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HellionPrime: Thanks for the feedback.
You are the second person who highlighted that the MC has no feelings/remorse. You mentioned that as a neet and should act differently.
There's this little thing in Chapter 5.
"With the new skills, Adam seems to gain the courage he once lacked in his previous life.
Normally in situations like this, Adam will simply ignore it and find some excuse to do something else.
However, with the game like system in his head. With some sick and twisted mentality. He views this situation as a game.
Adam, inside the game world is a renowned player. He is among the top. His attitude in game is way different compared to his real self.
Now with all of his game like ability, his gamer's instinct kicked in."
Anyways, I dont think I really need to explain what it means when I stated that the MC is on a totally different mindset right?
I'm not sure if you were able to read that part, I think you did since you mentioned that you already read the story up to chapter 11... (lol) I think you can get from chapter 1 to chapter 54 in just under 30 mins of continuous reading. You just have to stop at CHAPTER 11 to tell everybody that you already have a good grasp of the story. ^^
So by getting to CHAPTER 11 you already know how poor the story's development is gonna be.... You already have a good understanding right... OK. At that point you also grasped that the MC design is aweful, and that the information about the world is lacking...... lol at CHAPTER 11.... okay.
I dont know if you've writen anything before and posted it publicly.
A writer like me who just posted a new story in a new platform, I cant really use the first 20 chapters of my story just saying that the MC is good and that he brushes his teeth everyday and the sun is blue instead of yellow or that the earth is not the 3rd planet but actually is the 9th. I'll probably bore you guys to death if I overloaded my the first 10 chapters with inconsequential things that you cant relate to yet.
For writers like us who needs to get our story out there, the first 10 to 30 chapters are crucial. We have to get the readers attention on those first chapters. The other details can be build later on when we already have your attention.
A casual reader will only read the first 5 to 10 chapters before they throw it out if they lost interest. I have personally closed alot of novels in this site after reading the first 5 chapters, simply because I lost interest or because I got overloaded with information that does not make any sense yet.
So yeah since you're already done reading the first 10 chapters, if you go further you'll probably find out all those things that you're looking for.
For me though once you go further that 10, then that means my 1st ten chapters did what they were supposed to do. ^^
Go through my story again. I think the world development questions that you're loking for starts being explained at chapter 12.The Gamer's Apocalypse
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