning)... So yeah, I don't recommend reading if you want to relax while reading... ps: I created this account just so I could review this... pps: I REALLY liked the first ten chapters but the stuff after that seems like the author got alzeimer or used ai... ppps: I'm really disappointed how the story turned out...
keep up the great work don't listing to haters...................................................................................................
If you do the newborn fight with the Cullens then would Alex save Bree and right when Bree looks at Alex a bond could appear between them, but it is a father daughter bond.
I liked the story and direction, the character at the beginning was cool and chill. I like that you set him up with both girls. I am interested in how you made that work and feel ok.