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With all the buildup I was hoping for some accident/surprise to happen tbh.

A violet egg? So not a canon one... Unkown who hatched it as well...

A pity that MC's third son was a female. If it were a male, House Celtigar might have gotten the hand of Helaena Targaryen. And if Viserys intends for Rhaenyra to reign as Queen, why did he chose his second son to marry Rhaena, instead of his eldest son Aegon?

omg I missed this fic!

Thanks! It was time for MC to get some luck! :D With all the Macho Braces, I hope Machoke can become Top Silver, and use the evolution to Gold :3

Ouff, doing an info dump in the middle of a multiple-chapter scene is not the best. It slow downs the story a lot, you could do the info dump later

We will know their potential soon huh... I'm hoping for a Silver Machoke, Gold Rhydon and Platinum Kadabra, but it most likely is Bronze-Silver-Gold...

If Killer B is 10 years old, it is definetely too early. I would have waited for him to be at least 14-15 years old, already Chunin-Jonin levels. And even then, the 3rd Raikage is still alive, Hachibi's rival for a lot of years, who recently "won" the fight by sealing him again. Any person would be reluctant to follow orders of your rival/enemy and the true person responsible of your incarciration. Hachibi would have mellowed out more after 3rd Raikage's death, with his son A being more soft on Killer B and their sibling relationship.

Hachibi shouldn't be so easily cooperating that early with Kumo. Before Killer B, he used to rampage, and even is the one responsible for the 3rd Raikage's self inflicted wound.

If this really is a Death World, Healing moves like Rest and Recover are a must. Evasion/Defense as well

What about those Pokemon that don't evolve? They can't use the push of evolution to improve their talent. Another example of the disadvantages of the Talent System, it makes single stage Pokemon very non desirable, even if they were already unpopular IRL.

I would have preferred a Gold (one stp to the highest Platinum) Pokemon tbh, as I can't grasp the value of what she gave her. This Abra must be High Gold/Platinum talent, due the spoons worth... If not, another Gold psychic Pokemon would have been better.

A Ralts please. Or two! I always liked the idea of having both a Gardevoir and Gallade hehe

Not a fan of Umbreon, not because of her species, but because she doesn't fit MC's hyper offensive team nor Author's writing style. Umbreon is a mixed defensive tank. Her offensive moves are lackluster, her abilities are useless, she is not the special attacker MC needs, she can't do crowd control, she doesn't excel on the typical role of Dark types (debuffer, become annoyances, disruptive)... The worst in my opinion, you author don't excel in describing Pokemon battles, and a defensive Pokemon that focuses on outlasting her opponents is not your style of writing battles either, as you usually go for brute force, without using tactics. At least she can be a Healer with Wish+Heal Bell. I prefer you don't give MC every Eeveelution, as it will overcrowd his already full team, that already aren't being given enpugh screentime and development.

So all the group of Clefairy, Chansey, Nidos, Jigglytuff and Munna will join the Breeding House? Maybe MC can make his Gym Fairy type, with other Pink-themed Pokemon to confuse people of their typing hehe