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Thank you for the chapter It would have been a lot better to hear Scorpio’s complaints and Jason’s reaction a few chapters ago. Not only is the payoff more satisfying, it makes more sense chronologically and prevents what feels like a retcon. I mean give this problem some time to exist and grow. It takes more planning but gives a better result (at least from my point of view)

Thx for the chapter Side note: Unfortunately for the girl was … isn’t correct. It should be Unfortunately for the girl, she was …

Ah ouf 😮‍💨 I would be a shame if I had to stop this one Good to hear and all the best

Thank you for the chapter As for premium I’m sorry but I wouldn’t support you. There are simply other stories I prefer, and this story, while enjoyable, isn’t distinct/unique/interesting enough for me to absolutely want the next chapter. Sorry to be a spoiler, this was without mean intent

Yay 😁

How can I not when it’s so nicely asked Xd Thank you for the chapter

Ok so I’ve noticed something and would like to share it with the author : Jason is becoming a rather bland character In this chapter (and the end of the previous one) we have an embarrassing situation yet we never know what Jason is feeling, at best we can try to deduce it from what he says. But this makes the character poorer. Emotion are an unintentional visceral reaction to a situation, they aren’t supposed to be rational or deduced. Here I would have expected something like “ Jason felt embarrassed” or even better “The questioning gazes of his camarades made him want to drill into the ground” not even making the emotion explicit. This contrasts with the first few chapters, where we could feel Jason’s despair and this also contrasts with Artemis, who is full of character and emotions, and I suspect that this is due to the fact that she can’t talk, so this was done inadvertently. On the other hand, we mostly see what Jason does or says, not what he feels. Let him almost chuckle in a serious situation because of something humorous only he noticed, or have his emotions not be reflected in his actions. Sorry if this seemed harsh, I really just wish author can improve this Thank you for the chapter

Yay she’s back I’m so curious to see the relationship between her and Scorpio Thank you for the chapter

Thank you for the chapter

This is better than a face slap, it’s an anvil drop Thx for the chapter

Thank you for the chapter To tell the truth my favorite chapters are consistently the ones between arcs, like the rewards/consequences of a big fight or the decision of the characters at the end of an adventure since it’s often the world building + character building chapters. All that to say, this chapter was fine by my books, far from useless. The only downside are that these chapters are often less dense but since the chapter was longer this wasn’t a problem. Thanks again 👍

Thank you for the chapter I need more........🤤

Thanks for the chapter I have mixed feeling about the overgeared name though even if orcs might use it since it’s not op enough to be called that (reference to the novel overgeared, which I recommend)

I wonder if the author knows the concept of salary? It is supposed to be pay for your work, not something you can just take back 🤦‍♂️

Thanks for the chapter I love the fact that 13 year old Jason is already amassing style points 😂 He’s indeed mature for his age

Thx for the chapter I’m guessing either old worm or someone high up (like the emperor or someone near him) who doesn’t want a war with the creole and got a revelation the twin could prevent it

Thank you for the chapter Happy to know you’re better now

Thx for the chapter I think the pacing for this chapter was really on point, the action was easy to follow and the rhythm was good My only complaint would be that I don’t like Asthia getting beat up(hurry up Jay) but that has nothing to do with the writing, if anything it proves the writing quality 😉

Take care, health is number one priority so don’t force yourself to make chapters if you can’t