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Douluo Dalu: Wulin's Legend · C124
catvi: Completely absolutely valid. It is encouraged to critique a novel based on earlier chapters.
In fact, 12 chapters is too many.
5-6 is the standard one. if a novel has 2k words on average per chapter than 6 chapters is already 50-60 pages in published books.
12 is like 100+ pages.
50 pages in is a pretty good spot to critique the fringing hell out of a novel.A Chaotic World
catvi: did he hire you with money? I've read the comments. Some of them were mean, but most of them were valid criticism.
And what's it to you if someone else critics a novel? Why are you butthurt?
If i see some stupid plothole, i am gonna point it out. if i see the mc being dumb, i am gonna point it out. no butthurt white knight will stop me.A Chaotic World
catvi: did he hire you with money? I've read the comments. Some of them were mean, but most of them were valid criticism.
And what's it to you if someone else critics a novel? Why are you butthurt?
If i see some stupid plothole, i am gonna point it out. if i see the mc being dumb, i am gonna point it out. no butthurt white knight will stop me.A Chaotic World
catvi: did he hire you with money? I've read the comments. Some of them were mean, but most of them were valid criticism.
And what's it to you if someone else critics a novel? Why are you butthurt?
If i see some stupid plothole, i am gonna point it out. if i see the mc being dumb, i am gonna point it out. no butthurt white knight will stop me.A Chaotic World
catvi: "And everyone asking about his hate for humanity? It might have been exaggeration or something planned for the future. Why are you expecting something that was mentioned in the summary to happen with first few chapters? And then you complain that his hate was too sudden. Now author is trying for a slow build, and you idiots are questioning it every single chapter. The Synopsis is supposed to be for the whole story and not just the prologue as many people here seem to think."
So what you are saying is, the synopsis basicaly spoiled something that will happen far into the future?
Failure as a blurb.A Chaotic World
catvi: "If you have problems, tell the author about it, instead of complaining and whining every chapter : What do you think went wrong, what could be corrected, what did you expect."
Commenting on the chapters is a way to communicate with the author. do you even know what 'commenting' is ?A Chaotic World
Heretoc: The plot seems interesting enough. But the grammar...fricking grammar. It's horrendous. Disjointed sentences, wrong vocabulary, excessively long sentences, mixed up structure...I can just go on and on.
Unlike most stories with poor grammar it is at least understandable. And that makes it worse. You know you are reading something interesting but you can't enjoy it completely because you need to spend most of your grey cells figuring out the paragraphs.
Many of the mistakes here could have been corrected by just running it through Grammarly, or any free Editing Website. This story feels like a poorly executed Google Translation.
All the best.
I will try to read further, but honestly with how the grammar is going, it's gonna be difficult.Divine Talent Born Mortal
Divine Talent Born Mortal
Divine Talent Born Mortal
Krizantem: Thank you for writing such a detailed review.The story will repair itself in next chapters.I started this book as an indie story at first.After that , people like it and wanted more.So I have changed it is story line.If you read until Chapter 50 you can see how the story changes :)
-The Law God - Artic
Heretoc: The story has a good concept. With people studying Laws and becoming stronger, this whole idea has a huge scope for development.
But author has competely messed it up. His character goes from some Justice League type Hero to a guy who will kill anyone within 10-20 chapters. He happily demands money using intimidation. And honestly, I have no problem with it. But so fast? What about inner conflict? What about character development? His personality transition? Nope, nada. One moment he is talking about loving a girl because she is interesting, few chapters later he kill her without any remorse because she insulted him. What? Like honestly?
Next is the character. Robotic. Idiotic. He just goes on and on, no plans, no dreams and no personality. Heck, we don't even know how does he looks. What does he likes. His secret dream. Why does he want to get stronger. Nothing.
Above all, their is no planning in what he chooses. If you are given knowledge of all the things in your previous world, why not go with Quantum Forces, Energy, etc. Quite tough? What about gravity? Physics? Nuclear physics? But what he chooses? Cloud, fog, rain...
Anyway, it's authors personal choice but I wouod have liked to see some preplanning. Some thought in choosing your futures.
The cultivation system. It's weird. It's broken in a bad way.I can't describe it in any other way. Law difficulty and power makes no sense. Like Low God of Crow? What the hell did he study to achieve mastery of 'Crow'. And what makes a crow more complex than microorganisms which MC has chosen. And how did he merge ten laws to turn into a Crow law? Author is probably just bull****ting here. Similarly, what's long way? Law of Long way? Wtf? And believe me, it just gets weirder.
And like a cherry on a top...a rotten cherry. Editing. It's hard to understand anything they say. I have read better sentences while MTLing. Their are so many problems that I don't even know where to start. Some are quite minor, but the major ones make understanding anything impossible.
Author is also trying to make the world vast with a complex developed order structure and power structure. But all the laws just sound stupid and seem like an invitation for a full scale rebellion.
I have many more issues but that's it for now.
Author please get an editor. That itself will add a full three stars to the rating. We can ignore the rest, but poor editing just kills.of the mood to read anything.The Law God - Artic
The Law God - Artic
Heretoc: Review was written at Chapter 976.
After chapter 600 the story slowly goes down in both quality and content.
Where, once it was science fiction it's slowly moving into the realm of science fantasy.
Where once it was in the realms of possibilities, it's turned into just another modern day system novel where MC is the king.
The novel slowly looses it charm. Despite the complex mathematical questions and content, people can eto read it because it was something new. Something fun. How could a simple man turn into a genius through efforts. It even inspired people to study!
Now?
He's jumping from one mega project to another. One moment he's building a fusion reactor, the next he's sending people to moon using electric propulsion rocket. If that wasn't enough, he's building a space station in moons orbit and a semi settlement on moon. In between he's creating quantum computer and Lithium Air batteries and starting a mine on moon.
Plus most of the things makes no sense. he builds a rocket in around six months and sends them to orbit. Six months later he's sending three astronauted to months later they are launching a space station and a month later sending rocket to Mars. Wtf?
Are you making Lego pieces? What about tests? What about trials? The author knew his maths. Despite some problems it made you feel that, yes, this is some serious study.
But rockets? Author simply puts everything into the background. MC will build the thruster and engine, rest all is outsourced to other companies. Atleast describe it! Where you were once writing chapters after chapters decribing theorms and conjectures, now it's finished ina single para!
I have similar problems with his fusion reactor... But anyway.
It's now reaching chapter 1000,and we have no character development. He has just become more smarter and has fingers in several pies. His reaction after winning nobel? 'It's okay. ' The MC has become so dull that you need to force yourself to read any further.
His relationship? ZERO. It would have been fine if author wantshim to become a wizard. But why do you need to bring our attention to his relationship status every few chapters. He meets his parents, they ask about his marriage and gf. He talks with his his sister, she asks him about gf. He talks with people. Some or the other guy brings marriage and love into the equation. It gets annoying after few times.
After chapter 600-650, his practical and theoretical work slowly decreases. You have him meeting people after people, attending one conference after another, one award ceremony after another. We came to read about him and his love for maths. His research. It's fine if author wants to show the after effects, his popularity and how everyone treats him. But it has slowly taken over, what made this story attractive.
The guy has been solving a single theorem ( The Riemann hypothesis) for more than 100-200 chapters. It would have been great if author was simply extending it to increase the *******. It would vene make sense, as it is one of the most complex theorem. But nope! Most of the 200 chapters are shown him tinkering with other things, attending conference or him talking with politicians and businessmen.
The story is slowly losing its identity.
Yes, such things are required to show his growth in social status. But it should have been balanced with his research and study. Now even if he solves a theorem, it barely crosses a chapter or two. Rest 10 chapters are just reactions and discussions. The feeling you got when he solved something is missing. Now it's like...'oh, he solved it. Clap. Clap. Clap. '
Anyway. That's it for now.
Cya.Scholar's Advanced Technological System
Heretoc: True, she is doing nothing extreme. Just seems to have some sort of fantasical crush on MC.
Quick Transmigration: Saving The Crazy Villainess · C154
GedonistOver: Thanks for the chapter. Still think that Shing Lingxin is okay)
Quick Transmigration: Saving The Crazy Villainess · C154
frangky: I watch blade, never remember they with marvel
Long Live Ye Clan Second Young Master · C34
PatriarchZero: Earn money and live at an inn, you stupid. No one will disturb you there. Here you are endangering this innocent family and you yourself is at risk of exposure.
A Chaotic World · C11
DaoNotExist: tsk, i known that the mc is a pussy and was going to spare him, only a pussy would not live in the forest.
A Chaotic World · C10
Heretoc: First of all, do ignore all the comments while reading.
It's funny how people are okay with even worst plot holes in your standard xianxia but are complaining about it in a Original.
He's a 15 year old sheltered kid. And you all bloody expect him to be some sort of strategic genius? He is basically sentenced to death and is somehow managing to etch out his livelihood. What are you even expecting? You expect him to live in forest and like all Xianxia MC earn multiple level ups? He's 15 years old. It's that age when you were not even out of school.
He should have stayed in the forest as he was ready to do so as a guardian? He was indoctrinated to believe that they are protectors. He himself claimed that he didn't knew that even demons had hierarchy. He realised that he was unprepared. Above all, earlier he was ready to give his life because of his wish to protect humanity. Why should he do so when he himself has been betrayed? And would he really be able to cultivate properly in a forest? Use some common sense.
And everyone asking about his hate for humanity? It might have been exaggeration or something planned for the future. Why are you expecting something that was mentioned in the summary to happen with first few chapters? And then you complain that his hate was too sudden. Now author is trying for a slow build, and you idiots are questioning it every single chapter. The Synopsis is supposed to be for the whole story and not just the prologue as many people here seem to think.
If you have problems, tell the author about it, instead of complaining and whining every chapter : What do you think went wrong, what could be corrected, what did you expect.
And once again he is a kid, not a superman hunter. He is doing what he could. And yes, his plans for revenge seems half-hearted, but what does he even has to lose? People believe him dead or want him dead, basically a carte blanche to kill him. He can't just go back to the academy, and live there. Of course he will plan for revenge!
Anyway, I am barely 20 chapters in but all the mindless idiots were annoying me with half though comments every chapter.
And if you all have so many problems, fucking write your own story, instead of complaining of what YOU want. It's his story.If he wants he can make the MC a girl and kill him be dropping the moon on him. You can't do ANYTHING. It's his property. So stop acting like it's his previlage to wrote for you.
So signing off
And sorry for the rant.
Will give a proper review after 100-150 chapters in.
And don't mind the idiots. Just write what you want. But do read the comments for ideas or two. Some people honestly want to help you and criticise for a reason. Others just want a reason to complain.A Chaotic World
Heretoc: First of all, do ignore all the comments while reading.
It's funny how people are okay with even worst plot holes in your standard xianxia but are complaining about it in a Original.
He's a 15 year old sheltered kid. And you all bloody expect him to be some sort of strategic genius? He is basically sentenced to death and is somehow managing to etch out his livelihood. What are you even expecting? You expect him to live in forest and like all Xianxia MC earn multiple level ups? He's 15 years old. It's that age when you were not even out of school.
He should have stayed in the forest as he was ready to do so as a guardian? He was indoctrinated to believe that they are protectors. He himself claimed that he didn't knew that even demons had hierarchy. He realised that he was unprepared. Above all, earlier he was ready to give his life because of his wish to protect humanity. Why should he do so when he himself has been betrayed? And would he really be able to cultivate properly in a forest? Use some common sense.
And everyone asking about his hate for humanity? It might have been exaggeration or something planned for the future. Why are you expecting something that was mentioned in the summary to happen with first few chapters? And then you complain that his hate was too sudden. Now author is trying for a slow build, and you idiots are questioning it every single chapter. The Synopsis is supposed to be for the whole story and not just the prologue as many people here seem to think.
If you have problems, tell the author about it, instead of complaining and whining every chapter : What do you think went wrong, what could be corrected, what did you expect.
And once again he is a kid, not a superman hunter. He is doing what he could. And yes, his plans for revenge seems half-hearted, but what does he even has to lose? People believe him dead or want him dead, basically a carte blanche to kill him. He can't just go back to the academy, and live there. Of course he will plan for revenge!
Anyway, I am barely 20 chapters in but all the mindless idiots were annoying me with half though comments every chapter.
And if you all have so many problems, fucking write your own story, instead of complaining of what YOU want. It's his story.If he wants he can make the MC a girl and kill him be dropping the moon on him. You can't do ANYTHING. It's his property. So stop acting like it's his previlage to wrote for you.
So signing off
And sorry for the rant.
Will give a proper review after 100-150 chapters in.
And don't mind the idiots. Just write what you want. But do read the comments for ideas or two. Some people honestly want to help you and criticise for a reason. Others just want a reason to complain.A Chaotic World
Heretoc: First of all, do ignore all the comments while reading.
It's funny how people are okay with even worst plot holes in your standard xianxia but are complaining about it in a Original.
He's a 15 year old sheltered kid. And you all bloody expect him to be some sort of strategic genius? He is basically sentenced to death and is somehow managing to etch out his livelihood. What are you even expecting? You expect him to live in forest and like all Xianxia MC earn multiple level ups? He's 15 years old. It's that age when you were not even out of school.
He should have stayed in the forest as he was ready to do so as a guardian? He was indoctrinated to believe that they are protectors. He himself claimed that he didn't knew that even demons had hierarchy. He realised that he was unprepared. Above all, earlier he was ready to give his life because of his wish to protect humanity. Why should he do so when he himself has been betrayed? And would he really be able to cultivate properly in a forest? Use some common sense.
And everyone asking about his hate for humanity? It might have been exaggeration or something planned for the future. Why are you expecting something that was mentioned in the summary to happen with first few chapters? And then you complain that his hate was too sudden. Now author is trying for a slow build, and you idiots are questioning it every single chapter. The Synopsis is supposed to be for the whole story and not just the prologue as many people here seem to think.
If you have problems, tell the author about it, instead of complaining and whining every chapter : What do you think went wrong, what could be corrected, what did you expect.
And once again he is a kid, not a superman hunter. He is doing what he could. And yes, his plans for revenge seems half-hearted, but what does he even has to lose? People believe him dead or want him dead, basically a carte blanche to kill him. He can't just go back to the academy, and live there. Of course he will plan for revenge!
Anyway, I am barely 20 chapters in but all the mindless idiots were annoying me with half though comments every chapter.
And if you all have so many problems, fucking write your own story, instead of complaining of what YOU want. It's his story.If he wants he can make the MC a girl and kill him be dropping the moon on him. You can't do ANYTHING. It's his property. So stop acting like it's his previlage to wrote for you.
So signing off
And sorry for the rant.
Will give a proper review after 100-150 chapters in.
And don't mind the idiots. Just write what you want. But do read the comments for ideas or two. Some people honestly want to help you and criticise for a reason. Others just want a reason to complain.A Chaotic World
A Chaotic World
Heretoc: And if I remember correctly the Avengers turned into Vampires in one series. Stark was actually using his old armour to walk in sunlight.
Long Live Ye Clan Second Young Master · C34
Heretoc: They do have vampires. You have that Vampire clan that hunts Spider Man's, you have Vampires especially part of the Blade Series. I do remember Vampire popping up here and there in other series, but mostly Blade.
Long Live Ye Clan Second Young Master · C34
frangky: Since when marvel have a vampire?? If mutant is still make sense to me.
Long Live Ye Clan Second Young Master · C34
frangky: Since when marvel have a vampire?? If mutant is still make sense to me.
Long Live Ye Clan Second Young Master · C34
Heretoc: Did she poison the goods? Or why would she go out of her way to visit that particular shop an that particular day?
Quick Transmigration: Saving The Crazy Villainess · C136
Quick Transmigration: Saving The Crazy Villainess · C136
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