Daoist_ChaosLord - Profile

The story is fine and the quality of the writing is fine as well but this story isn't for me, the MC faints way too much for my liking. He faints after almost every fight...

There is a way of expressing your dislike without being rude. Saying trash trash trash all the time makes you feel good ? Instead of saying that its trash you can simply give constructive advice, otherwise your just being an ass.

The concept was interesting, chakra - Qi cultivation - one piece fusion but here are what I have noticed in this fanfic: Writing Quality : This fanfic is hard to understand since english isn't the authors main language. the first 10 chapters are the worst and then gets better but still hard to understand. I encourage you author because english is very easy to learn, so i have no doubt you'll get better. Story developement : There isn't much story developement. The story starts off VERY fast. The author tried integrating the concept of cultivation of Qi in his fanfic and it is interesting but the way it is shown is once again VERY fast. A lot of time skips so it's more of a wish-fulfillement fanfic. Character Design : There was barely any character design, we learn the name of the MC in chapter 9... There is almost no interaction with any other characters in the story and if the MC does interact, it goes very fast once again. World Background : There is no world building in this fanfic, probably because the author assumes everyone knows the world of naruto. All of the things that have been mentioned can be resumed to this fanfic not having much flesh around the bones. Author if you're reading this, maybe you could go a bit slower and add some details, dont rush.