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These high-grade Heavenly Arts also produced powerful abilities he hadn't even seen in his previous art. One such Art included the ability to create Law essence claws that can twist apart space and slow down time!

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Eastern · CosmicPrime

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"Five loud thuds" is beter English "thumbs" make no sense.[img=recommend]

Five loud thumbs reverberated as the beasts' beheaded heads crashed into the snow. At the same time, the snowy white tigers' corpses slumped into the snow.

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Eastern · CosmicPrime

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Also maby change guzheng to zither as most people reading in English won't know what a guzheng is. Just a suggestion.

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Eastern · JosieGan

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Hearing that, Murong Mengxin glared/looked at the maidservant briefly, making her shudder.

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Eastern · JosieGan

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But the Xia Tian in front of her looked so different

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Eastern · JosieGan

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he could feel a strange feeling from his grandson,

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Eastern · JosieGan

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Liu Ying was dumbfounded, she was speechless, as she continued to stare at her son strangely. She tried to digest her son's words, but her mind still couldn't accept it, she subconsciously muttered to herself.

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Eastern · JosieGan

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easy for you to ask her for

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Eastern · JosieGan

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Feeling the warmth of Liu Ying's hand on his cheek, Xia Tian immediately opened his eyes as he looked at Liu Ying with a smile. He pulled Liu Ying into his lap, and wiped her tears away, then hugged her, as he said softly

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Eastern · JosieGan

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1yr

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because she had just checked her son's condition not long ago

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Eastern · JosieGan

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1yr

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Excessive use of He and Also Maby something Like : Since then he has become lazy, insolent and rude. Turning into a debauchee, often seducing many women to sleep with him, both married or single. Often going to brothels sleeping with many prostitutes.

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Eastern · JosieGan

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Bad Sentence Structuring, staring with and, maby something like : Under the coffin there is a large circle with various engraved symbols, it looks like a circle of forbidden arts, only useable by certain races. Those that looks at the circle will find it strange, because in this advanced laboratory, there exists an ancient forbidden arts circle.

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Eastern · JosieGan

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