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Unebi: Bull****, readers usually decide if they like a book or not within the first chapters, or do you think they'll read the entire book if they don't like it. What if it was 1000 chapters? Should people read everything too before forming an opinion?Phoenix Phire
7sins_Lord: When did three stars become bad. Also everyone can see he's only at 10 so his review has little to offer. But it help me and it shows the fanbase are not to my liking so this is a decent review.Phoenix Phire
Zhein32: Yeah, I think one of the Abyssal Knight told Dave about it or is it the Undead King himself when Dog accidentally revive a legendary warrior too.Rise of The Undead Legion · C319
FireMastr: Dog is a completely unique existence. Normally only one wielder can exist per legacy at a time, or you wouldnt have to jump through so many hoops just to get a low ranked one let alone a S ranked one. However he was a previous wielder brought back from the dead, so it defies the rules. I wonder if emile planned this because theres no way a undead with a legacy is a coincidence. It was definitely intended to have a possibility of occurring, altho the odds of that specific undead becoming the direct subordinate of the player opening the undead expansion would be insanely low considering how many undead are in the legionRise of The Undead Legion · C319
Galaktos: DAMN!! Now i want a fight between a pissed of Dog vs Warlord legacy modeRise of The Undead Legion · C319
Karl621: To think that zombie who was so rugged and beaten is a legacy warrior man now i feel like bud is the assassin counterpartRise of The Undead Legion · C319
Xumit: Imagine his face if the god was a scam 😂😂 He would've lost everything!Invincible System start from One Piece · C1
FajarAnshar: Martial arts experts can't fight 20 people.Invincible System start from One Piece · C1
VIVEK_SANDU: I dont understand why the mc must have everything i mean billions of dollars to a biologist cmon man plus why does he must do everything like the random **** of ufc what is this and why must every mc i read on this site is a handsome smart rich guy why not a scamming bastard with street smarts.
Plus the english is pretty broken but not unbearable YET.Invincible System start from One Piece · C1
NovelMonster: Lol when I turned 21 I was like ‘let’s head to the liquor store!’ Not *sigh* I need to get marriedInvincible System start from One Piece · C1
Burel: I've seen translate do this to a few authors already and it really messes with people, quite amusing actually. When it translates it becomes black and not dark. People get extremely angry over something the author doesn't even know. This kind of thing is bound to happen due to language barriers. I'm just personally just happy about how much chaos this causes, when it could all be avoided if readers just understood language barriers exist. Sure the author could be at fault, but they are very limited due to most of the time having little to no understanding of English.
Tldr: Translate screws with people due to language barriers. Chaos follows. Can be avoided by understanding.Nero, the God of the Underworld · C14
Elder_Dog_Nicholas: Being able to heal? That’s not really prospects to replace all might or even the other top ranked heroes. Those people are delusional.Ezekiel, an Angel in the multiverse. · C2
Melshan: 1. I got a dig bick
2. You that read wrong
3. You read it wrong also
4. You checked
5. You smiled
7. You are wondering why you still reading this
8. You see the mistake right? (on7)
10. But did you see I skipped number 6?
10. You checked
11. And saw I doubled number 10 and skipped number 9
13. And did you see I skipped number 2
14. You got tricked
15. But did you see that I skipped number 12
16. You checked and wandered why am I wasting my time on this.
( You got tricked )
Seriously though, it's very good.One Piece: The Power System
Rotting_Corpse: I honestly expected more from this, it was ridiculous at the beginning but I hoped that it would improve but it actually got worse.
The MC has ****ty personality and wants to kill Danzo but never acts.
Minato is still hokage but bends his ass for Danzo to **** him.
Almost all other characters have degraded to betas who bend over for the MC
I had to drop it when the MC forced a woman to give him a blowjob to preserve her life and this was out of no context.
Anyway if you enjoy reading about a degenerate MC, this is the novel for you.A Saiyan in the Naruto-verse
amaturewriter: You dumdfuck!...hey author you have good grammar and english but what the **** dude? A tail..a fucking tail the MC has.....he'd obviously be reported to the hokage the moment the saw that **** and mot likely been experimented on..what BS saying it took 6 months for the Kage to know about it//
Complete BSA Saiyan in the Naruto-verse
shadylord: Damn another isekai effect... Reading the comment make me realise isekai bring idiocy and mental unstability hahahaA Saiyan in the Naruto-verse
amaturewriter: Look Dumb****....you insult me I insult you alright...But let's one thing straight...In the story the writer wrote it well, I said it before...its just that the tail was stupid...it was quite literally a Dumb****. .plus a saiyan even at base is far far superior than any person in naruto (even as a baby) ...so mc is quite weak...Alright there ....that's why author is Dumb****. ...
Now what are you doing....i didn't critique you nor did I insult you...what your deal...arguing with me for no apparent reason. ..If you look at this entire conversation it's in a way hilarious......A mental retard arguing with me for nor apparent reason...you are quite amusing that it makes me want to reply....plus many people agreed with my opinion as I am entitled to it...now I admit my words could've been gentler....
P's. ..my books were enjoyed..not by many but still they were enjoyed...
So go **** you self you ignorant piece of ****A Saiyan in the Naruto-verse
bapak: The superhumans showed the world that all of it was possible. They called the abilities EXO and the people who wielded such an ability, EXO users.
...and people who didn't wielded such an ability are called BTS users.BlackCrown
LittleJinx28: Hehe if she wasnt, where would our fun be?Quick Transmigration: Saving The Crazy Villainess · C0
RoyalDrake: White Knights shall die and grant me infinite Reddit karmaQuick Transmigration: Saving The Crazy Villainess · C1
laoniang: I am in the mood for vengeance! I dont want schmoop or fluff...gimme cold hard vengeance on all the leads! esp any white knights and lotuses! Kill em all!!!Quick Transmigration: Saving The Crazy Villainess · C1
NihilisticBeauty: My god. There's already enough bl quick transmigrations, don't try influencing a perfectly good author like that.
way better to fall in love with a crazy villainess than a braindead male lead, i sayQuick Transmigration: Saving The Crazy Villainess · C1
Moon_represent: wasnt big fan of db but has watch the og db, z kai db, gt and super...I am Krillin! · C1
Moon_represent: wasnt big fan of db but has watch the og db, z kai db, gt and super...I am Krillin! · C1
I am Krillin! · C1
PettyOfficer: Webnovel has a character limit and it wiped away the second half of my first reply.
I refuse to rewrite it. My comments here and on your chapters are good enough to describe my mindset.
You’re a decent writer. Just ease up on the clichés and backstories, make the employee a real character, and stop waving around the excuse of an overall reason. Forcing situations destroy a story.
There’s a thing called foreshadowing. You can add hints. Also, make sure your reasons are good. Disappointing readers and lying about details makes for a bad writer.
I should know. I am a bad writer.Mutagen
PettyOfficer: I expected the gangsters to have more guns. The MC was easily able to swipe one off a security guard. So why can’t the gangsters do so? Where did they get the first gun, anyway? Anyway, what was the reason for taking the Boss alive? Getting info where he got a gun?
Why the Hell did the MC forget taking the Boss hostage? While he was zoning out over the female love interest, the gangster could have knifed him for revenge. After all, you showed a cornered man doing mutual destruction already. It would’ve been good for character development and breaking the mood of the cliché for the Boss to do one final act.
Now you say the cinema is sound proofed. But you also said in the fiction that the gunshot was loud and clear. It attracted zombies. Now which is it? The gunshot lured zombies or it didn’t? Because it clearly did according to the fiction.
Also, my main point wasn’t having the mom clean up Mei. It was the gangster r*ping her all over and covering her with his jizz. A man is realistically unable to blow that many loads. How much time has passed since the outbreak? It’s been less than a day, probably an hour or two. What the f**k is that?
And you again show your favoritism for women. You didn’t bother to name the employee. It’s depressing. You wonder why I called the MC a harem maker now? You didn’t bother detailing other men. He doesn’t matter enough to you.
Mother walking after an hour or so later, my *ss. Sprains don’t heal that quickly, like I said. She’d also be useless to run away from zombies, let alone carrying the 30-50 lbs baggage of her daughter.
The rich fatty did hold everyone hostage. It’s how he forced the employees to close the shutters. I admit I was wrong about him killing someone.
The flashbacks were horrendous. This was TWO chapters worth. I’m pretty sure none of the other characters had this much dedication to their backstory. It was also a jarring tangent. The cliché made it worse. You might as well have brushed past it or started the story from here.
Too many flashbacks makes the reader have too much infodumping. We don’t remember all of it and we won’t care if it’s boring.
No sh*t I suspect a harem. You’re doing every cliché to jam in as many female baggages on the MC’s plate. You didn’t bother naming or directly describing the male employee’s intentions outright. All I see is that you care way more about describing the woman than moving the story forward. Especially with the TWO chapters of flashbacks.
I don’t CARE about chapter 132. I’m on chapter f**king 18. I can’t predict over 100 chapters in advance. I’m not God.
Your problem is that you have too many clichés happening at once. Pretty much every encounter is a cliché and every character is based off of a cliché. Your characters act on a cliché manner. They solve their problems in a cliché way. Nothing feels completely unique. That’s the problem.
Your biggest problem as a writer is saying “there is a reason” as an excuse. To us readers, we hear you say, “don’t worry, in the future, I covered up this plot hole.”
You’re the “mystery man” saying there is always a plan, but all the plans we see are absolute ****. There are always inconsistencies that are bugging readers and it doesn’t help that you’d rather waste chapters describing women instead of describing the plot.
We give up because we think you’re doing the carrot on a stick method. In honesty, it is. It’s too much effort for readers to swim through that cliché mess and be disappointed again and again. The answer is always somewhere near, but it’s not here. Or the answer is here, but you don’t understand it.
F**k. We readers understand it. The reason is ****. It’s plot armor.Mutagen
PettyOfficer: I wrote this with no sleep in the morning while super hungry, so I’m sorry that the review is wrong at a few details, like how the fatty shot a warning instead of killing someone. However, the core of my criticism still stands.
I told you the main reason for my super low score was the spam of 5 stars from 2-3 people. Your fiction’s rating is highly misleading. It’s not perfect. It’s full of clichés. That means it is decent, but it isn’t exceptional.
My complaints were all summed up in too many clichés, too much emphasis on “plans,” too many useless extras that are *sspulls for their survival, and too many POV shifts.
When you have a narrative, readers like consistency. Readers like being able to see progression. Your characters seem like cardboard cutouts taken from mangas or heroes in light novels. They are customized with your personal touch, but they are still cardboard cutouts.
Now, for your explanation? It’s the modern world.
How can cell service be cut off so easily? Also, how can’t officials issue an emergency warning? I’m pretty sure the Philippines has their own methods to declare a national emergency. How hard is it to send out a message? Better yet, broadcast on radio and over speakers?
Then there’s the guards getting killed. I call horse s*** on your logic. There are swarms of screaming and panicking civilians. Why do they target the far away noise instead of the nearby roar of the people? Zombies are supposed to be killing those defenseless people, but somehow they bypass all of the crowd? The guards can’t kill the zombies?
You already said fast zombies feel pain and can die. How are the zombies bum rushing them so easily? With the number of people, the zombies are not only congested by civilians, but by their own numbers. You add in the zombies that fall down when shot. It’s impossible for the guards to die so easily.
Now the shooting skill. The MC holds a shotgun one-handed and hasn’t failed to hit a target with each shot from what I know. You can’t miss a shot up close, okay, but not only that, he’s not hurt by the bucking of the gun. He’s rapidly firing it. Not only that, he handles it easily with his Otaku knowledge instead of actual knowledge of handling a gun. It’s a huge stretch for me at this point.
Then there’s how he gets the gun. Like most encounters he has, it’s by pure luck. How lucky is he for everything to go his way?
I don’t care if you try to smooth out the side characters later on. Your introduction of them was outrageous. Egregious to a jaw-dropping fault. You wonder why no one likes it further from the intro because they hate this stale sort of coincidences. The only ones left are people who can swallow this mess.
Their survival was again due to luck. The rescue scenario was cliché. You even got the “woman holds everyone back” cliché, but did it through a one-dimensional throwaway character.
The daughter surviving? Bullsh*t! You’re telling me that a mom carrying a child of about 30-50 lbs ran away from zombies, but it was the men who couldn’t outrun zombies? Again, it’s the contrivances of plot armor. You use too much luck to force their characters in.
Then the mom is carried by the unnamed employee. This again is where I’m angry since you can flesh out all the women, but failed to give a paragraph for the man. At least give him a name.
Anyway, Paula carries the kid. This 30-50 lbs kid. She manages to outrun the zombies with this burden? What is she, superhuman? She already ran away from zombies. Where’s her fatigue?
Then you have the gall to say the mom carries the kid? With a sprained foot? It takes at least a few days to treat. She should be exhausted. She should be in pain. She shouldn’t be able to muscle on through.
I doubt if you read anything about what a sprain does to a person.
Now the gangsters. Oh God the gangster scene. You told us he knew they had a gun. He could predict the Boss had a gun. What doMutagen
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