it is pretty bad, i like the idea but everything seems so rushed and its all over the place. Maybe try rewritting it? check what you can add to the story to make it flow better cause im stopping here
please stop showing the whole status and show only updates, or at this point youll end up with a chapter only being the status
and its not very interesting
chamanm
ch 18 Xenia feels jealous- “Then I and Shenshah will marry today itself!”
Immortality? Nah, I choose to marry instead!
Fantasy · Sheizzcoldasice