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1. killing off your food supply is extremely short sighted. 2. seems his family means nothing to him since he doesn't even consider being honest and trying to find a compromise. 3. why the heck would you turn criminals into members of your inner council? horrible idea. 4. mc is rushing his own "coven". why are you inflating the vampire numbers so quickly? what about sourcing food? this will have a huge impact on society and he's just asking for trouble. justification of point 2: his mother said they would kill the vampire that turned her son, but that doesn't mean she's going to kill mc, so somewhere they will need to get food for him to survive, since they don't know he can live without blood. if he'd revealed himself early he could have recieved a blood bag daily for years on end with no one suspicious and his family not wanting to kill him when they find out. Justification of point 4: they're already suspecting something is up when it was just the mc taking nobodies off the street and now you're adding six to your number. where are you going to find an additional (300 x 6) people nobody cares about without being noticed? anyway story is no longer for me. my reasoning is above.

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You know it's really weird that he still says "Miss Death" even when their apparent relationship is very close right? It comes across like someone that is trying to be polite but is actually just trying way too hard. I'd expect, after all these years, they'd be very good friends and would just forgo formalities like this.

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question from the ignorant here but what exactly is "The Presence"?

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TV · Samael_Son_of_Dawn

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Don't write "he or she" just write "they" or "them". It depends on the context. I'm all for gender ambiguity but at least make it read nicely.

"As for that person Coulson I don't exactly know what happened but I am pretty sure that he or she must have died after that no matter what healing power they had after all if that person was still alive he or she would have been on SHIELD Index and Whitehall would have once again gotten his hand on that person," stated Grant as he started at Coulson

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TV · shashank_bhatt

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dragons sitting on a barren land wife XD

The group of dragon who were somehow able to sneak into the kingdom were sitting on a barren land wife enough to house all of them and were recovering their stamina and magic they had lost from the constant battle.

Fairy tail: Transformation mage

Anime & Comics · overloaded_maxima

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being a decent human being has nothing to do with your status as a "Gentleman" though...

Damian then shook his head and said, "Nah, I am a gentleman, I would never force someone to be in a relationship with me."

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Anime & Comics · overloaded_maxima

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careful!! we're slowly making our way to neck-beard territory!

Damian looked back at her and said, "Like I told you I am a gentleman and a gentleman cannot let a lady sleep out here alone, and while he himself stays in the house."

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Anime & Comics · overloaded_maxima

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A good cultivation novel I recommend is 'Beware of chicken' on royal road. Not your typical "Couldn't see Mount Tai" and "You seek death" junk you find in the clogged toilet. Doesn't follow typical daoist routes but is refreshing for those who've drowned in the brown sea. Might hold some nice ideas for your own works Author. Now to start reading this bad boy.

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Fantasy · Skully_

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I dont think that was the right thing to do. He Just did the same thing as Big Mom. Killing people who couldnt defend themselves. I get why he did it but in the grand scheme his actions were no better than hers. That didnt come across as ruthlessness, it felt more like spite. I would have just made him swing his sword to slice all her shIps to pieces. added benefit of culling numbers and serious intimidation. Say a spooky line then begin the beat down. As it stands now, she has all her troops and a belly full of rage. This isnt a complaint, just my interpretation of what I just read.

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Others · DreAm_b0At

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Why is the word A.d.u.l.t censored???

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What do I even say here. Are you trying to break character on purpose? I get that he’s reincarnated but you just had a 7 year old swear like an ***** like its nothing and then nobody reacts to it like its completely normal. He’s a kid, at least make it believable.

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Anime & Comics · FanficSlayer2021

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Admittedly Solo Levelling is probably one of the only novels to successfully incorporate a penalty into their system and not make it suck major poopoo. That being said I definitely agree. Though I’ll wait and see what the author has in store.

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Anime & Comics · Retack

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Totally agree. Nothing kills my interest more than having some strongly forced plot progression because the mc has to accept some ridiculous quest, that they clearly don’t want to, or face a death sentence.

Non-compliance with this System's instructions may result in a penalty.]

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Anime & Comics · Retack

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I was wondering what had happened to the last of those sh*tty elves that ran away from the war with Ichor but now I have an answer. I feel like author teased this event a while ago.

ch 694 Edgy Dementor

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Video Games · Niggross

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Wait so he can “equip” multiple enchanted bracelets per arm but he can only equip one enchanted ring per hand??

One down, two more two go. I ain't quitting before I get them over 100 as well, and I even created one more bracelet for each arm to increase the difficulty even more.

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