MobinHood

16d

Commented

What?

Besides, it has to be quick, he needs to find them before the human clan Yoni Ying cultivators react!

Clan Leader: My strength equals to that of the entire clan

Eastern · MoBei is MoBei

MobinHood

11mth

Posted

Great idea bad execution. MC is a one dimensional edge lord. So far there is no discernable motivation for the MC. The MC is needlessly vicious when there is no need for it. As I already said, the idea is great. If it was a better fleshed out story it could have been great, despite the lackluster writing quality.

I Created A Dungeon In A Cultivation World

Eastern · BLACKangelmarl

MobinHood

1yr

Posted

The world is amazing, the writing quality is ok. Story was a bit cliche until the author started to make very bad writing desicions (started around chapter 115). I could predict what was going to happen to Morgana from the moment she left the forest with the MC. The MC is really unlikable, naive and keeps making realy stupid desicions.

MobinHood

1yr

Commented

g

2) No, keep the names the same.

MobinHood

1yr

Commented

Ape

A. Skip to War of The Apes arc, which is in 1885

Marvel: Breezing Through History as an Eternal

Movies · mark_kiple

He had shoulder length black hair tied back, clear blue eyes, a rather gentle face with hidden sharpness, and a well trained body towering over his comrades at 2 meters tall (6'7). He was wearing classic exorcist robes and had one of the holy swords I could feel.

Highschool DxD: A New Satan

Anime & Comics · Alexander_the_grey

MobinHood

2yr

Commented

Why must a MC always have long hair? It's impractical, especially if you do a lot of sport.

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[DISCONTINUED] HP: A Bolt from the Blue

Book&Literature · Ashtar29

MobinHood

2yr

Commented

why?

As I was walking down the street a truck came around the bend and couldn't brake in time. When I turned my head to look at what was happening I was stunned. "no! fuck no! not again you piece of shit truck! not two lives in a row!" I yelled as I thought about what to do. I had no time at all the truck was already near my face. All I could do was put my hands in front of me. I closed my eyes and the only thing I felt was a slight heat. After a couple of seconds, I opened them to see a scene I didnt expect.

Harry Potter: World on Fire

Movies · Plug_O_Stien

MobinHood

2yr

Commented

+1

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The Game Creator in Marvel(News)

Movies · Unholy_Angel

MobinHood

2yr

Commented

well, that was awkward. why is he so desperate? that was so unconformable to read. it felt like the guys that start a racist statement with 'I'm not racist ,but...' or 'all my friends are black'. I can't really describe it, it just felt wrong.

Quinn laughed a little louder and responded, "Of course not, professor. The magical kind is just a minor part of the world. The non-magical kind outnumbers us in population by an extremely large margin. I don't consider le non-magiques, the muggle, the no-maj, the can't-spells, lesser than me, I do not. I believe the muggles are not lesser, but others. Not worthless, but of other value. Not disposable, but of a different disposition. Magic is a gift that blooms in rare individuals, and even among them, a few really appreciate it. I don't look down on non-magicals, but I do consider them different from me, a person who can use magic, not because I can do magic, but because of the society I was raised in." Quinn gestured at the Great Hall behind him and continued, "Most of the people from magical families have no connection to the world outside the magical community. They do not know how large the world is, and the class at Hogwarts will not help them understand that."