Webnovel Author: Legs - Novel Collection

generic system story, doesn't look like it's going anywhere. And this guy supposedly was a failed nascent soul cultivator, but we don't get to see any of his experience in the writing. Comes across as a newbie than a experienced cultivator.

This system is too annoying, the main character is underdeveloped. The comedy isn't funny. Plot is forced. Many spelling errors that could be fixed with quick proof reading, but still there after a year.

I reuploaded the review so I'll reply to you here: Not show every single death, but a few so we could see how his mindset developed. I'm not saying don't write filler, especially since it can help with ideas, but make the filler productive, but they should add meaning. Basically what I mean by showing not telling is giving details to it, here's a example. "Johnny failed his homework, he was embarrassed" --> "When Johnny saw the giant F mark on his homework, his cheeks flushed. He scrunched up the paper and hid it in under his desk, hoping no one would notice" Both of these say the same thing, but the difference is in the detail. In the former, we're essentially just told, in the latter, the same information is shown, but adds details (like the cheeks) and actions (what he does with the test), making the scene memorable and more engaging for the reader. The small stuff can really make it stronger. And by giving us a glimpse into his experiences into the past worlds the main character would be more engaging. As for the story being slower, I don't really know, I'd recommend giving it a rough outline of where you want to take it, or where you want this current arc to end, then you can cut the content that you feel would make it too dragged out, at least for me it helps me keep things organized. Then you can add in different thing in different places in your outlines or switch it around easily, and for me that helps me with ideas since it's basically expanding the outline and cutting things that I don't think would blend in with the story or drags it out. I don't want to discourage you, it takes hard work to write as many chapters as you did, especially if you're unmotivated (I can relate haha), so don't worry, you're doing good.

Forget the synopsis, it doesn't really show us any of that. Story is ok, you can tell it's for the word count with the amount of filler and over describing of every minor character. Too much telling, and too little showing. Main character is underdeveloped, we're told he is supposed to be a trained killer but were never shown any of it, which ties into too much telling and too little showing. If the author showed us some glimpses into the main characters earlier transmigrations it'd probably help develop his main character and understand why feels like he's millions of years old, instead we get 1 short transmigration, and this anime merge world next. His "vicious cycle of dying and reincarnating" isn't really shown, all we get is a few sentences of these lives, which harms character development. Current world so far (chapter 215) is a pretty generic anime world, the world isn't consistent either. No real side characters pretty much all of them is some kind of anime reference. Update stability is good.