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Honestly most of my issues with the book are in two categories: bad characterization and unrealistic worldbuilding. Pretty much every character in the novel has at least one or two mental breakdowns each year. Characters get immensely angry at each other for practically no reason basically every chapter. But by far the largest issue is how the book deals with murder. Almost all main characters treat murdering literally anyone as if it's literally the end of the world even if the victim is completely and utterly irredeemable. The worldbuilding is mainly a problem because this is fanfiction and there are some established facts. Wizarding England is not the sole wizarding community and it gets treated like it is even in scenarios where it ABSOLUTELY would not. Similarly the political structure within the British community is unbelievably mischaracterized. How things shake out in certain scenarios within the novel are so incredibly far-fetched as to be ridiculous. For last, there is one plot hole within the novel that it quite literally may be the size of the moon. For the first several years at Hogwarts, the threat to students and Rose's friends lives are what prevents Rose from taking action. Sylvia can just mess with people's memories to render it unnoticeable when people are at Hogwarts. So during the third year when quite literally everyone left the castle save Dumbledore why didn't Rose take action? Or during summers when students must leave and most professors do as well?

The first 18 chapters (where I gave up) are so tropey it defies reason. MC being bullied for no particular reason, arrogant young masters, an auction, a random tournament that served no purpose, and multiple cold jade beauties. All within the first 18 chapters, with most before that.

One of the worst novels on the entire site, including mary-sue fanfics. Yes, that bad. The pacing makes absolutely no sense and defies all logic. Go ahead and read it if you want. If you make it past 10 chapters that's honestly an accomplishment.

I cannot express just how godawful this book is and how much it disappoints me. The premise of the novel is just fine, a blacksmith who gets stronger every time they forge something and can gain special abilities depending on special materials. Neat. I can see a low key hidden boss type character story coming out of this. One of many problems is that the author has the worst pacing I think I've ever come across, bar none. Just extending out the events of the first 10 chapters over 2 months instead of 3 days would make everything so much better. Worldbuilding and characterization are also trash. The MC apparently lives in a city with a lord ruling it, with an arrogant young master son. This son of course is in love with MC's girlfriend, who he has been in a relationship with for several years. Approximately 9 seconds after MC gets his cheat, this relationship is now a problem to arrogant young master and so he takes men there to casually murder MC, as one does of course. This fails due to MC being MC and powering up enough to beat up a dozen men over the course of 3 days. Ignore the fact that MC until this point never fought anyone and uses magic and martial arts that both the reader and MC himself don't know he knows. Do not read this unless author goes back maybe 5 years later and scraps the whole thing to write it again. This is just a review up to chapter 12 or so. Couldn't even make it through the free stuff.