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Plato: Mr. Sandman, bring me a dream. Make him the cutest that I've ever seen. Give him two lips, like roses and clovers. And make him a loveable sociopath hellbent on receiving the attention of the world. Great story so far.

MHA: Sandman · C11
2 days ago

AlienTurkey9958: The quality of the writing is over all alright there are a few spelling mistakes here and there but nothing that can't be over looked. The stability of the updates is pretty consistent so not much to complain about. The real downfall of this story is the characters and their development, and by development I mean the lack of it. The characters frankly are boring and very 2d most of their personalities can be described with a few words such as, mean and money hungry, talented and ignorant, genius and quiet, and for Ao he has nothing other than being the only other guy in the story. The story development is also very bad it is mostly the same over used jokes and the protagonist getting bullied by his so called friends. The Mc is supposed to be smart but then makes the same mistakes over and over again, and then it is just labeled as a joke. The one thing that makes the Mc unique, other than his race, is almost instantly given to his friends and they are only slightly slower than the "genius" mc. This story had so much potential, and I really enjoyed it at the stat but then the repetition of the same thing made the story get old real quick. As a suggestion to the author pleased do not keep forcing the same jokes, build on the characters more, give something to make the mc unique again, other than his race, allow the mc to grow and learn from his mistakes instead of repeating them. These are just a few things that could be done to improve the over story. Once again I love the concept of the story and the beginning was great, it just never let the characters to be built cause it to get boring really quickly.

Is that a Wisp?
2 days ago

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Is that a Wisp?
2 days ago

Baylord_Yama: its not bad but not that powerful or useful. And its boring seeing a mental patient as a mc. Its okay to be a villain but not a retard.

AU Villain Deku · C16
4 days ago

Gutterstomp: The grammar is readable but includes many many mistakes here and there through out the story(if I can even call this a story) only a couple of thousands of word into the fanfic, the author thought it was a good idea to just wipe out the asgardians, no character development no world building no nothing, just because they damaged his clothes a tiny bit. The Mc is now locked into a battle with pretty much all the main characters in the marvel cinematics. I’m baffled at how quickly this story is progressing and doubt that it would go over 30 chapters at this point.

The Maniacal General with his Crazy System
4 days ago
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UpLeftDownRight Marvel · C18
5 days ago

KingConner: why still so weak when he has the gamer ability?

My Hero Academia: Ajin Gamer · C15
6 days ago

An_Anime_Addict: Damn this guy has high intelligence but his wisdom is ****. Like seriously, he ignored the fucking warning because he felt that the system was wrong. I don't know if this guy is just **** for brains or what.

My Hero Academia: Ajin Gamer · C15
6 days ago

HadesChampion: Would be great if not for the fact the fire ice boy and explosion guy have been turned into girls and love interests. Creepy . Dropped, makes me uncomfortable

My Hero Academia: Ajin Gamer
6 days ago

Mhopedo77: Why dont you just tell everyone that you have gamer power?? Stupid mc.

2000 enemies and mc just "ah, okay". Really??

Mc can create dragon from nothing. Whut??.



Bad novel.

DxD: God of Gamers
6 days ago

CalvinTheLeecher: "The gamer and systems" fics have a problem at some point, some have the so-called failure penalties that they use to force the MC into a decision that generally does not go with the premise of the personality of the MC, others decide to tell a person that you knew in a few days the secret of its power and practically being used as a rare candy, I invite you to read "Max Level Newbie" where the failure of "the gamer" is portrayed quite well.

The last chapters of the fic have decided to enter one of the previous problems, for lack of more material and the trajectory that seems to want to follow, I have decided to stop reading it.

One thing that never made sense to me is that it "lost" the stats that it had gained passively by changing its race, it was like starting over from scratch but with a better base, which is strange since it did not lose the experiences of its other skills and never saw problems adapting to his new body.

I can understand the reason for not wanting to use "Create: ID" but grinding has to do it somehow, it is even more ridiculous the fact that 2000 enemies invade a land where the proteges of two big bosses and known for being overprotective, even more so considering how unwilling all the factions are to make "causus belli" movements.

You underestimate the response of heaven to the appearance of a new angel, knowing that God is dead and angels are unable to increase their numbers, a new one, however weak it may be, will attract the attention of the archangels.

As a game player for Grand strategy (4X), RPG and Simulators I feel uncomfortable with certain decisions regarding the "build" of the MC, but those are my ways of how I usually play.

DxD: God of Gamers
6 days ago

Alexandroo: Brainless MC where he tells his powers to the first girl he meets !!! That alone made me hate this story. Supreme pussy slave!

Ah, but in history the mother****er manages to beat his enemies with his intelligence, he was never defeated, even in games of strategies !!! So damn confused.

Nobody tells their assets to others, for God's sake !!! This is stupid to a divine level already! It is as if in a fighting game the guy tells his enemy what the next blow he would do! In a history with systems, MCs don't use the brain, only the damn system.

DxD: God of Gamers
6 days ago

kikicrmkia: Why share gamer ability? Its makes MC unique.. o well ..

DxD: God of Gamers · C19
6 days ago

Helel: Here it is! The PARTY FUNCTION! The cause of most abandoned GAMER stories, because there is nothing more stupid than making a story about a normal guy getting a unique power and then giving is to every superpowered woman he bangs, making him much less interesting. Interested to see if this stories survives more than 4-6 months after this chapter.

DxD: God of Gamers · C19
6 days ago

Pavan1234: I really don't understand Party option in Gamer Ability, even in the original Gamer manga (although, I didn't read it upto date)

Mc needs "Gamer's body" skill to utilize Gamer ability.

Others do not have Gamer's body. So, they cannot use Gamer ability even with Party option.

DxD: God of Gamers · C19
6 days ago

WoodenWindow: The main character is overpowered, which is expected with wishes. What is stupid is how the MC does missiions for his syatem, then throws the people he saved to Rias Gremory with her doing absolutely nothing to deserve it.
The MC was born as Rizevims grandson, so the Khaos brigade will know him anyway and Canon is shot to hell with him being Vali's twin.

The grammar is mediocre, it's readable but there are plenty of mistakes.

The characters are totally undeveloped. Vali ran away without us having read even one conversation between him and the MC, his twin. We know nothing about the MC's likes or dislikes, only that he believes in absolute strength. Rizevim is also not fleshed out at all, he seems ok for a villain, then does a 180 to make his grandson listening to him, then ignores him again.

The world background is also ignored, someone who has not read Dxd fics would be unable to follow this fic, and there are no additions/changes or even descriptions to be found aside from the MC being Vali's twin. Hell even Rizevims background isnt mentioned in the first ten chapters.

DXD: Golden King of Lucifer
1 week ago

kelpshake: Sound like a good book but the MC ruins it for me.

Just want to warn anyone , but to me the mc seems way too friendly to ever be a Slytherin. He’s literally a Slytherin in name but does not act like one at all.

He’s too friendly and naive and it really irks me. I really couldn’t get into it because of how the mc acts.

The Last Slytherin
2 weeks ago

Adolstein: I wrotte a previous review where i told that the MC dosn’t act like a slytherin at all and i hoped that he will become more cunning etc but no he look like a gryffindor at most so i drop this story....the only reason he is a slytherin is because of his surname...

The Last Slytherin
2 weeks ago

Billy_Corona: The idea of the story is alright but it never lifts off. I've had the story listed for several months now and the updates tend to be rewrites of the same chapters with minor changes. As such my rating is quite poor. The author writes well but doesn't go beyond baby years with his updates, and tends to focus on various rewrites of his birth... With minor differences.

Reincarnated into Pokemon Universe: PokeWizards and Duel Monsters
2 weeks ago

amaturewriter: how is controlling sand OP........I suggest sucking moisture and it wasnt even added...it isnt even that OP it has restrictions............honestly.....dont think every power is OP.......

MHA: Sandman
2 weeks ago

Xumit: The beginning was somewhat enjoyable, but soon it turned into a disaster. I thought this would turn out to be a good read, but that wasn't the case. I thought Naruto (The MC of the story) would be the only special one with otherwordly parents that saved him from his life full of misery in Konoha. But, Nah, the author had to introduce another random overpowered woman to adopt Sasuke so that he can be a good rival for the MC. That was a terrible move taking the uniqueness away from the MC. Nobody wants to read a not-so-special MC. In the original story, Naruto was special because of Kyuubi inside him, and you made it worthless by removing it in this story. I didn't mind it that but giving the same privilege to Sasuke is just not to my liking. And the thing with Hinata was just too much for me. Do you expect me to believe that Hiashi would abandon her daughter just because she cared about Naruto? FFS, he's a dead guy in Hiashi's views. I don't like forced plot, and that's what you did. As a result, you completely ruined the story for me and many others. You can write whatever you want, but don't expect everyone to share the same opinions as yours. That's precisely what happened in this story.

Naruto: The new journey
2 weeks ago

Flat_Moon: I've been hoping and dreaming of the day someone writes decent Arifureta fanfic.

And sadly I'll have to continue dreaming it. If you have never read Arifureta then it's 100% enjoyable.

But if you have read it then you will get pissed at this.

1• Without the side plots or the mysterious bigger picture this is just a copy and paste of Arifureta without hajima being the MC.


2• In the beginning, Mc goal is to find his childhood friend. Yet when he finds out about the world ending he prioritises it over finding the girl who could be in danger.

3• finding the childhood friend should have been easier as she finds out that she is summoned, hero. If he just asked the guild or the bloody noble girl then that's half of his problems gone. But no it's dragged on for 40 chapters with no reason.

4• For m,e the most charming and enjoying thing about reading Arifureta is the fact the Hajima is not bound or restrained by anyone other than his lovers. This fanfic's MC is forced to follow orders from the system and by some all powerfull God.

•5 The system is a lazy ploy in which forces the Mc to follow in the footsteps of Hajima.

The Creed of An Avenger (an Arifureta Fanfic)
2 weeks ago

Weismann_: Disappointed... It's like reading Arifureta again but with different characters... And this system is more a disadvantage than anything why should he pay for common knowledge this is completely idiotic, people should know that he could simply ask anyone about common knowledge making the price inexistant (The worst is how much he paid for this 'Knowledge') but ok now comes the artifact yes or is an artifact but should he have paid so much for it? no... An artifact value is measured by it's utility and honestly this artifact is not that useful

The Creed of An Avenger (an Arifureta Fanfic)
2 weeks ago

Xumit: At first the story started good with cool mc (even though he gets edgy sometimes). But the story started getting downhill ever since the start of orcus labyrinth. I hoped to see something new but there's nothing new. You can replace Hajime with mc and voila here you go. And what's worse? MC is even weaker than Hajime. The author nerfed him too much. The MC was way stronger than Hajime from the start but nah author doesn't want to make him stronger for so called 'good battle scene' which is pretty pathetic in my opinion. It's just a copy-paste of original battle.

And what about system? It's as useless you can get. For information it charges a lot of SP which in my opinion should be free (at least common information should be free in my opinion). Here sell a mana crystal of a strong monster at 400 SP and buy a common cooking stove at 800 SP. You see? Author thinks common house stove should be more expensive than a mana crystal which he risked his life to get.

About relationships, hmm... It's not that bad but I think he started his relationship with Yue a bit too soon i guess. Well I think the MC will go harem route so it's not a problem to me.

The Creed of An Avenger (an Arifureta Fanfic)
2 weeks ago
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FBIHiroUzumaki: What I see here is some who sucks at writing and can’t get good at anything in life so the only way he can get any sense of pleasure is just to make a rating that has no value to anybody. Your rating does not bring up valid points as the author has said, but the thing that makes me even more disappointed is that you call of explaining an excuse. That does not justify anything you have said. He points make 100% more sense to me then yours every will. Please stop making comments that Slander an Authors work. TBH you should just stop reading all together because you can always get what you want and you can’t always get it to be perfect. You make me sick as a person and as a human being. You could just comment and say what the author should have done because blah blah blah. But instead you assume something that is not correct in anyway and make a fun experience bad for another person. If you want to fix it and point it out so bad just make your own fanfics that is better than his and then you can talk bad about another’s work. Just stop saying anything about this person work or anyone work for that matter. Your so called criticism makes me sick. Just stop reading all together, this author does a way better job grammar wise then most and does have more skill than you ever will. Just don’t come back, cause you could probably make it worse for other. Instead of telling people what to do, suggest, and if that does not work just walk away, or don’t said a word and move on. It’s you don’t like this review of your review, than that sucks. At least it does not hurt you in anyway or make an possession of yours get bad reviews for no reason.

DC: The Dragon's Head
2 weeks ago

amaturewriter: I like this but why did the MC tell most of his power in chp...pls dont make him a idiot that explains what he does.......keep him smart and OP..dont make him a perverted pansy ]....also the water weakness...maybe allow him the power to absorb moisture and make anything he touches into sand...ie: like crocodile but OP....add some romance and fluff BUT pls build it........if harem keep it small..................anyway GL............

MHA: Sandman
3 weeks ago
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vSheAintNoGxd: Tbh your kinda annoying tryna make excuses

DC: The Dragon's Head
3 weeks ago

vSheAintNoGxd: Tbh your kinda annoying tryna make excuses

DC: The Dragon's Head
3 weeks ago

Nirvanic_Sun: Author commented on this twice and deleted both of them. Don't know what he said, don't know what to make of it.

DC: The Dragon's Head
3 weeks ago

Nirvanic_Sun: Thought I should talk about the parts of the story the readers didn't like. There were way too many negative comments for there to be only 5 star reviews. I want to see if the author is the type to delete negative reviews.

His wishes. He put entirely needless restrictions on them. He has to look at a forehead to read a mind and has to touch his teeth together to teleport. He's supposed to be a really old police chief that knows how hard the world is to live in... At least his indestructible soul sword is a good wish.

He read thalia al ghuls mind and got scared of what he saw, so he stopped reading it. Immediately afterwards he had to walk up to her and got so scared about not knowing what she wanted to do to him that he accidentally teleported in front of her... Even though he can read minds... One trump card shown. League of shadows are extremely interested in him.

Next he gets tortured to death in a few ways to temper his will. Immediately after it's done, he finds out the shadows killed the rest of the children in his batch of assassins. He gets them to confirm it a few times and then loses it and uses teleportation and soul sword to kill ra's and then get subdued by talia... Another trump card shown for no reason because even if he killed both of them with surprise and luck, they're immortal and he can't surprise them twice.

He saw his friend get executed for a crime he knows he didn't commit in his last life, didn't even try to break him out and save him. He watched talia kill a kid and found out with his mind reading that she enjoys torturing them. He knew that they killed every kid in the batch of assassins except for one, every month, for decades... Yet he lost it when he found out all of the kids in his batch died, even though he saw them for literally 30 seconds before he let talia find out he can teleport... Literally only 30 seconds, then talia took him away.

Author tried to play it off, he told me in the comments that they reminded him of his grandkids in his last life. He said the only think keeping him together through the torture was his desire to save them... Yet not once during the torture when we see his thoughts did he think of them.

Would be a good story if the protagonist is actually a kid. Author agreed that the protagonist was too childish in the first version ofthe story. Even after changing the story, it still has all of the flaws listed above. Author refuses to accept that he still isn't acting like an 80 year old police chief that let his innocent friend get executed by the state

DC: The Dragon's Head
3 weeks ago
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