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[DISCONTINUED] HP: A Bolt from the Blue

Book&Literature · Ashtar29

Tyrfringr

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thanks for the chapter.

ch 49 Chapter 16: Revealing The Truth

Tyrfringr

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I don't believe that it was mentioned in this story if Harry knows anything about the Marauders or map, though I could be mistaken.

ch 41 chapter 9:The Dueling Hall

Tyrfringr

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it says "until they reached majority." I believe this meant to say maturity.

ch 0 4 Change in Magic, and World Tour

HP: A Magical Journey [Complete]

Book&Literature · FictionOnlyReader

The story is an interesting concept which is held back by a couple of factors: 1. the grammar and spelling is atrocious and the author should find a proofreader or editor and 2. the Celestial Forge system, while interesting, has zero explanation for how it works, and only recommends other books to read that also use it. The time frame of the story is an odd choice to me but I think it could be better if it slowed down the pace at first and really took some time to show the new Harry's personality as it feels very rushed. While I can feel fine with the current time for the takeover of the soul, I personally would have chosen when Harry turns 11 as that is considered a significant point for wizards, and could be used as justification for any changes such as the eiditic memory. Overall I do think that this story has a lot of potential.