Webnovel Author: Yolo_Natss - Novel Collection

P2W Uchiha in Konoha (Completed)

Anime & Comics · Bleam

Yolo_Natss

9mth

Posted

How to begin? The story has potential but is bland and missing some spices. I have read until ch20 so idk what the story is afterwards. But until ch20 I wish the MC was the protagonist Raphaelle, he looks much more entertaining. The story with the current MC is boring. MC is a genius in term of magic but instead of capitalizing on that the story focus on his physical training ? The MC is almost emotionless and kind of robotic. We don’t know a lot about him, we don’t know much about what he thinks, what he likes, what are his aspirations or goals other than « I’ll die on 3-5 years, I have to become stronger ». He compare himself with the protagonist exclusively in physical strength ? Like, hello ?

Yolo_Natss

1yr

Commented

First I can confirm it should be roar and not growl. Second, either use “assemble” or “come here” because both means the same thing in this context, I found it redundant using both.

The dragon opened his massive mouth, with orange light flickering in it. Then an earth-shattering dragon growl spread through the surroundings, echoing between cliffs, carrying simple magically encoded meaning, "Wyverns assemble and come here!"

Last Egg: Reincarnated as a Dragon in a Game

Fantasy · AnonymUser

Yolo_Natss

2yr

Replied to Offtask

You really put my thoughts in words but in a more gentle and rational way hahaha! I totally agree, this death was boring. A character death has to be believable and create emotions. Here it’s 100% just a fake death for plot purpose. As if author wanted the “difficulty” to be sky high for our MC but haven’t thought of a more plausible way in the ligne of “Ren died, that prove his task was really really hard, look he didn’t got it easy”. In my opinion this whole inferno arc was not that much necessary. And the tropes are very similar to the Monolith arc, alone infiltration/ fake death of Ren/ demon pledgers/ super duper dangerous mission with immense variables/ SS and S reinforcements that do the big work cuz you know Ren is very weak but he is the one that save the day in the end (or Kev). Anyway just one word boring.

ch 356 Reversing the known [1]

The Author's POV

Fantasy · Entrail_JI

Yolo_Natss

2yr

Replied to Yolo_Natss

I read the Author explanation in comments but we are just readers not inside of Author mind. During a reading and directly in the text we should have these explanations not off text and off story. It still feels far fetched and forced I remain doubtful but still supportive of this amazing story. I reacted with great vim because I never was this strongly in disagreement about something in this story as everything else was so perfectly mastered.

"...so you were still alive, haAhhahahaahHA"

The Author's POV

Fantasy · Entrail_JI

Yolo_Natss

2yr

Commented

A few hours and already 5% ? That’s too fast. What about months of cultivation before a minor upgrade ? That means 20 days and he’ll be 100% in the core formation realm ? Bruuuh

Cultivation Base Qi : Core Formation [Early Stage 5%] (Lightning Core)

Unfathomable Patriarch

Eastern · kuropon8

Yolo_Natss

2yr

Commented

Holy fricking nuggets!!!! I didn’t notice until now but the MC sure GUESSES a lot, like a looooooooooooooooot

ch 12 Chapter 12

Unfathomable Patriarch

Eastern · kuropon8

Yolo_Natss

2yr

Commented

Far from home in the multiverse

"I'm really far away from home, aren't I? Hope mom and dad are doing okay..."

Unfathomable Patriarch

Eastern · kuropon8

Yolo_Natss

2yr

Posted

Such a shame, the story got me really hooked but the writing quality makes it a headache to read and understand. Fast passed, the story is going fast, random things happens when there is already something going on. Characters interactions could be more deep and meaningful, tbh I didn’t feel that much emotions and thoughts behind the conversations. Also I don’t quite yet understand the MC on a deeper level, he just does stuffs.

Rebirth: Over the Horizon

Games · Stylish_Demon

Yolo_Natss

2yr

Commented

Dumb!

ch 21 His First Awakened Subordinate

Global Descent: 100×Reward

Sci-fi · The Sky Wishes to Clear Up

Yolo_Natss

2yr

Commented

Lol

After Yu Jinmo had gone through such a series of torment and shock, he had long since woken up.

Future News: My Phone Mutated

Urban · Mirage

Yolo_Natss

2yr

Commented

One pair = 2 shoes for two feet. Now do it again, 1 slipper for one foot and then everything makes sense wow amazing 🤦

A strong sense of shock overcame his desire to stay in bed. Lin Bai directly jumped off the bed, even wearing only one pair of slippers. He jumped to the window with one leg and forcefully pulled open the curtains!

Future News: My Phone Mutated

Urban · Mirage

Yolo_Natss

2yr

Commented

Hahahaha classic commentator named “Phil” Did author watch Air Bud 2 golden receiver ? Hahaha

[I think we all know the answer to that, Phil. In case you've all forgotten, let me remind you. This is THE greatest quarterback prospect to ever be birthed. This young man was throwing darts in his diapers. He could sleepwalk through this game and still win by 30]

Dimensional Descent

Fantasy · Awespec

Yolo_Natss

2yr

Commented

12 AM -> midnight 12 PM -> midday or lunch or noon So yeah pretty sure he’s not having class till midnight

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The Rising of the Anomaly

Sci-fi · Aimdaqs

Yolo_Natss

2yr

Commented

10 y.o ? Caffeine ? Gaming all night ? Sleepless night ? Really ? A lot of things wrong in this paragraph lol

I decided to take on a few more quests in the game, before forcing myself to log out and go to sleep. I was filled with an ungodly amount of caffeine and sugar, my body was at its limit and so was my mind. As much as I disliked the excessive training my father made me go through four times a week, it did help with my late-night gaming stamina, I suppose.