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Good work. Please continue to work hard good flow , grammar and story keep going and release more frequently otherwise the original edge may get loose and story will turn boring.

Mr. Author you made a mistake in house elfs name in this chapter it's maxy in the starting and then shifted to tonky that's the house elf owned by blacks.

Alright, and I like the story so far very entertaining. Keep going.

Nice chapter. But MC is really troubling, 1. He is half Phoenix, as bird he should be more comfortable in air then on ground, but still acceptable as can leave as a plot hole for future. 2. But as he is half beast half human with increased strength how could he have a weak grip , when I danger of life and death body performance increases more than two folds. This shows MC sometimes has high strength and some times he is as weak as a normal child which is totally random and looks forced to fit the story line. 3. Also how could he has slower speed then toy brooms even if he is not serious. THIS IS A COMMENT TO ONLY SHOW SHORT COMINGS IN CHARACTER I AM NOT TELLING YOU TO CHANGE ANYTHING IN STORY LINE AND CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT :

So him being a God is not as Impressive as himmat being the CEO of most influential company in China. 😅😅😅😅

Well he forgot the main problem of MC. That Yang chen is mentally ill, also he might go beserk if he keep his emotion and desires in check. Also, you might not like harem troop but crushing every flag may cause story difficult to progress in latter half as yang chen is main link to every fudging incident that may happen in that world. Teleportation is No No. Because he will come under radar of every single big shots. And even with memories of yang chen does not know about cultivation so how can he know about space laws, Athena can directly snatch the God stone from space as she is grand master level space user. Rouxi has the biggest issue of trusting anyone in single meeting ,also she would die than to apologize. All her fault in personality was because of past trauma she can't change so quickly, as she was changed little by little after meeting yang chen. Also she chose yang chen only because he had *** with her and cannot let this embarrassment to pass. She either die or will marry him. You can change story time line and events and meeting but cannot change characters personality. Please don't be offended it's constructive criticism, you can apply in next story to make it wonderful. Nice try by the way, please don't stop one day you will produce a masterpiece as story is well written with little grammatical mistake and nice flow.

Nice touch on your skills of tea etiquette Miss quinn.

I think runes always have limitations of materials.such as First--Ink (type of magic liquid can be replaced by an Almighty brush). Second--paper or thing it is inscribed on. (If material is of low quality, high level rune will destroy it. Such as, infinite something on human body that cannot bear the pressure. Also quality of material determine number of runes that can be inscribed on as well as quality of ink represent time limit of rune. ) There are other factors author can decide by himself on limitations, but this are the basics that are mentioned in every novel as well as fan-fics. P. S. -It's a constructive note author can use it as a reference or may ignore as it's his novel I will not dislike it. As I am here to read a good story with authors own creativity and work, not how I want story to be.

More komi San moments. Should have to be the main storyline.

Please add Kaichou wa maid sama

Please add kaichou wa maid sama it's normal and it's just side story to visit world famous misaki and tatsumi couple. Might have a food fight with him too...

Well training is alright but, Senjus hates Uchihas and Uchihas hate Senjus, maybe disowned by his whole clan for this. Unless he is strong enough already. Also, why help Sakura learn to fight. She friggin punched Kaguya on head at last even without him, what difference does it make. And I'm more on Hinata's favor girl is already too weak and won't get any power ups in whole series, she has heart and will but no good teacher (legendary) maybe a super op dojutsu user may help her in her endeavors.

By the way I like this story it's just a constructive remark. You can ignore if you want.

Well author, you should change a mistake in your story it's that mc is pure uchiha so he can't have traits like black eyes with golden pupils and black hair with blue tint. As every uchiha child has a trait that they have pure black pupils (while sharingan is closed). And spike dark black hair. Similar to hyuga straigth black hair and pupiless eyes. Conditions: pure blooded uchiha or hyuga. If not you can change however you want.

Alphas are nothing but proud weaklings. Like mob bosses. They never treat others as above them.

Dude tigers are loners, no pack, no group, no duo. Majestic living alone.

Well versed well done. The best **** wolf fan fic I have read till now. Characters sound very original like, MC has personality of troubled **** similar to original **** wolf series character. No stupid OP MC with all knowing of what will happen. ~my thought not advice~ Looking forward for him to make friends with other characters and relationship development. And maybe a GF other than main characters of **** wolf like Lydia, Kira or malia. Since tigers are loner in nature maybe he will be like officer hellhound. All in all please keep up the good work.

Well done you did a great job with this fan fic. I read all 3 of my current stories to their end. And now I'm out of my read list. Any recommendation for similar to this fan fic.