Webnovel Author: Dontlookdown - Novel Collection

No harem, but there will be a love interest.

Like many of my predecessors, I am also leaving a review of my own novel. However, this isn't a promotion. More of a... heads-up, perhaps? Either way, I felt the need to provide a bit more information to any readers scrolling through the review section. First of all, the world-building is a bit sparse as of ch 26. That should change after the introduction is over and the group is back home (A slight spoiler, though I doubt anyone didn't see it coming.) This is also my first novel, so I apologize in advance if any portions feel choppy or of lower quality. Feel free to leave a comment concerning it. I have a lot of ideas for this novel, but the delivery may fall short at times. Especially during fight scenes. It is an unfortunate reality, though one I strive to overcome with time and practice. That said, I would appreciate it if you give me and my writing a chance. I have a long ways to go as an author, but I still hope that my work has enough merit to be viewed as an enjoyable read. Sincerely, Dontlookdown

The description is well done, and the characters have their own voice. The plot is pretty solid too. The one thing that I would like a bit more of is world building and a bit more description, which I believe the author is skilled enough to pull of. Overall, I would recommend this book.

Gotta love a good homicidal love triangle. I think the writing quality is good, just has the odd sentence or two. I would love to learn a bit more about the world the novel is set up in, even if it focuses on a royal handmaiden and her suitors. The introduction of the witch also brings magic into the mix, and I look forward to how that affects the story. I can see great potential, and I hope that the author can take this story to the next level.

I enjoyed the main character and the choice of becoming a druid. Mixing a high-tech world with an RPG fantasy is a great concept, which I believe to be this novel's strong point. I would like it if more of the game's background was expanded upon. I think it would benefit from a bit more exposition.

The premise is great. I have a soft spot for OP kingdom stories thanks to overlord. The writing quality is a slight issue with the first few chapters, but I could see it improving as I read farther in. As for the characters, I found Rico to be my favorite. Pacing was a problem, but again, improves as the story goes further along. I think with some editing-- mixed with the gradual improvement of the writing quality --this can go from a good novel to a great one.

A lot of thought and work was clearly put into creating the background of the gods and their actions, which is awesome. The characters are well-written, and the progression of the MC is nice. There are some moments where the pacing felt a little fast, or the dialogue was a bit clunky, but it was a good read overall.

It is not a bad story. I think the main issue is that there are some grammar mistakes, but the novel is far from poorly written. It fits the webnovel criteria, and I wish the author success on their journey.

For this novel, I enjoyed my time reading it. In my opinion, the basic description, story, and pacing are there. Although, they could be improved. Not many chapters out yet, but I hope that the author shows more about the MC's personality and kindness. I wish you luck in writing your novel!

The writing in this novel is one of the best you will find on WN, and I mean it. It is fluid, with plenty of description. The pacing is also well-thought-out. As a novel, this makes it stand out on its own. For world-building, it is acceptable. It is another story set inside a VR game (as advertised), and nothing is drastically different from other novels of this genre. The MC is also as advertised: a useless scumbag. The author does use this for comedic purposes, and I would argue that he does okay at that. Only 8 chapters are currently up, so not much time for character development as of yet. The main issue that I see is the lack of redeemable traits, but that could change later in the novel. It could not change much either, but this won't be a big issue if the comedy remains fresh and does not get old. Overall, I would recommend this novel. My review may come off as harsh to some readers, but this is a critical take on the work. It is a good novel that can stand on its own merit, and I enjoyed reading the story.

It only has one chapter at the moment, but the concept is great. It reminds me of a book I read when I was younger about an author who could make his creations come to life. The pacing is great too, and I can see the potential.

The blend of divinity, games, and evolution make for an interesting concept. The destitute situation that Timeless is in adds a sense of relatability to his character. I look forward to reading more of this work!

The idea is really fresh! I don't think I have read a setting that focused on royalty and witches quite like this one, and was rather surprised by it. The twist about the princess and the reason she was kidnapped got me, and I look forward to seeing how she acts with this situation.

I enjoyed how this novel led off with the MC being in a battle. It showed both his skill and bravery despite his lack of power, showing that he deserves the chance given to him. I also found the Demon King Book to be interesting, and I look forward to learning more about it. There are grammar mistakes, but those can be easily fixed, not to mention that the author will improve as well. I look forward to reading more!

I read through the novel (Ch9) and found the idea behind improving/fusing genes to be a great idea. It is a different take on a system than what is common. I also enjoyed the outlook on childhood and the way the author communicated that. Grammarly would increase the writing quality, as there are grammar mistakes present, but I think that problem can be remedied fairly easily. Not to mention that it will naturally improve as the author grows in skill.

The novel has a good premise, albeit one that has been seen before: Transported into another world. However, it focuses on psychological aspect of it instead of using it as a plot device to set up a fantasy world. There are issues with execution, mainly in delivery. For example, the beginning paragraph reads,"'Wait, where am I?' Davis asked himself after opening his eyes and looked at the blue ceiling that looks nothing like his favorite poster, which he always wanted to see when he woke up. He had never gotten that drunk. The problem at this point was not where he was but how he got there." It would be better to focus a bit more on setting up the scene and showing Davis's thoughts and confusion. One example could be 'Where am I'. With a groan and a few mumbled curses, Davis managed to right himself up on the mattress. After waking up on an unfamiliar bed and greeted to the sight of a foreign ceiling, He knew he had ****ed up. Not seeing his favorite poster on the ceiling was a good indication that he had crashed somewhere other than his house. But the question of how he had gotten into this mess didn't matter, he would care about that detail latter, preferably when he was less hungover. All he needed to do was find out where he was. Pacing is also a bit of an issue. The novel seems to go a bit fast, but this can be easily corrected. All the author has to do is slow down, add some details, and make use of writing in third person. Adding info and using third person to better explain what is going on and how the characters feel would fix the pacing. Right now, I would say that dialogue makes up the majority of the novel. While not bad in its own right, it can hurt pacing. I would suggest making dialogue a smaller percentage of the novel than what it is currently. That doesn't mean cut it out, but spread it farther apart by fleshing out details. and making use of third person narration. I look forward to what the author can do with this story.