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Drak has always seen everyone around him as inferior. He's smarter, faster, stronger and better looking than most people. At some point he decided that he might as well take over the world. His chance finally came when he grew wings one night when a comet passed by Earth. Will his new inhuman abilities, combined with his scientific genius, allow him to achieve his prefect world domination? Or will he fail like so many others have before him?
Low Dimensional Game · C20
GeesPart: Politics are okay as I understand that this novel is about mechs, without some kind of political conflict then war cannot occur, thus mech designing and mechs itself wouldn’t be as useful. However, at this point it is only some 100+ chapters in and it’s already convoluted by different government, factions, gangs, affiliations, coalitions, clans, etc and on the top of your head I’m sure you wouldn’t be able to name them all because it’s already quite saturated. I’m all for world building as it gives us something to use for our imaginations, but our memory can’t handle such influx of information and the author expecting us to remember them all. And if he makes it a point to over elaborate and extend word count by using such method will only cause many readers to get lost in the following chapters and so forth, and in turn lose readers interest in this novel. Politics in general is very bland and dry. Authors that I’ve known in the past always try to stay away from it as much as they can due to it being a very touchy subject and it also can overcomplicate the writing and they can get stuck in a hole of having to explain things with big walls of texts that readers would most likely to skip.
There are many other methods where the author can improve the novel, the word count and gain readers interest without using politics. Ves can be more cunning in his way of dealing with things, after all he is supposedly being improved by his system. His overall character building still has much to be desired. If Ves’ intelligence is supposedly being improved upon by the system, then why is he still acting the same? His speech? Tactics? Thoughts? Try backtracking to the beginning of this novel, remember Ves’ character building, read how Ves’ was as a character he seemed very analytical and very thoughtful. Wanting to explore and expand on his knowledge and skills, and now? The old chapters way of writing was engaging the readers well, it had painted a picture of a futuristic mechanized world with conflicts everywhere hence the need for mechs. The MC - Ves now needs to mature and grow without his father, his family aren’t really as supportive of him, and he had to overcome a major character building obstacle of paying off a debt. His ‘internal’ dialogues captures his state of mind, his emotions, and his maturity at that point in time.
Now let us fast forward his current read his current internal dialogs - can you see it yet? Well if you aren’t able see the difference in quality of writing from the first chapters and now then you must be skipping chapters/whole-wall of texts lol; which will prove my point further that each subsequent chapters have been getting boring and writing quality decreased due to the added ‘fluff’. Anywho, nothing against the author, I’m always up for original novels and I enjoyed the beginning of this novel. Sadly at this point the writing has changed, and it almost seems like it’s written by two different authors. I’ve only left my .02 as this is now a premium novel, so the least I could do is comment as to why it will most likely be losing readers if it keeps going in this direction. It all comes down to if it’s worth it to readers, writers have to write for readers first then for themselves.
As a writer you always have remember that you’re as you write you are selling a ‘product’, that product being the creativity of your words to paint a picture in the mind of others through your characters; the MC being the main focal point. Build the MC well and the novel will shine, forgetting to be consistent and continuously developing the MC will be the end of any novel. I’m not a writer but I had past experiences in editing and creating novels. The biggest obstacle was to always make the MC’s internal dialogue consistent to his character and remembering to improve it as the chapter goes on, to show the growth in the MC through his internal dialogue. Anyways, cheers to all.The Mech Touch · C134
GeesPart: I agree, I also thought this was a mech designing novel, and now it’s starting to get over convoluted with politics and side stories. Also Ves as a character needs a lot of work instead of the nonsense political/military garbo that non of the readers want to read since it’s dry and boring. The MC almost looks like he’s not even the main point of this novel, and that it’s really about a novel of the world that he’s in. At times Ves’ almost has no emotion, selfish, and at times gives off the impression that he doesn’t care about others much other than himself. Why bother over elaborating on the fighting forces, governments, gangs, etc when the MC needs so much more work. Why hasn’t he designed his own mech yet even if he can’t actualize the parts due to him not having the equipment, he has the system to evaluate them which will help him grow. By churning out designs he can improve at a faster rate than his current snail pace. Why bother with licenses when he has basics, start creating his own designs for 1 star and so on. I don’t know where this novel is going but now that it’s premium I thought I’d give it a shot and hold out for a few more chapters. With the current story line sort of makes me want to drop it completely. Meh..The Mech Touch · C134
HatoYain: Basically he lost credits and almost lost his life...
Is not like he had not encountered similar life threatening situation when he first travel to the coals?
Im just glad that the filler chapters have come to an end.
From what I see ves traded.certain parts of his ship for a printer...The Mech Touch · C116
The Almighty Ring · C139
ThrustThunder: When has the willingness of the MC ever deterred the Author from signing them up for Crazy shenanigans against their Will?End of the Magic Era · C14
ThrustThunder: "Teacher, your cough is getting worse. Should I ask High Mage Thorpe to make a few potions for you?"
Dollars to Doughnuts that Lin Yun knows how to cure the Illness and becomes untouchable in this city, just in time for the Jr Tournament to arrive that he ends up getting signed up for!End of the Magic Era · C14
Mutt: Ugh, authors just can't do faceslapping right. It doesn't satisfy me because the world sets itself up for them. Faceslapping should have a slow build up with people of equal intelligence. One character acting like a mentally challenged person then having his expectations subverted does not satisfy me in the slightest. Of course if you were to overplay a crappy faceslapping really well it can still be good but the Author seemingly can't achieve thatEnd of the Magic Era · C5
The Almighty Ring · C137
Shizue_Izawa: They can play next day for the billing.Black Tech Internet Cafe System · C78
burntpotato: Ice cream early in the morning... unhealthy.Black Tech Internet Cafe System · C78
Darkdelusion: Wait. He took the money but closed the game?Black Tech Internet Cafe System · C78
Mistborn: I can’t be the only one autocorrecting his name in my mind to Michael Cera...right?Reborn: Apocalypse · C1
BaR03mber: This is a good novel. But ruined by author's childish racist. Just dont translate this kind of chapterThe Almighty Ring · C131
SURPASSEDEMPEROR: Seriously whenever there is a mention of other country there will be racism popping out here and there..... That's the reason why most of the real life (Male Protagonist) novel are not as much popular as with magical realism..... Or si-fi novel...
The racism in the novels might some days force us to give up on reading the rest of the novel.....The Almighty Ring · C131
SteamedBrick: Oh Shiz... EVEN THE BOOK KNOWS ITS RACISTThe Almighty Ring · C131
HoshiB: Dude, where did you get the misinformed stereotypical opinion of 'Girls would not hesitate to rely on a man stronger than herself.'
Come out n see the feminist rallies...
The kind of woman you see there...
Makes you think that the weak little girls would not hesitate to pull the rug under your feet.
Stick with reality dude... Modern girls would never think of let alone be content with playing second fiddle to a ***** and clueless man. If any, they would think of squeezing him for his worth, dump him and look for new pastures.
This case applies to most girls, except a few normal ones and extremely rare gem of a girl.The Almighty Ring · C130
Taku: Are you crazy?!
Learning about other cultures? This is a chinese novel everything else than China, the Chinese Army, the Chinese Patriotism is not worth learning.
Joking aside I agree please stop being ***ist/patriotic (to the point of revealing your secret)The Almighty Ring · C121
rOBOTmINION: I can't help but feel we have two authors working here.
One in charge of game-side and the second real-side.The Almighty Ring · C121
Dimensionist: Hm. But if Dunn consumes the remains out of sentimentality and a minor boost in power, what was with Klein's divination that what the captain was doing there would pose a danger to him?Lord of the Mysteries · C207
Halmista: Dunn is so fucking dead. This chapter just added a thousand death flags on Dunn. Zero chance of survival.
What's happening with Megose is so scary though. Randomly pulling clumps of her flesh? Leonard is rightly terrified with that.Lord of the Mysteries · C207
Evolutionary Convict · C28
LiZhu: Hahahahaha! He isn't a stupid human, but something that's basically human, but better! No offense human readers, but we humans are pretty sucky, all we have is our intelligence. At least the Uz'En can tranform to fix that problem, by getting strong bodies and brains.Evolutionary Convict · C11
Brezer: Its amazing how some of the most racist people scream about racism the most. Isn't it.The Almighty Ring · C110
Lewd_Cat_Goddess: Begone traitor thotThe Almighty Ring · C110
SoothSayre711: This novel is alright when it isn't being racist and "patriotic."The Almighty Ring · C110
The Almighty Ring · C110
Lagrange7: Madam Sharon was leaning on her comfortable rocking chair, completely naked. Her fair and excellent figure was completely exposed.
draw me like one of your Blacklund girlsLord of the Mysteries · C197
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