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  • The Story is dropped until rework.

    The Story is dropped until rework.

    Fantasy

    Apophis. The very incarnation of all things evil. His sole purpose was to consume all the creation. Immortal and Eternal. He was the bane of all things alive and dead. So all the gods come together sealing him, but at a great sacrifice. But unknown to them a small fragment manages to escape. But this story is not about his fragment and maybe it's revenge. It's about, how what you may see may not be truth. What you hear may be False. It's about a boy and his spirit, who start on a journey to save the universe. Because, sometimes you need to destroy to create. Author doesn't knows why he is posting this. He has a few idea... But they are just ideas. Because author is hopeless. Author will try to write a story. It might be something like Xianxia? .. What's something like xianxia anyway? Next chapter... Will be god knows when. But author knows one thing. Author is handsome. And handsome people don't do wrong.

  • Harry Potter and The Grey Side.

    Harry Potter and The Grey Side.

    Fantasy

    Harry Potter is born three years earlier and that changes everything. Being cast aside for his younger brother who is The Boy Who Lived, he is thrown to the Dursleys. Fortunately, he's saved by his Grandparents and this proves to be the turning point. Learning that strength is everything he starts his journey to become something more than just a wizard. But is everything that simple? Now he needs to navigate Wizard Politics, a delusional Old Man who believes in Greater Good, Aristocrats with multiple agendas, a civilization still stuck in Victorian Era and romance. What you can expect? Strong MC, later OP. Wrong Boy Who Lived. MoD in later chapters. Dumbledore, Weasley, Potter Bashing. ( To some extent.) Sneak Fighting And things which break the laws of reality. Like a two year old rapping, and earth being flat. Harem... most probably no. Possible Romance Interest: DG MC will be dark grey with his own agendas. An alien invasion? No fixed schedule...

Moments

A ditzy big breasted healer or an airheaded goddess...
That should complete the pack. View More

dheerajsingh00002: 1 a yandare who scared of her past
2 a pervert fox girl
3 a dragon loli
4 a four in one pack
5 and now a machocist witch

What next a monster girl!!!!???????

What do you mean my cute disciples are Yanderes? · C45
1 month ago
Transcending The Nine Heavens View More

ZedukelStarstryker: TTNH?

Eternal Sacred King
1 month ago

Heretoc: Finished the Story. Lots of Spoilers.

This story has few things going for it but many things against it.

The story is 5(?) story written by the author and is probably the latest one. The story was completed just 5 months ago. And this brings us to the problem. How can author with such experience write such a poor story?

It's short and fast but the story itself is neither funny nor intresting enough to keep your attention.

Pros :

1: With 660 chapters it's a pretty short Xianxia and System Novel.

2: It has slight comedic elements.

3: It's a system novel.

Apart from these three I couldn't find any reason to read this story.

Cons :

1: MCs character is highly one dimensional and conflicting. His behaviour changes with his mood. One moment he is preaching peace and the next he is destroying a whole sect and murdering everyone from the Ancestor to new recruits.

2: His motive to gain power is poor. The whole story is poorly executed. Power so he can relax and enjoy? Okay. But here you are trying extremely hard to do so when you could have done it through way simpler methods.

3: Lots of plot holes, incomplete story lines and half way buildup. Whether it's the flame tatoo he gets after killing a Buddhist Sect Ancestor or is the Dark god realm. Same way, it's not explained properly whether the Alliance is from other dimension, is one the same planet but just divided by a barrier or they from another planet. It just doesn't makes any sense. Similarly, what exactly is that nine headed bug? Way too many incomplete story lines.

4: Cultivation system is shabby? Incomplete? Hastily made? I have no idea what to say. Almost all cultivation novels have becoming God as an end point. Here, it's not so. His strength makes him the strongest but the cultivation realm is not so. Their are many people in the same cultivation level. Thats it

5: The way he earns anger is through thrash talking. There are so many ways he could have earned anger. Vandalism, pranking, stealing...but no, the only way he thinks to do so is through the thrash talk.

6: System. It basically converts anger points to cultivation attributes. But it's not expanded upon. It's origin, it's end, its function. Nothing. Above all, after few chapters author just makes up some anger point number to suit his requirements.

All ina ll. Poor story.

I Don't Want To Defy The Heavens
1 month ago
Reading Status: C33
Finished the Story. Lots of Spoilers.

This story has few things going for it but many things against it.

The story is 5(?) story written by the author and is probably the latest one. The story was completed just 5 months ago. And this brings us to the problem. How can author with such experience write such a poor story?

It's short and fast but the story itself is neither funny nor intresting enough to keep your attention.

Pros :

1: With 660 chapters it's a pretty short Xianxia and System Novel.

2: It has slight comedic elements.

3: It's a system novel.

Apart from these three I couldn't find any reason to read this story.

Cons :

1: MCs character is highly one dimensional and conflicting. His behaviour changes with his mood. One moment he is preaching peace and the next he is destroying a whole sect and murdering everyone from the Ancestor to new recruits.

2: His motive to gain power is poor. The whole story is poorly executed. Power so he can relax and enjoy? Okay. But here you are trying extremely hard to do so when you could have done it through way simpler methods.

3: Lots of plot holes, incomplete story lines and half way buildup. Whether it's the flame tatoo he gets after killing a Buddhist Sect Ancestor or is the Dark god realm. Same way, it's not explained properly whether the Alliance is from other dimension, is one the same planet but just divided by a barrier or they from another planet. It just doesn't makes any sense. Similarly, what exactly is that nine headed bug? Way too many incomplete story lines.

4: Cultivation system is shabby? Incomplete? Hastily made? I have no idea what to say. Almost all cultivation novels have becoming God as an end point. Here, it's not so. His strength makes him the strongest but the cultivation realm is not so. Their are many people in the same cultivation level. Thats it

5: The way he earns anger is through thrash talking. There are so many ways he could have earned anger. Vandalism, pranking, stealing...but no, the only way he thinks to do so is through the thrash talk.

6: System. It basically converts anger points to cultivation attributes. But it's not expanded upon. It's origin, it's end, its function. Nothing. Above all, after few chapters author just makes up some anger point number to suit his requirements.

All ina ll. Poor story. View More
I Don't Want To Defy The Heavens
1 month ago
I have an Email account purely dedicated to having fun with scammers. I usually answer them and lead them on long chases until they decide to rage quit. And I have gotten better with each one. Dealt with a Nigerian Prince, A partnership proposal from Coca Cola, a small company asking help, a gold magnate looking for seller and even NASA... Sometimes I have to question their IQ! View More

PettyOfficer: Remember kids: NEVER open a suspicious email and NEVER click on anything in an email, or you might unwillingly be transported into another world.

Or, you know, lose your bank information.

Unfathomable Patriarch · C1
1 month ago
-1 star. Rushed ending.

Lots of plotholes and incomplete story lines.

Confusing ending. You feel that lots of content is missing. View More

Heretoc: The story is already completed. So no Mad Snail dropping book drama.

Some minor spoilers.

Currently at chapter 850. The story has around 1000 chapters. So this willl cover a lot of things.

IMPORTANT points : It's a Harem. Around 5 girls. I am reading from raws so many names might be different from the translation.

I will start with Cons :

1: Last Moment Saviour. : Author takes this to the extreme. Until Ch 800 there have been almost 10+ instances of this. Everyone will be dying or just on deaths door step and only then MC will swoop in to save them. And most of the the time the enemy power will only attack MCs family, that too when he is somewhere else.

2: Villains : Cliche and Copy Paste. Don't expect something clever from them. It's mostly the usual, they will attack. MC will ruin them. They will call their Master or Owner, who will be considerably stronger. MC will escape due to his treasures or some strong guy saving him.

3: Characters : Many characters are left or forgotten.

4: Plot Holes : Lots of small plot Holes. But nothing major to affect the story.

5: Romance. : It's an Harem of around 5 girls. It's the xianxia style romance where Girl will be strong and when MC catches up, she will only sit back.

6: Character : He's a Gary Stu. Although sometimes he does break out of the mold.

7: Plot Armor : This MCs plot Armor is his knife. It's one of the most comprehensive ot Armor. Want to attack? It's sharpness is unparalleled. Even Characters several realms above him are killed or injured at the least. Injured? The mysterious chi will heal you of all ailments. Want to control a treasure spirit? The knife will help you. Want to break formations? Let the knife lead. Want to earn money? Use the knifes secret techniques.

8: World Building : It's okay.

PROs:

1) Short story: With just 1000 chapters the story is actually pretty short.

2) Fillers : Quite few fillers.which is pretty good.

3) Story : Mostly Engaging.


In the end, it's better than most Xianxias flooding the market. I have tried to keep the spoilers at minimum. You can mesage for more spoilers.

Nine Astra Skies
1 month ago

Heretoc: The story is already completed. So no Mad Snail dropping book drama.

Some minor spoilers.

Currently at chapter 850. The story has around 1000 chapters. So this willl cover a lot of things.

IMPORTANT points : It's a Harem. Around 5 girls. I am reading from raws so many names might be different from the translation.

I will start with Cons :

1: Last Moment Saviour. : Author takes this to the extreme. Until Ch 800 there have been almost 10+ instances of this. Everyone will be dying or just on deaths door step and only then MC will swoop in to save them. And most of the the time the enemy power will only attack MCs family, that too when he is somewhere else.

2: Villains : Cliche and Copy Paste. Don't expect something clever from them. It's mostly the usual, they will attack. MC will ruin them. They will call their Master or Owner, who will be considerably stronger. MC will escape due to his treasures or some strong guy saving him.

3: Characters : Many characters are left or forgotten.

4: Plot Holes : Lots of small plot Holes. But nothing major to affect the story.

5: Romance. : It's an Harem of around 5 girls. It's the xianxia style romance where Girl will be strong and when MC catches up, she will only sit back.

6: Character : He's a Gary Stu. Although sometimes he does break out of the mold.

7: Plot Armor : This MCs plot Armor is his knife. It's one of the most comprehensive ot Armor. Want to attack? It's sharpness is unparalleled. Even Characters several realms above him are killed or injured at the least. Injured? The mysterious chi will heal you of all ailments. Want to control a treasure spirit? The knife will help you. Want to break formations? Let the knife lead. Want to earn money? Use the knifes secret techniques.

8: World Building : It's okay.

PROs:

1) Short story: With just 1000 chapters the story is actually pretty short.

2) Fillers : Quite few fillers.which is pretty good.

3) Story : Mostly Engaging.


In the end, it's better than most Xianxias flooding the market. I have tried to keep the spoilers at minimum. You can mesage for more spoilers.

Nine Astra Skies
1 month ago
Oh and it's probably rushed. I am at 850 and yet to see author tying up his plots. He is still introducing new realms. Like few chapters back he just introduced the divine realm. So he probably jast hastily tied up everything and has left us with an sub par ending. View More

Heretoc: The story is already completed. So no Mad Snail dropping book drama.

Some minor spoilers.

Currently at chapter 850. The story has around 1000 chapters. So this willl cover a lot of things.

IMPORTANT points : It's a Harem. Around 5 girls. I am reading from raws so many names might be different from the translation.

I will start with Cons :

1: Last Moment Saviour. : Author takes this to the extreme. Until Ch 800 there have been almost 10+ instances of this. Everyone will be dying or just on deaths door step and only then MC will swoop in to save them. And most of the the time the enemy power will only attack MCs family, that too when he is somewhere else.

2: Villains : Cliche and Copy Paste. Don't expect something clever from them. It's mostly the usual, they will attack. MC will ruin them. They will call their Master or Owner, who will be considerably stronger. MC will escape due to his treasures or some strong guy saving him.

3: Characters : Many characters are left or forgotten.

4: Plot Holes : Lots of small plot Holes. But nothing major to affect the story.

5: Romance. : It's an Harem of around 5 girls. It's the xianxia style romance where Girl will be strong and when MC catches up, she will only sit back.

6: Character : He's a Gary Stu. Although sometimes he does break out of the mold.

7: Plot Armor : This MCs plot Armor is his knife. It's one of the most comprehensive ot Armor. Want to attack? It's sharpness is unparalleled. Even Characters several realms above him are killed or injured at the least. Injured? The mysterious chi will heal you of all ailments. Want to control a treasure spirit? The knife will help you. Want to break formations? Let the knife lead. Want to earn money? Use the knifes secret techniques.

8: World Building : It's okay.

PROs:

1) Short story: With just 1000 chapters the story is actually pretty short.

2) Fillers : Quite few fillers.which is pretty good.

3) Story : Mostly Engaging.


In the end, it's better than most Xianxias flooding the market. I have tried to keep the spoilers at minimum. You can mesage for more spoilers.

Nine Astra Skies
1 month ago
Reading Status: C26
The story is already completed. So no Mad Snail dropping book drama.

Some minor spoilers.

Currently at chapter 850. The story has around 1000 chapters. So this willl cover a lot of things.

IMPORTANT points : It's a Harem. Around 5 girls. I am reading from raws so many names might be different from the translation.

I will start with Cons :

1: Last Moment Saviour. : Author takes this to the extreme. Until Ch 800 there have been almost 10+ instances of this. Everyone will be dying or just on deaths door step and only then MC will swoop in to save them. And most of the the time the enemy power will only attack MCs family, that too when he is somewhere else.

2: Villains : Cliche and Copy Paste. Don't expect something clever from them. It's mostly the usual, they will attack. MC will ruin them. They will call their Master or Owner, who will be considerably stronger. MC will escape due to his treasures or some strong guy saving him.

3: Characters : Many characters are left or forgotten.

4: Plot Holes : Lots of small plot Holes. But nothing major to affect the story.

5: Romance. : It's an Harem of around 5 girls. It's the xianxia style romance where Girl will be strong and when MC catches up, she will only sit back.

6: Character : He's a Gary Stu. Although sometimes he does break out of the mold.

7: Plot Armor : This MCs plot Armor is his knife. It's one of the most comprehensive ot Armor. Want to attack? It's sharpness is unparalleled. Even Characters several realms above him are killed or injured at the least. Injured? The mysterious chi will heal you of all ailments. Want to control a treasure spirit? The knife will help you. Want to break formations? Let the knife lead. Want to earn money? Use the knifes secret techniques.

8: World Building : It's okay.

PROs:

1) Short story: With just 1000 chapters the story is actually pretty short.

2) Fillers : Quite few fillers.which is pretty good.

3) Story : Mostly Engaging.


In the end, it's better than most Xianxias flooding the market. I have tried to keep the spoilers at minimum. You can mesage for more spoilers. View More
Nine Astra Skies
1 month ago
Oh there is progress on there romance. But this is a sci-fic story so romance is in minority. View More

Dinkytinky: That’s a little sad. I’m on approx chapter 500 and the nuclear fusion project is just starting.
If I had to say two things it is that about now is when there really NEEDS to be some progress relationship-wise, and Yushan is the perfect candidate. It doesn’t need to be a big deal and super romantice, just that it needs to be an active thread in the plot line.
The other thing is everything is getting a bit too easy for him now. Super easy problem solving and government are close to being willing sycophants. I’m not saying it needs to change a lot, just make us feel that even the “genius” still has to make a bit of an effort.
Simply put, you can see the signs of the lost writer already. It doesn’t stand out too badly yet though.

Scholar's Advanced Technological System
1 month ago
It does improve after Chapter 250 and becomes quite good around 400. The level of racism drops a lot. Ofcourse slight racism is there but since author has moved on a universal level the usual trash talk is mostly in third party references.

The level of writing also improves drastically. The story becomes pretty engaging by this time.

I stopped reading around 500 or something as author had probably taken a break. The raw site wasn't updating any chapters for few days. So i am not what's the current status. But it had become pretty good by 500.

Not a 5 star read but definitely between 3.5 to 4. View More

duck_alternate44: PLEASE RESPOND Excuse me Heretoc but as it has been 6 months I would like to know if it's true that it gets better or should I dop it?

Legend of the Mythological Genes · C160
1 month ago

Heretoc: Why will they have a Inn when they have no tourist? It's a single city. And as far as people know, it's the only city. Why the hell would it have a Inn when it has no customers. It can have a tavern, bar, restaurant but Inn?
Seriously? At least think before commenting.

A Chaotic World · C11
1 month ago
Btw, if someone is looking for something unique, then this one is not for you. It's different but basically the same stuff served in a better way. But if you just want something good to read and waste your brain cells on...be my guest and read this.

And people with capabilities to bear MTL can find this novel on LNMTL with similar name. View More

Heretoc: I have read this story upto CH 680. So I probably have a good idea about the story. Next, their might be SPOILERS. Lots of them. So you are warned. I will try to be general and vague, but no promise.

I am dividing the review into multiple sections which each section focusing on major points or issues.

CLICHES : Let's just accept that their is no running from clichés. Authors have probably tried all different ways a story can go leaving us with numerous repetitions and iterations of the same thing. Fortunately ,this story has clichés, but author has done his best to not make it a copy-paste of some random CN Novel. And honestly, it's time we stop crying over clichés and just accept it as a major part of Chinese literature. And yes, that was an underhandedly insult.

Cultivation : It isn't exactly unique, but it does have few places where it shines. And we can't expect him to come with some new method of cultivation and magic. Not everyone is Brandon Sanderson. ( And his methods are weird but awesome ). The cultivation techniques are mixed and heavily inspired from many famous novels. I won't name them but all CN Novel veterans will probably realise quickly. During the early part of the novel, that's about until Ch 400(?) his cultivation technique was a major subplot. Even in later chapters it is and will play a part. His technique gives him Monster QI, which automatically makes him the enemy of Human kind.

Techniques : Overly top names with special effects. What else to say?

World : Just like most cultivation world's. Noob Village go Noob town to Noob City to Player 10-25 Village to Player 10-25 town and so on. Basically, the usual. It has its bright spots but mostly the same. Although Monster World and Ascending World's are still an enigma.

MC : He's okay. No Rape Guy. No Cruel MC. Not an MC who loves to destroy sects just for fun. Hardworking. Mostly calm. So no Lin Ming, Chu Yan or anything. It's probably not an harem despite numerous girls having an interest in him. He just wants to find his teacher.

OP Cheats? : Yes. But it's given by his teacher and not something belonging to him. They are basically top level treasures of that world. She stole them...she highhandedly took them and gave it to the MC. His Heaven Root? Belongs to the Phoenix god. His mind power stuff? It's an Buddhist seed. The technique? It's some supreme technique.

Enemies : You have both intelligent as well as run of the mill enemies. Don't expect intelligent MCs at the level of TTNH or any novel by that author.

I should have basically covered everything? Any doubts? Post it below.

Sorry for any mistakes. Some are mine others are mostly my mobile hanging up on me.

Eternal Sacred King
2 months ago

Heretoc: I have read this story upto CH 680. So I probably have a good idea about the story. Next, their might be SPOILERS. Lots of them. So you are warned. I will try to be general and vague, but no promise.

I am dividing the review into multiple sections which each section focusing on major points or issues.

CLICHES : Let's just accept that their is no running from clichés. Authors have probably tried all different ways a story can go leaving us with numerous repetitions and iterations of the same thing. Fortunately ,this story has clichés, but author has done his best to not make it a copy-paste of some random CN Novel. And honestly, it's time we stop crying over clichés and just accept it as a major part of Chinese literature. And yes, that was an underhandedly insult.

Cultivation : It isn't exactly unique, but it does have few places where it shines. And we can't expect him to come with some new method of cultivation and magic. Not everyone is Brandon Sanderson. ( And his methods are weird but awesome ). The cultivation techniques are mixed and heavily inspired from many famous novels. I won't name them but all CN Novel veterans will probably realise quickly. During the early part of the novel, that's about until Ch 400(?) his cultivation technique was a major subplot. Even in later chapters it is and will play a part. His technique gives him Monster QI, which automatically makes him the enemy of Human kind.

Techniques : Overly top names with special effects. What else to say?

World : Just like most cultivation world's. Noob Village go Noob town to Noob City to Player 10-25 Village to Player 10-25 town and so on. Basically, the usual. It has its bright spots but mostly the same. Although Monster World and Ascending World's are still an enigma.

MC : He's okay. No Rape Guy. No Cruel MC. Not an MC who loves to destroy sects just for fun. Hardworking. Mostly calm. So no Lin Ming, Chu Yan or anything. It's probably not an harem despite numerous girls having an interest in him. He just wants to find his teacher.

OP Cheats? : Yes. But it's given by his teacher and not something belonging to him. They are basically top level treasures of that world. She stole them...she highhandedly took them and gave it to the MC. His Heaven Root? Belongs to the Phoenix god. His mind power stuff? It's an Buddhist seed. The technique? It's some supreme technique.

Enemies : You have both intelligent as well as run of the mill enemies. Don't expect intelligent MCs at the level of TTNH or any novel by that author.

I should have basically covered everything? Any doubts? Post it below.

Sorry for any mistakes. Some are mine others are mostly my mobile hanging up on me.

Eternal Sacred King
2 months ago
Reading Status: C0
I have read this story upto CH 680. So I probably have a good idea about the story. Next, their might be SPOILERS. Lots of them. So you are warned. I will try to be general and vague, but no promise.

I am dividing the review into multiple sections which each section focusing on major points or issues.

CLICHES : Let's just accept that their is no running from clichés. Authors have probably tried all different ways a story can go leaving us with numerous repetitions and iterations of the same thing. Fortunately ,this story has clichés, but author has done his best to not make it a copy-paste of some random CN Novel. And honestly, it's time we stop crying over clichés and just accept it as a major part of Chinese literature. And yes, that was an underhandedly insult.

Cultivation : It isn't exactly unique, but it does have few places where it shines. And we can't expect him to come with some new method of cultivation and magic. Not everyone is Brandon Sanderson. ( And his methods are weird but awesome ). The cultivation techniques are mixed and heavily inspired from many famous novels. I won't name them but all CN Novel veterans will probably realise quickly. During the early part of the novel, that's about until Ch 400(?) his cultivation technique was a major subplot. Even in later chapters it is and will play a part. His technique gives him Monster QI, which automatically makes him the enemy of Human kind.

Techniques : Overly top names with special effects. What else to say?

World : Just like most cultivation world's. Noob Village go Noob town to Noob City to Player 10-25 Village to Player 10-25 town and so on. Basically, the usual. It has its bright spots but mostly the same. Although Monster World and Ascending World's are still an enigma.

MC : He's okay. No Rape Guy. No Cruel MC. Not an MC who loves to destroy sects just for fun. Hardworking. Mostly calm. So no Lin Ming, Chu Yan or anything. It's probably not an harem despite numerous girls having an interest in him. He just wants to find his teacher.

OP Cheats? : Yes. But it's given by his teacher and not something belonging to him. They are basically top level treasures of that world. She stole them...she highhandedly took them and gave it to the MC. His Heaven Root? Belongs to the Phoenix god. His mind power stuff? It's an Buddhist seed. The technique? It's some supreme technique.

Enemies : You have both intelligent as well as run of the mill enemies. Don't expect intelligent MCs at the level of TTNH or any novel by that author.

I should have basically covered everything? Any doubts? Post it below.

Sorry for any mistakes. Some are mine others are mostly my mobile hanging up on me. View More
Eternal Sacred King
2 months ago
And QI has censored the word *******. In case this word is censored it's A M A T E U R. Just like this censor. View More

Heretoc: I never rate novels by upcoming ******* authors except, when it's great or very bad.

This story is not bad, but the way it's going, it will soon be. Why?

1: Language. I am not expecting perfect grammar, but at least enough to make it readable. Wrong sentence formation, no punctuations, long sentences, lack of conjunctions etc. Have you even ran it on a text editor like Word or on a grammar correcting software like Grammarly?

2: Extremely long paragraphs : After first two chapters I found myself skipping most of the chapters. The language already makes it a burden to read. Add these long paragraphs, you find yourself questioning why?

3: MC : As many people already said, the MC is an idiot. How can someone who is around 18, become an idiot who acts like a kid. Until two or three chapters in, he seem to remember the Canon. Now? He remembers nothing. The best part of it? There seems to be no rhyme or reason behind it. It just is.

4: Story : It's extremely wordy and long drawn. Unnecessary details and over explanation just ruin it for me. All this with poor language and long paragraphs, force you to skip.

I have many more things to point out but I am too tired to do so. So sorry, but I am dropping it. This story is not for me.

Oh and it's over rated. Why does it even have a 4. Rating when the story is not even around a 3?

Douluo Dalu: 9 Treasure Sword
2 months ago
Reading Status: C0
I never rate novels by upcoming ******* authors except, when it's great or very bad.

This story is not bad, but the way it's going, it will soon be. Why?

1: Language. I am not expecting perfect grammar, but at least enough to make it readable. Wrong sentence formation, no punctuations, long sentences, lack of conjunctions etc. Have you even ran it on a text editor like Word or on a grammar correcting software like Grammarly?

2: Extremely long paragraphs : After first two chapters I found myself skipping most of the chapters. The language already makes it a burden to read. Add these long paragraphs, you find yourself questioning why?

3: MC : As many people already said, the MC is an idiot. How can someone who is around 18, become an idiot who acts like a kid. Until two or three chapters in, he seem to remember the Canon. Now? He remembers nothing. The best part of it? There seems to be no rhyme or reason behind it. It just is.

4: Story : It's extremely wordy and long drawn. Unnecessary details and over explanation just ruin it for me. All this with poor language and long paragraphs, force you to skip.

I have many more things to point out but I am too tired to do so. So sorry, but I am dropping it. This story is not for me.

Oh and it's over rated. Why does it even have a 4. Rating when the story is not even around a 3? View More
Douluo Dalu: 9 Treasure Sword
2 months ago
Hi, nice story. The only part where I have a problem is the foreshadowing. Nowhere in past chapters was it mentioned or even suggested that he would try to manipulate the girl for money. I am not asking for some outright decision like ' Let's help this girl and ask Money.' but slight hints or even vague thought process of him planning.

Next, the situation was highly coincidental. A bit of more foreshadowing would have worked wonders. Then was the noble and commoner dispute. Once again, except class differential in the school, no where have you mentioned the schism between nobles and commoners. I am assuming such action is common because of how people reacted, how Sophie said that he was already guilty, and how the rules worked.

This chapters feels more like a last moment work after some people commented that MC was on his way to become the next Jesus.

And just a suggestion. I personally think that he could have asked for more. A noble NOT getting his reputation sullied would be worth the extra pay. Ofc I am yet to see how the economics here work. So the to cost might be highly valuable.

And finally, why air ticket? View More
The Wielder of Death Magic · C4
2 months ago
Thanks. And I understand. That's why I stopped replying. The only reason I replied to your comment was due to the fact that it was a reasonable question and observation. Not some guy looking for a fight. 😅 View More

Heretoc: First of all, do ignore all the comments while reading.

It's funny how people are okay with even worst plot holes in your standard xianxia but are complaining about it in a Original.

He's a 15 year old sheltered kid. And you all bloody expect him to be some sort of strategic genius? He is basically sentenced to death and is somehow managing to etch out his livelihood. What are you even expecting? You expect him to live in forest and like all Xianxia MC earn multiple level ups? He's 15 years old. It's that age when you were not even out of school.

He should have stayed in the forest as he was ready to do so as a guardian? He was indoctrinated to believe that they are protectors. He himself claimed that he didn't knew that even demons had hierarchy. He realised that he was unprepared. Above all, earlier he was ready to give his life because of his wish to protect humanity. Why should he do so when he himself has been betrayed? And would he really be able to cultivate properly in a forest? Use some common sense.

And everyone asking about his hate for humanity? It might have been exaggeration or something planned for the future. Why are you expecting something that was mentioned in the summary to happen with first few chapters? And then you complain that his hate was too sudden. Now author is trying for a slow build, and you idiots are questioning it every single chapter. The Synopsis is supposed to be for the whole story and not just the prologue as many people here seem to think.

If you have problems, tell the author about it, instead of complaining and whining every chapter : What do you think went wrong, what could be corrected, what did you expect.

And once again he is a kid, not a superman hunter. He is doing what he could. And yes, his plans for revenge seems half-hearted, but what does he even has to lose? People believe him dead or want him dead, basically a carte blanche to kill him. He can't just go back to the academy, and live there. Of course he will plan for revenge!

Anyway, I am barely 20 chapters in but all the mindless idiots were annoying me with half though comments every chapter.


And if you all have so many problems, fucking write your own story, instead of complaining of what YOU want. It's his story.If he wants he can make the MC a girl and kill him be dropping the moon on him. You can't do ANYTHING. It's his property. So stop acting like it's his previlage to wrote for you.


So signing off

And sorry for the rant.

Will give a proper review after 100-150 chapters in.

And don't mind the idiots. Just write what you want. But do read the comments for ideas or two. Some people honestly want to help you and criticise for a reason. Others just want a reason to complain.

A Chaotic World
2 months ago
Lol. If it was so simple everyone would be doing it. I love going through the comments. The comments are usually insightful, funny, or just correcting the author. Many times the comments point out things that you have missed, don't know or might be connected to something else. Like that 'Explosion' chant from Megumin...I didn't knew what it was until I found it in comments. Other times you can see a whole debate going on in comments sections which most of the time is more entertaining than the chapter.

You also have people offering hypothesis or trying to predict the plot. All in all, it's hard to NOT read the comments.

Apart from that, when you swipe up to change chapters, you are still able to read the top three comments. I am not sure about now, but during the early days, most of the top three comments were criticism. It was mainly because of this I was annoyed.

I remember when I was a daily visitor of FF ,AOE, and RR, many authors dropped their stories because of heavy negative criticism, insults and even death threats ( yes, death threats). And it was not like their stories were bad. Many stories still feature in top rankings with most likes and follows. But the authors would simply leave because of how harsh the people were and are. I have personally seen authors breakdown because of heavy insults and criticisms, just because the story was not going how that particular reader wanted.

In extreme cases even accounts have been hacked and the authors stalked in real life. Yeah, it's taking to the extreme and it's hard to say if it will happen here. So, seeing people whine, complain and insult the author just pisses me off. If the author was charging money, I might have not said anything. But the chapters were free. And complaining despite the free stuff? View More

KookieMaster18: I get that some people post irritating comments(I just ignore them), but how hard is it to not read the comments? Is your purpose to read the novel or read upsetting comments?

Trust me, I know exactly how frustrating it is, but you should know that you’re doing exactly what they’re doing. Complaining about what somebody wrote instead of just STOP READING whatever it is he/she wrote...

And yes I agree, there is a difference between commenting and complaining.

A Chaotic World
2 months ago

Heretoc: And if you look at the whole story without any personal bias, you will feel that Dumbledore was setting everything up. In the end when Harry would die, he would swoop in and kill Voldie. Imagine, Light Lord Dumbledore, slayer of two dark Lords. He would become the next merlin.

Harry Potter And The Rise Of Golden Falcon · C54
2 months ago

Heretoc: Even in the first wizarding war, the Order was more of a spy organization than an armed one. Even now, despite knowing that Voldie is back they are hardly preparing. Most of them are happy just listening and following Dumbledore. You never see them train themselves or even train Harry. Heck, at the end of the whole HP series Harry hardly knew any offensive spells apart from Expellarimus (I think I got the spelling wrong) and stupify.

Plus, they claim to be protecting the prophecy. 7 underaged children were able to get to the prophecy, breaking through one of the most restricted areas of ministry... Nice protection.

So, it was more a facade than anything.

Harry Potter And The Rise Of Golden Falcon · C54
2 months ago

Heretoc: It's quite funny seeing everyone complaining about him rating the novel with just a star. He does points out major flaw of this novel. I had to stop myself from face palming after i read the first few chapters. So I whole heartedly agree with the OP.

About the rating? We all can agree that Qidian's rating system is broken, one sided and utterly useless. I believe that more than 95% of the reviews just contain unintelligible gibberish, emotes and one line statements which are supposed to tell us everything. Any true review, if ever written, is soon submerged under the flood of nonsense reviews.

Btw, most of the novels hosted here, barely have an average 3.5 star rating. Basically, Qidian is just flooding the market with mediocre novels.

Anyway, I never see people complaining about the 5 star ratings which have well... Nothing.

Hypocrites.


Sorry for the rant!

I Might Be A Fake Cultivator
3 months ago
He gets a gf and they are quite dedicated to each other. In the latest RAWS she is his fiancée and wife in all but name View More

AlexandraHeimdallr: Any update in MC love history? Please don't spoiler to much I'm just in chapter 450. Hope the MC get a girlfriend someday

Scholar's Advanced Technological System
3 months ago

Heretoc: He couldn't. Two or three chapters back he tried raising undeads in the inner sanctum and they just turned to dust

Rise of The Undead Legion · C374
3 months ago
He couldn't. Two or three chapters back he tried raising undeads in the inner sanctum and they just turned to dust View More

Punnyanya: I thought the same, maybe in the next chap Dave revive her

Rise of The Undead Legion · C374
3 months ago
What is Wulin's true cultivation level and his power level? View More
Douluo Dalu: Wulin's Legend (HIATUS) · C124
3 months ago
True, but here we need to look at it from a different angle. If it was a normal novel or novella, commenting on it near 50-60 pages is okay. Not encouraged but okay. As 50-60 pages is easily above 15% of the whole average novel's content. But for a light novel, it might barely cross a percent.

For example, you can't criticise Song of Ice and Fire after just reading 50-60 pages. 50-60 pages and the world was barely built, the story's true purpose was yet to be shown and what not.

Coming back to this story. My major reason for this comment was reading complaints every time you end a chapter. It is okay if you are reading 1-2 chapters, but after 5 chapters it becomes annoying. Always the same group of people with the same complain.

Now about this story, light novels are written differently from your normal novels. The story is more spread out. If you read the story, author was trying to set everything up without giving away spoilers or future development. We knew what the MC knew. Nothing more. MC acted a bit stupid, but he is a kid. Why did people started expecting him to act like some veteran hunter or ranger. In later chapters it is not shown directly but it is easy to assume that these guardians were barely trained or taught, because they were just supposed to be sacrifices. So in all honesty, the kid knew nothing.

With demons roaming outside it was logical to enter the city. Here I agree, that he could have done it in a better way. Plus the mistakes he did later when hiding. But all in all, it just felt natural. He was going ahead as he planned, no long drawn future plan or something. He just wanted revenge. Even here we can see why he would want revenge. Basically his whole life was a big lie. Just image the existential crisis you woul go through if someone revealed that your country is nothing but say, a breeding farm for salves which are used to satisfy neighbouring countries from attacking....or something like that.

Mistakes were made. But barely few people pointed it out. I even asked author to keep reading the comments as some of them were really good. But others are just mean. A major reason many good authors drop the story is because of this. I have seen many stories on RRL and fanfic dropped because people were insulting in the comments section. Many assume that it is a privilege for the author that we are reading his story. But unless author asks payment it is not privilege but basically charity.

And sorry for the rant.

P.S : If he was contracted like CN authors on Webnovel you could have insulted him for all his worth ( although I don't encourage doing it ) because we expect quality product for what we are paying. But here it was free and instead of constructive criticism or even suggestions, most of them were orders(?), Insults etc. View More

catvi: Completely absolutely valid. It is encouraged to critique a novel based on earlier chapters.
In fact, 12 chapters is too many.
5-6 is the standard one. if a novel has 2k words on average per chapter than 6 chapters is already 50-60 pages in published books.
12 is like 100+ pages.
50 pages in is a pretty good spot to critique the fringing hell out of a novel.

A Chaotic World
4 months ago
And btw do point out the 'stupid' plotholes. View More

catvi: did he hire you with money? I've read the comments. Some of them were mean, but most of them were valid criticism.
And what's it to you if someone else critics a novel? Why are you butthurt?
If i see some stupid plothole, i am gonna point it out. if i see the mc being dumb, i am gonna point it out. no butthurt white knight will stop me.

A Chaotic World
4 months ago
Criticising story development that too 12 chapters in is not called valid criticism. The story has not even began to develop. If they are offering suggestions, it is great. But when you start questioning every single decision without even thinking for a bit...it's called being trolls.

And as a reader, seeing stupid comments every chapter is annoying.

MC is a 15 year old and most of them want him to act like a veteran ranger or hunter. This is not a xianxia where MC leaves to grow stronger in a forest and seems to know everything about survival.

He has lived his whole life being trained as a martyr. You really expect him to know what to do next when his only dream, his only reason to live was destroyed in such a way?

Anyway few of them were/are valid and constructive. Others are downright insulting.

Payment? Seriously?

You can't even support someone without being paid? View More

catvi: did he hire you with money? I've read the comments. Some of them were mean, but most of them were valid criticism.
And what's it to you if someone else critics a novel? Why are you butthurt?
If i see some stupid plothole, i am gonna point it out. if i see the mc being dumb, i am gonna point it out. no butthurt white knight will stop me.

A Chaotic World
4 months ago
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