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A normal teenager who loves gory and death-filled games, gets thrown into the mother of all gory and death-filled games, Gears of War with a system aiming to help him become the Hunter of all Monsters Gears of War is a franchise with all it's rights owned by Microsoft, and this is just a FanFic
Democratis: SEPERATIST SCUM!!! BEGONE TH0TS BEFORE OUR BOYOS PUT THEIR PLATED BOOTS UP THINE @$$ES!!!Broke: A Clone Wars Tale (Star Wars) · C198
Broke: A Clone Wars Tale (Star Wars) · C198
kalkikami: whatever anyone says, he is just a young man who can be dragged into a bracket of elites when concerning fights against the droid armies or using force skills. But if he hiding that he is a Jedi (no force skills except little scouting and sensing), he has not much experience in interpersonal fighting and grappling humanoids other than the training given by his captain so it's ok.Reincarnated in Star Wars with The System · C24
overfrenzy: I was expecting him to be stronger and more badass, I mean he is using force so that's like knowing what she would do before she did, physically overpowering her and not falling and "better than you", I mean if it was real fight and he was that careless she would've slit his throat open before he could shoot and even then in a situation like that it's like you kill me I kill you, not what I was expecting, trading lives with random bounty hunter.Reincarnated in Star Wars with The System · C24
Daoist954238: This was way too forced, plz don’t rush things it ruins the storyGaara · C88
Polkageist: I have to be honest author, I really don't like this chapter. I almost hate how this chapter turned out, but let me explain why, instead of just hating on the chapter.
You see, I usually don't like romance in novels, because 9/10 times, I feel like the authors don't develop the romantic feelings or relationships in good ways. And sadly, I don't think you developed Gaara's feelings for Yui well in this instance either.
I saw your comment about love at first sight, and let me tell you, you don't just suddenly fall in love with someone at first sight. Sure, LUST or ATTRACTION at first sight are totally real and tangible things, but they're not love, and it seems a lot of people confuse these different emotions. It takes longer to develop any kind of meaningful romantic feelings for someone else, not just a few days. I don't think there's any real basis for Gaara to be this deeply hurt in this situation.
Sure, he could be upset at the development, and regret killing Yui, but there's no way he would be this devastated. There has simply not been enough time to develop these kinds of feelings you give Gaara.
To me it feels like you did this to twist Gaara in some way. Maybe he'll keep this in mind and cooperate with the Land of Snow/Spring due to a guilty conscience. Maybe this will motivate him to train even harder, so he can protect everyone he loves in the future. Whatever your reasons are, I still don't like this chapter, and this forced development. It just seems so forced and cheap to me. You're better than some cheap forced relationship for plot twists.
In any case, I'll still read your story. I won't lie and say I'm not disappointed in this chapter, but I still like your story too much for me to just drop it. And you still have my support with your story, despite my negative review.
I just hope we won't see something like this again. Almost everyone hates this kind of plot development, so I don't see any reason to use it.
I'd like to hear your opinion on my points, and maybe an explanation or reason for your decisions in this chapter, if it won't spoil future chapters.
Have a nice day author.Gaara · C88
BalancedSelfInsert: The reason theres no guns in Naruto is because any important Ninja could stop a bullet between their teeth. Rewatch the clip of Onooki vs Meteor, and see how his SKULL tanks two meteors as an old man. Guns = useless.Gaara · C82
SFSAuthorkun: There is a misunderstanding about desert climate here, you see desert people know too well about cold climates, while at day the desert climate can reach adout 40º or 50º celsius (122F) at night the desert is extremely cold, like reaching -30º or -40º celcius (-22 to -40F)Gaara · C82
Daijena: Thanks for the chapter and I'm also not a fan of 'dream stories', it always makes me feel sad for 2 seperate reasons, 1)All those great peiple you meet and atartes to care for are not real. Or 2) Reality is so bad that they have to escape into a dream, which is never a healthy mindset for anyone. :/Elder Blood Witcher · C144
CliffkunLolRekt: Ima be honest I don’t like the democrat party I’m a conservative but I like your choice in genres harem sect is the bestBroke: A Clone Wars Tale (Star Wars) · C197
Democratis: Damn, this is like some legendary "300 Spartans" $hit. TY for the chapter, and I am super excited to see more @$$-kicking!!!Broke: A Clone Wars Tale (Star Wars) · C197
MikeKung: These devils are very arrogant. Kuoh is under Shinto’s territory but is just lent to the devils. So technically, it is not their territory. They shouldn’t be so arrogant about it.DxD: God of Gamers · C10
PainxSama: Bro this story is so fucking good and original I need more lolDxD: God of Gamers · C10
CliffkunLolRekt: Mc shuld make it a point to show he can sin without falling Mabie some flirting and suggestions to sona that they could **** lolDxD: God of Gamers · C10
JakeElliott: Because MC will eventually get stronger... Like I said i've added gods in this. MC is overpowered, will grow continuously and have multiple power-ups. Voldemort has basically reached his prime, but is weak considering his full true self, Dumbledore is well past his prime and relies on a wand to heavily boost his stats. Plus it's the MC, he'll win in the end.Harry Potter: Orphans Ascension · C17
Broke: A Clone Wars Tale (Star Wars) · C197
Democratis: I get that bit as in Ento has trained far more then Anakin hence he is stronger, but Anakin has a ridiculous level of midichlorians and his connection to the force is the highest there has been at this point. I could get if MC is stronger then him at the moment due to his training, but even then Anakins force potential would dwarf his.Star Wars Return of an Empire · C5
Democratis: Tbh I dont think MC will want the armor back, "sweaty testicles" indeed.Elder Blood Witcher · C141
Elder Blood Witcher · C141
Democratis: I like C3P0, but he is very annoying xDReincarnated in Star Wars with The System · C11
Sternl: Just use it if it's not complicated for you senseiA Reincarnator's Wish in Danmachi · C0
Not_a_Penguin: I like this story so far.
So take my stones author, you dirty whore. ;)
(I just came up with this, I'm using from now on.)DxD: God of Gamers · C2
Ivan_Accosano: Please have the mc keep his gamer power hiddenDxD: God of Gamers · C2
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