FujiCigarette

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A 2 year old dead fanfic.. had a lot of potential.. it makes me cry finding these 😭

ch 12 CH XII

Fate Factory: A Certain Emiya in Fantasy Harvest Moon

Anime & Comics · Abbeysensei

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Its late and stuff.. but why does he keep adding patterns to his beam.. why not just focus on speed.. like if he hits a small part of the target its basically immobilizes them he has free hit.. why focus on making patterns in his disk?

ch 11 Ch 11 - Training Timeskip

FujiCigarette

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Only gripe i have about this is his seemingly infinite energy as he just keeps throwing beam after beam, like... Is he a stamina monster or is the devil fruit just costless? In most fics uaing devil fruit usually eats stamina or physical strength.. what gives??

ch 0 8 Ch 08 - The Skirmish

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Is this mtl? If so whats its chinese title?

ch 0 1 1

A traveling businessman in grand line.

Fantasy · k6aQ4w8r3B7lc4g

FujiCigarette

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Discovered this story recently.. so when i saw the update gap, i didnt really feel it.. its like youve been here all the time for me 🤣

ch 39 39 - "End" of the battle

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How daheck did she guess hes from the future just from describing something from a movie.... where did the leap of logic come from... and i dont even know if shes serious or not... makes the scene feel so ditached... im gonna read a few more chapters.. but im already thinking of dropping this

ch 0 8 I, a Former Soldier, Cannot Even Do a Single Push-up.

FujiCigarette

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Hard to trust an author who doesnt even know what rhyme means... you read magus as mei-gos or something? To make it rhyme with psychos?

ch 0 2 Young master Dio

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From 600k to 1.2 billion??? Billion??? Daheck, skipped liked a couple hundred millions there, just seems like too much of a stupid price hike

ch 76 Adams Wood and Trouble

One Piece: A Totally Different Law

Anime & Comics · ArifuretaForever

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Continuity is too confusing.. its just one scene from the next.. i cant even picture the scene happening...

ch 0 3 Choosing(2). Granny and Sister Melo *

MHA: Minor Quirk System ( almost having no quirk)

Anime & Comics · X_x_INFINITY_x_X

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Its good if you stick to the direct writing style consistently, theres also a trick in which to drop hints in this type of storytelling.. im still reading it as of today im at ch 39.. the following 2 chapters from this chapter i filled me in with what i was missing. which is fortunate because im binge reading. But if i was reading it when it was releasing, id have waited a day or two and wouldve lost attention.. keep it up i look forward to your writing. It keepa me relaxed

ch 24 Peace and Future Again.

MHA: 'Serene' Life in Another World

Anime & Comics · Gonshido

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This chapter really makes me wanna drop it.. not because of the story.. just the way you write it. Some authors write in a way that has a little bit of foreshadowing thats not noticeable, something very subtle. but with your writing style that is quick and to the point(which isn't bad) it just doesnt subconsciously prepare anyone for an acceptable twist.. that it just leaves me hanging with a weird sense of disappointment.

ch 24 Peace and Future Again.

MHA: 'Serene' Life in Another World

Anime & Comics · Gonshido

I miss the days when a system is just a system... novels nowadays give the system too many annoying features.. what ever happened to work with what you got.. now even the system can be begged for anything... makes the system lose its uniqueness and mystery if any host can just bargain with it.