Webnovel Author: Xavier_Kaito - Fanfic Collection

A beautifully done translation and I see that many in the comments ask for the original story so here it is: https://b.faloo.com/html_1184_1184624/ But I recommend you to read the story of the translator because Chinese is very complex to understand and it's all the more nice to read the story of the person who works to translate it.

No, I don't think I'm going to continue the story started by cywsaphyre because I'm currently overloaded with my studies and extracurricular activities. I recommend you search with the fanfiction name to see if anyone else has continued this story. Sorry for the late reply.

No, I don't think I'm going to continue the story started by cywsaphyre because I'm currently overloaded with my studies and extracurricular activities. I recommend you search with the fanfiction name to see if anyone else has continued this story. Sorry for the late reply.

I'm sorry for the confusion with the Merlin series and yes I recommend you rewrite the beginning by adding more childhood scenes with separate points of view to deepen the way the characters think.

First of all I write this review not to hurt the author but to give him my personal opinion on the story and so that he can improve it. At first, I find it good but not at all developed enough whether it is the world that surrounds the Potter twins before Hogwarts or the characters themselves. I think you should revise the development of the world even if it is inspired by other Harry Potter fan fiction. Concerning the development of the characters, it's almost empty of course if you saw the Merlin series and the Harry Potter movies, you can imagine them but the story doesn't develop them at all. As far as writing is concerned, one problem would be the text blocks that I find really horrible but otherwise on the whole at the level of spelling it is not too bad. Before the conclusion here are several advices: The first advice is to make character sheets for each character because it will help you to develop them in your story. The second tip is to take your time because currently the story is in the 11th chapter and you are already at Hogwarts while you could have approached a huge development of character and history in the changes that Jake has brought in the childhood of Harry. The last piece of advice is if you want your story to attract publishers you need to write much longer chapters. In conclusion, despite all the problems mentioned above, I think the story has real potential so keep going.

After checking a commentary that accused me of stealing, I checked the origins of the fanfiction and found an author who had continued the original story a bit. The author who continued the story is called mizuraikage but the original author of the work is indeed cywsaphyre.

I would be very happy to add it to this story so that everyone (including me) can see the follow-up you have given to this story. Can you send me the link to your story ?

Please don't accuse me without reading the description because I made it clear that it was a republication and I cited the original author of the book ! "I do not own Naruto, I also don't own this story. The original author, cywsaphyre, from fanfiction.net, never continued this story and I just want to share it with readers. Cywsaphyre also gave their readers permission to take over the story so don't sue me."