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KJGrenadier

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I am human. It's awesome.

2018-01-29 Joined Global

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It took a long time to read, but I will try with minimal to no spoilers. The sum of my review is based on when I read a story, I want to be glad I spent my time on it. I want to celebrate the characters and the choices they made. At the very least I want to see character growth, of which the MC had basically none. His character did not grow or fall; he was as flat as could be. He was just there to play the role. The only thing that changed was his increase in strength. The story is fun because of everything around him, but a lot of stories here are fun. So it really doesn't win anything. This is why I say if you haven't read it, feel free not to. But if you have, feel free to finish your investment. Onto more technical aspects that may matter to you: The story has great world-building. Many webnovels based around systems/cultivations have tiers of worlds the MC grows through, but it often becomes repetitive and boring. That does not happen *as much* here. I can think of two tiers that were excellent. Most characters are interesting, with only a few falling flat. Even so, they are not major distractions, just pointless. MC does not build a harem which I appreciate, but the author does fall into the culturally stereotypical depictions of female beauty with the occasional (rare in comparison to my estimate of the average webnovel on this site) use of sexually charged language. I can think of one female character who was very well-written with a great character arc, which was awesome. I forget if the author uses sexual analogies to describe situations. The Legendary Mechanic did it so much and I read both at the same time, so I am not sure if Super Gene did as well or not. If it did, it did it less and was less extreme. The repetitive use of words and overly lengthy descriptions to boost word count is kept to a decent minimum, though still present at times. So it is above average for a webnovel, but I am not the type to recommend novels based on the average, which is quite poor here. I don't know if this helps. Honestly, I feel like it doesn't, so I am sorry. I read this over a few years, so the minute details are hard to remember compared to the general feel.
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At last a good analogy I can read without cringing. So many times these stories seem to love using analogies based on different scenarios of cuckoldry, it's disgusting and perverted. I forget if Super Gene does that as well, but the Legendary Mechanic did it almost exclusively.

Han Sen didn't know if all the men who had fallen under a god's thumb were this dumb, but it was clear that Violet was completely convinced. It was like Violet was being sold as a slave, yet he was taking pride in calculating how much he was worth.

Super Gene

Super Gene

Sci-fi · Twelve-Winged Dark Seraphim

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Replied to pipe_fighter15
Ye Xiu?

Han Sen also clad himself in his Peacock King's soul robe. The two beast souls appeared on Han Sen at the same time, making Han Sen considerably stronger. He summoned power through Jadeskin again and threw a punch to meet the incoming storm of electricity.

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Super Gene

Sci-fi · Twelve-Winged Dark Seraphim

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The third-largest river in the world, located entirely within China.

The sadness was as broad and powerful as the Yangtze, rolling forward with the steadiness and implacability of a river. The sensation rocked Han Sen. The sadness was clear, yet it wasn't a raw or passionate emotion. It wasn't painful like losing your family, and it wasn't the heartache of being betrayed by a loved one. It wasn't the soul-rending anguish of losing everything that you cherished. It just resided in Han Sen's chest, softly. The ache was so gentle that sometimes, Han Sen could barely even sense it. It floated like a mountain stream, but there wasn't a single ripple to be seen.

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Super Gene

Sci-fi · Twelve-Winged Dark Seraphim

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says the guy.

Even though Han Sen had a voracious intellect and an impressive ability to learn, he could only walk one path. He couldn't learn everything there was to be learned in the universe.

Super Gene

Super Gene

Sci-fi · Twelve-Winged Dark Seraphim

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They are among the Very High who do not practice the Very High Sense, if I remember correctly.

"Not if Han Sen activated the glitch himself. If that happened, it would have nothing to do with us," Li Xue Cheng grinned darkly. He then went on to say, "He was the reason that we lost everything. Are you really going to sit back and accept that?"

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Super Gene

Sci-fi · Twelve-Winged Dark Seraphim

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Although they hadn't yet figured out where Han Sen's coincidence came from, they knew Han Sen's situation wasn't as dire as it seemed.

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Super Gene

Sci-fi · Twelve-Winged Dark Seraphim

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Coincidence? I think not!

Although they hadn't yet figured out where Han Sen's coincidence came from, they knew Han Sen's situation wasn't as dire as it seemed.

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Super Gene

Sci-fi · Twelve-Winged Dark Seraphim

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Replied to Breuno
Excellent! One grammar edit: before Eldrian and remembering his visit -> before Eldrian and him remembering his visit
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Nice.
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Very confusing to read, and very wordy. It took me a minute to figure out what you were saying. As a suggestion for how to make it a bit more brief and hopefully clear: Death in such a large battle is ["common", "likely", or "almost certain" depending on the gravity you want to give it], and resurrection in such chaos rare if not impossible. This is made all the more frightening by the fact that each person's death might only add to the undead's numbers. I think I still prefer my first edit, maybe. But this is my new suggestion while trying to cover all the bases and emotions that you hit with your current draft.
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