Slicer9875

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when I review, iIthink aboutt how good it is compared to other books, was it good? would i I ever consider rereading it.There are a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes, usually I could tell what the author wanted to say. It breaks immersion because I feel obligated to leave a comment for the author, but I gave up chapter 70, just too many typos, just leaving comments.There was a good twist on the fl. it switched pov to the villain not quite sure what was going on there. usually that is an attempt to give empathy or redemption and I didn't feel like it did either maybe because the villain was crazy.There are also a few things I didn't feel got addressed by the ML creating a logical inconsistency. particularly with how the maids treat ml's daughter.also not sure why fl played her hand so early, it doesn't feel safe and she should be a good parent but she created unnecessary danger for no reason. it wasn't bad but it wasn't particularly great either.

Slicer9875

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Commented

drinksw should be drinks. I think it's time to stop pointing out typos. too tired as they are increasing every chapter. the writing itself is fine. it just distracts from the story.

Jack Williams was having some drinksw with his brothers and cousins until the beautiful voice of his daughter was heard and Hearing that, a enchanting smile appeard on his face as he pulled his daughter in for a hug.

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Urban · Sharon_Rose18

Slicer9875

3mth

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thatz should be that

And with thatz she made her way to him with Mike behind her.

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Urban · Sharon_Rose18

Slicer9875

3mth

Commented

the whole sentence needs a rewrite. I get the idea but should be fixed.

And he was gonna pay him ever dim of the money he has given to him. When his fully ready to get Rena out if his life, his gonnaake sure his done with her father as well.

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Urban · Sharon_Rose18

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whether

Before Mike had became the CEO of the Xi's Enterprises, he was supported greatly by Rena's father. Wether or not it was because he and Rena were gonna get married or for other reasons, all he knew is that Mr. Williams played a big part in his success today.

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Urban · Sharon_Rose18

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3mth

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you not yiu

Well it depends on the rank or stand you hold in the family for yiu to have the right to leave with them.

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Urban · Sharon_Rose18

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3mth

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love not lowe

Mike said and hearing that, Katherine smiled as she nodded in approvement, "Ok sir, I will lovw to spend the day with her!"

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Urban · Sharon_Rose18

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3mth

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prize not price

[FYI: It was mike who had given the principal to make the price money high, I guess he already knew that Katherine was gonna win]

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Urban · Sharon_Rose18

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3mth

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big not bug

"Well Papa! I wanna go check out my bedroom, I want the bug one at the corner!"

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Urban · Sharon_Rose18

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3mth

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big not bug

"But if my Papa really loves my Mama then you will have to call me bug sister from then on!" Annabella said and hearing that, Jun agreed and they shaked on it.