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Orange_Omega: Let me start of this review with an overly-quick summarization of my thoughts on the web novel's contents 8 chapters into the story: Enjoyable but lacking in a couple departments
Let me start off with the first area, the release of the chapters. It's quite unpredictable, and that's a problem. The chapters come out a bit whenever and the author (Totally not me) has been a bit lazy. Although, in the latest chapter(ch8), the author(totally not me) did make a statement to release one chapter per week which at least is something.
The second area, the characters. The most interesting character of the cast is without one doubt our 'special' protagonist, Kenjiro Asukara. The character deviates from our average original web novel protagonist who's usually; Cocky, self-confident, half self-aware. Kenjiro is pretty much very different from those protagonists, he feels like he's the worst person out there and tries to live his life by that mindset. The other characters are somewhat interesting. The only characters we have gotten some character-development from are pretty much Anami and Narino so far which is a bit lacking, to say the least.
But, the comedy that is generated by the characters are quite funny so it's okay
Next area, plot. The plot of the story isn't really something to cheer about. The story is basically Kenjiro trying to lose the powers he gained randomly and give them to someone who deserves them, but the other characters(who've forced him into a club full of powerful people) try and succeed to stop him. So far, the plot isn't that great but is somewhat interesting.
Next area, Comedy. The half lackluster plot can be excused because from what I can see, the web novel is mainly a comedy novel. In that area it fairs well, there are a couple of times where I laughed out loud while reading the chapters. The comedy is mostly generated from Kenjiro and his stupid thoughts and actions and then a 'normal' person's reaction to it. Some of the scenes progress in a very satisfying way and keeps one interested
Last area; summary and tips.
The story as a whole is quite enjoyable to read and is sure to make one laugh once or twice, but the plot and characters do need some working on. Characters like Ibuki, Sora, and Eraijo feel quite 1D as of now. It also feels like the author(totally not me) is depending quite a lot on the quirkiness of Kenjiro for making the chapter interesting. It almost feels like the author(totally not me) had an interesting character idea and then decided to make a story out of that. It kind of works so far, but I feel like it's going grow stale after a while. That's only what I think though.
That was my review, I hope the author(totally not me) reads this and fixes the areas I mentioned
Real talk(rohtua eht em morf(<-- backwards)):
I'm so meta that I make extremely (un)funny jokes outside of the chapters now. But seriously, I don't think that my story deserves 5-stars so I didn't rate it that(like quite a lot of other authors tend to do). The review itself is a blend of real thoughts and joking.
Well, that's it for my shenanigans now. If someone's reading this before having read the series; Please do give a read and take the review with a grain of salt.
(I also totally didn't spend like 15 minutes writing this unnecessary review)Cool I got Super Powers and all, But I don't think I deserve them
also I'm immortal so yeah your not getting rid of me anytime soon (unless you stop writing I guess?)
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make it look meaningful
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there now I can be shameless
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FleetingClouds: wow, you're still alive! Long time no see lol, I will probably keep to it, cause I am not regularely writing at a specific time of the day like others do. Sometimes I write/feel like it, and sometimes I don't. I will cut the chapters from now on into smaller chapters though and release them at once. I think the format of 1k-2k per chap is more fitting for me. So don't get surprised the next time when there is more chaps, but only half is new stuff :)
Pokemon Untold [Currently Restructured] · C0
Pokemon Untold [Currently Restructured] · C0
also that priority list looks familiar......just like most peoples lol live your life have fun View More
Pokemon Untold [Currently Restructured] · C0
yuuta: 👍
Cool I got Super Powers and all, But I don't think I deserve them · C12
Cool I got Super Powers and all, But I don't think I deserve them · C12
-beautiful girl falls from sky and lands on him while accidentally kissing him
-enters the world of cultivation and gains a fiance who is a princess
-happens to cultivate a discouraged skill to find out that it not only lords over the other elements but also saves his life and gaines him a bin level pet
so your saying this thing is based of luck?
hahaha everyone who isn't named hao ren beware and be scared. his luck is defying the heavens. he is literally a man who became a dragon View More
Dragon King's Son-In-Law · C211
alejandrarbls: Thank you. And as an fyi I totally support the ss system as everyone deserves to make a living in one way or another. I also extremely appreciate the fact you have us a heads up before going premium.
Dragon King's Son-In-Law · C211
Pokemon Untold [Currently Restructured] · C18
Pokemon Untold [Currently Restructured] · C0
UncleOddball: I can't decide whether I like or dislike thw path this novel took for transmigration, wich says a lot of good. Gonna follow it up eagerly. A pity it's not one of the rapid releases, maybe some day...
Pokemon Untold [Currently Restructured] · C0
Eternity_River: Is the MC going to be training Pokémon or himself?
Pokemon Untold [Currently Restructured] · C0
Pokemon Untold [Currently Restructured] · C0
Cool I got Super Powers and all, But I don't think I deserve them · C1
Darkdelusion: Lolicon uncle VS the 'uncle'.
Which uncle shall prevail😥😥Dragon King's Son-In-Law · C145
LuxEmperor: They really know how to grab you by the nuts when they have the chance....what a cliff....No this surpasses cliffs....ladies and gentlemen please look to your left, behold the edge of the world
Red Envelope Group of the Three Realms · C620
1, name it it's purpose
example:
- united group
- civilian relief team
- world(town?) watchers
ect...
2, it can hace a symbolic title/name example:
- rocket locket
- town's last hope
- hidden hero association
ect...
3, there's also acronyms
example:
- S.T.R, StopThat Rocket
- T.U.F, Trainer's United Front
- M.T.W.A.B.P.F.T, Make The World A Better Place for Tomarrow
just some Ideas and as always thanks for the chapter
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like DaBousss said take your time and write it as you envisioned/revised ideas on the fly? more chapters are good but non rushed chapters are gonna be better 9times out of 10times View More
Pokemon Untold [Currently Restructured] · C14
DaBousss: Take ur time .readers are not going anywhere.write as u intend to write originally.don't rush. Ty fr chapter
Pokemon Untold [Currently Restructured] · C14
"hello I have come to sell my pikachu"-MC
"hmm pikachu's are kinda rare how about-" -shop keep
"It's shiny"-MC
"TAKE MY MONEY!"-shopkeep View More
Pokemon Untold [Currently Restructured] · C0
gamer3012: difficult? no, practice makes perfect!
su, zi, the pres, the carrot, and the two maids makes a full week of practice leaving sunday to rest.Dragon King's Son-In-Law · C106
Red Envelope Group of the Three Realms · C600
PopcornSectGenius: As true as this statement is, you willing to say that in front of the face of a demigod???
Super Gene · C792
FleetingClouds: I had the notion that a lot of people disliked the last chapter and read a lot into it (Pikachu). Then I had a conversation with someone on discord and he was like:
"Of course people hate Pikachu! In one episode he defeats Latios and in the next he loses against a Snivy!" lol, true story ^^Pokemon Untold [Currently Restructured] · C12
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[pikachu] 🌟nickname: (n/a) ?♀️♂️gender: unkown (shape of tail? heart? lightning?)
ability: plot
ability summery:
someone important who will come to face death in the face multiple times and clutch a victory or escape in crucial moments.they can also defie commen sense
moveset:
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bite. quick attack???
???(tackle?) ???(glare?)
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affiliation: wild (captive) View More
Pokemon Untold [Currently Restructured] · C12
1life4death: lol mom just drop the bomb...Ren's mind is probably going : "All hands on deck! this is not a drill! Arm the cannons, man your battle stations! We need an excuse ASAP!!! This is not a drill!!!" lol
Dragon King's Son-In-Law · C79
FleetingClouds: Man, I didnt even know yellow existed before. She is seemingly a Manga character. Dunno which One, but bullapedia is a good place to find out
Pokemon Untold [Currently Restructured] · C10
